Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答中语法有些错误，如“started to use Internet”应为“started using the Internet”。内容较丰富，但句子较长且缺少适当的连接词，建议简化句子结构并使用连接词使表达更自然流畅。

Example: I started using the Internet when I was five years old. Around 20 years ago, my parents bought our first computer, and I began to learn how to surf the Internet and browse websites.

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法错误，如“keep online”应为“stay online”，且表达不够自然。建议使用更地道的表达方式，并注意句子结构的准确性。

Example: Since I bought my own mobile phone in recent years, I stay online almost all day and can contact others whenever I want.

Suggestion: 回答内容具体且结构清晰，但句子“that was around 10 years ago. When I was in middle school.”应合并为一句，避免断句不连贯。建议使用连接词使表达更连贯。

Example: Yes, I remember that about 10 years ago when I was in middle school, my parents strictly prohibited me from using the Internet because they were afraid that the complex information online would affect my studies.

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法和表达不自然的问题，如“used too much Internet”应为“spend too much time online”，且句子重复“I think”。建议简化表达，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇。

Example: Yes, I admit that I spend too much time online. Easy access to my mobile phone has greatly increased my usage, which is not good because it reduces my concentration on studying.

Suggestion: 回答内容具体且表达较好，但“keeping isolated without being disturbed”表达不够自然，建议使用更地道的表达方式。

Example: When I'm offline, I usually lie on the sofa and read my favorite mystery novel series, spending several hours relaxing and enjoying some peaceful time without any disturbances.

× I started to use Internet since I was five years old.

✓ I have been using the Internet since I was five years old.

句中使用了“since”，表示从过去某时开始一直持续到现在，应该用现在完成时而不是一般过去时。

× I started to use Internet since I was five years old.

✓ I started to use the Internet since I was five years old.

Internet前需要加定冠词the，因为Internet是特指的网络。

× I almost keep online all day and contact with others at any time I would like to.

✓ I am almost always online all day and contact others at any time I would like to.

动词keep后面不接online，应使用be动词加形容词online；contact是及物动词，不需要介词with。

× When I was in middle school.

✓ When I was in middle school,

这是一个不完整的句子，缺少主句，应该与前后句合并或补充完整。

× My parents strictly prohibited me from using the Internet because they were afraid that the complex information online would influence my study.

✓ My parents strictly prohibited me from using the Internet because they were afraid that the complex information online would affect my studies.

influence通常用于影响人或事物的行为，affect更适合表示影响学习；study作为不可数名词时指学习行为，复数studies指学科或学习内容。

× I admit that I have used too much Internet.

✓ I admit that I have used the Internet too much.

Internet是不可数名词，不能用too much修饰动词have used，应该将too much放在动词后修饰使用的程度。

× I think the easy access to mobile phone has greatly increased my using time and I think it is not beneficial for me because I have decreased my concentration on study.

✓ I think the easy access to my mobile phone has greatly increased my usage time and I think it is not beneficial for me because I have decreased my concentration on studying.

mobile phone前应加物主代词my；using time表达不自然，改为usage time；concentration后接动名词studying更合适。

× When I'm off the Internet, I'll lie on the sofa and read the mystery novel series I love and spend several hours relaxing my mind and keeping isolated without being disturbed.

✓ When I'm off the Internet, I'll lie on the sofa and read the mystery novel series I love and spend several hours relaxing my mind and staying isolated without being disturbed.

keep isolated用法不当，应该用stay isolated表示保持孤立状态。