Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

Example: I started using the internet when I was about 13 years old. At that time, I enjoyed browsing different dresses and Barbie dolls online. Additionally, I used to play popular games like Vice City and Mario, which were very entertaining.

Suggestion: Avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' and try to make your answer more structured by using linking words to explain reasons clearly.

Example: I am online almost all day because of my work. Besides work, I also use the internet to communicate with my friends and parents. Overall, I spend about 12 hours online daily.

Suggestion: Improve grammar and sentence clarity. Use linking words to explain the situation logically and avoid incomplete sentences.

Example: Yes, I remember when I was 15 years old, my father did not allow me to use the internet for some time. This was because I spent too much time playing games, browsing websites, and shopping online, so he imposed a strict rule to limit my usage.

Suggestion: Avoid hesitation and filler words. Make your answer more coherent by using proper grammar and linking words to explain your opinion clearly.

Example: Yes, I do spend a lot of time online, but I believe it is productive because I use the internet to research information about the software industry and to learn more about my field.

Suggestion: Try to avoid filler words and make your answer more structured by using linking words to list your activities clearly and concisely.

Example: Without the internet, I would spend my time painting. Additionally, I would explore the city by visiting new restaurants, parks, and shopping centres.

× I started using Internet as a kid, I guess around 13 years of age and I I used to really love browsing about different dresses and different Barbie dolls.

✓ I started using the Internet as a kid, I guess around 13 years of age and I used to really love browsing about different dresses and different Barbie dolls.

The word 'Internet' is a proper noun that requires the definite article 'the' before it. Omitting 'the' before 'Internet' is a common article error. Always use 'the Internet' when referring to it.

× And also we used to play a very popular games such as Vice City and Mario.

✓ And also we used to play very popular games such as Vice City and Mario.

The phrase 'a very popular games' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'games'. The article 'a' should be removed to match the plural noun 'games'. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.

× Currently I'm always online due to my work.

✓ Currently I'm always online due to my work.

No correction needed here as the sentence is grammatically correct.

× So partially it is work and partially I do talk to my friends online and also umm, my parents.

✓ So partially it is work and partially I do talk to my friends online and also, umm, my parents.

No singular/plural error here; sentence is correct. Added a comma after 'also' for clarity but this is punctuation, not grammar problem type listed.

× But yeah. So I would think that I am almost uh, 12 hours online in a day.

✓ But yeah. So I would think that I am online for almost, uh, 12 hours in a day.

The phrase 'I am almost 12 hours online' is awkward and incorrect. The correct expression is 'I am online for almost 12 hours'. This is a sentence structure issue but closest to singular/plural issue as it involves correct use of time expression.

× Yes, I definitely remember one time when I was not allowed to use Internet at my home.

✓ Yes, I definitely remember one time when I was not allowed to use the Internet at my home.

Again, 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. Omitting 'the' before 'Internet' is an article error.

× I guess I was 15 years and I used to play a lot of games and browse through lot of addresses and I used to shop online so my dad had a strict rule of not using Internet for a couple.

✓ I guess I was 15 years old and I used to play a lot of games and browse through a lot of addresses and I used to shop online so my dad had a strict rule of not using the Internet for a couple of days.

Several issues: '15 years' should be '15 years old' to indicate age correctly (singular/plural issue). 'lot of addresses' needs 'a' before 'lot' (article error). 'not using Internet' needs 'the Internet' (article error). 'for a couple' is incomplete; it should be 'for a couple of days' or similar (sentence structure).

× Yes, I think I spent too much time online, but I think it is also productive since I uh, tries to try to browse through some uh, good information on going in the uh, software industry and also, uh, look to get uh, more and more information about uh.

✓ Yes, I think I spend too much time online, but I think it is also productive since I, uh, try to browse through some, uh, good information about the software industry and also, uh, look to get, uh, more and more information about it.

The original sentence mixes past tense 'spent' with present context 'I think'. 'Spent' should be 'spend' to match present tense. 'tries' should be 'try' to agree with 'I'. Also, 'on going in the software industry' is awkward; corrected to 'about the software industry'. This involves past tense and subject-verb agreement issues.

× Without the Internet I think I would mostly paint and also go around the city and explore new restaurants and parks and also umm, good shopping centres.

✓ Without the Internet, I think I would mostly paint and also go around the city and explore new restaurants and parks and also, umm, good shopping centres.

No major grammar error; added commas for clarity but no article error here. Sentence is correct.