Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答不够清晰，语法和表达存在较多错误，建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并用连贯的语言描述开始使用互联网的时间和原因。

Example: I started using the internet when I was a child. I often watched my mother use the computer at her office, which made me very interested. After asking her many times, she finally taught me how to use it.

Suggestion: 回答内容不连贯，表达不清楚，建议直接说明上网频率，并用具体例子支持，同时使用连接词使句子更流畅。

Example: I go online almost every day because computers are very popular now. I usually play computer games or search for interesting information, which I find helpful and enjoyable.

Suggestion: 表达不够准确，语法错误较多，建议用简单句子清楚说明被禁止上网的时间和原因，并避免重复。

Example: Before my exams, my parents did not allow me to use the internet. They wanted me to focus on studying, so I stopped using it during that time.

Suggestion: 回答混乱且语法错误严重，建议简洁明了地表达观点，说明原因，并用连接词使句子连贯。

Example: Sometimes I do spend too much time online because I find it very interesting. However, I realize that spending too much time on the computer can make me feel bad.

Suggestion: 回答不完整且表达不清，建议直接回答问题，说明没有互联网时的活动，并用连贯的句子表达原因。

Example: If I didn't have the internet, I would read books and play outside with my friend Richard. These activities help me relax and protect my eyes from strain.

× It's not inside the Internet when I was a child and when I watched my mother use the computer on the office.

✓ The Internet was not available when I was a child, and when I watched my mother use the computer in the office.

句中“It's not inside the Internet”表达不正确，应使用“There was not the Internet”或“The Internet was not available”来表达过去没有互联网的意思。这里涉及到“there be”结构的错误使用。

× when I watched my mother use the computer on the office.

✓ when I watched my mother use the computer in the office.

介词“on the office”错误，应使用“in the office”表示在办公室内。

× I want to my mother to teach me that.

✓ I wanted my mother to teach me that.

“want to my mother”结构错误，动词“want”后直接接宾语，不加“to”。同时时态应与上下文一致，使用过去时。

× And I bet her.

✓ And I begged her.

“bet her”用词错误，应为“begged her”（请求）。

× I bet her for a long time and it's not she gave other and taught me how to play it.

✓ I begged her for a long time, but she did not give up and taught me how to use it.

句子结构混乱，代词使用错误，应调整为“she did not give up”表示她没有放弃。

× Well, I go and I barely every time, because nowadays a computer is very popular and no one can live without it.

✓ Well, I go online almost every time, because nowadays computers are very popular and no one can live without them.

“barely every time”位置和用词错误，应为“almost every time”。“a computer”应复数“computers”，代词“it”应改为“them”。

× because nowadays a computer is very popular and no one can live without it.

✓ because nowadays computers are very popular and no one can live without them.

“a computer”应使用复数“computers”，因为指的是普遍现象。代词“it”应改为“them”与复数一致。

× You and I think play it helpful.

✓ I think playing it is helpful.

“You and I think play it helpful”结构不正确，应改为“I think playing it is helpful”，主语和谓语搭配正确。

× Well, I think it's before my examination that my parents don't allow.

✓ Well, I think before my examination my parents did not allow me.

时态应为过去时，且“don't allow”应改为“did not allow”。

× They don't allow me to play it because if I don't pass the examination, my parents will eradicate it and I think I should not have been happy, so I don't.

✓ They did not allow me to play because if I didn't pass the examination, my parents would take away the computer, and I would not be happy, so I didn't play.

时态和情态动词使用错误，应使用过去时和虚拟语气表达假设情况。

× Sometimes it's true because I think playing some my interest interesting, the computer was very intriguing me and it's attracted me an author and I think I can't play it.

✓ Sometimes it's true because I think playing games that interest me is very interesting; the computer intrigues me and attracts me, so I think I can't stop playing it.

句子结构混乱，代词和词序错误，需调整为正确的表达方式。

× I will feel very bad. I feel very bad so and I realize it's very spend too much time.

✓ I will feel very bad, so I realize I spend too much time on it.

句子结构不完整，词序错误，应调整为完整且通顺的句子。

× Well, if I read, if I have not Internet, I will watch some books and I can play outside with my friend Richard can make me feel relaxed because if I have spend spend too much time on computer, my eyes will feel very bad and it's very pain painful.

✓ Well, if I don't have the Internet, I will read some books and play outside with my friend Richard, which can make me feel relaxed because if I spend too much time on the computer, my eyes will feel very bad and it will be very painful.

介词和连词使用错误，句子结构混乱，需调整为正确的表达。

× So I.

✓ So I try to balance my time.

句子不完整，缺少谓语，需补充完整表达。