Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer has many fillers like 'uh' and some grammatical errors which make it less natural. Try to avoid repetition and use clear sentence structures. Also, keep your answer concise and directly answer the question with supporting details.

Example: I started using the internet around 7th grade when my mother got her first mobile phone. At that time, I used her phone to play games and watch videos on YouTube.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and incomplete sentences. Try to organize your thoughts before speaking and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid unnecessary words and be specific about your online activities.

Example: I go online very frequently because nowadays most activities are done on the internet. I use it mainly for communication and studying.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical mistakes and some repetition. Try to use correct tenses and avoid repeating words. Also, provide a bit more detail to make your answer richer.

Example: Yes, I remember in August 2024 when the government completely shut down internet access in our country for some time.

Suggestion: Your answer has repetition and some grammatical errors. Try to use varied vocabulary and avoid repeating words. Also, give specific examples to support your opinion.

Example: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I often play games, scroll through Facebook and Instagram, and study online.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid unnecessary words and finish your sentences properly.

Example: Without the internet, I would spend more time with my family, hang out with my friends, and play games with my cousins at home.

× I really don't remember the exact time when I started, uh, using the Internet, but uh, I can recall it. It, uh, maybe in my 7th grade when my mom got the first mobile phone and this time I used her phone and the access to the Internet and play, play the game and watching videos on YouTube.

✓ I really don't remember the exact time when I started using the Internet, but I can recall it. It was maybe in my 7th grade when my mom got the first mobile phone, and at that time I used her phone to access the Internet, play games, and watch videos on YouTube.

The original sentence has tense inconsistency and incorrect verb forms. 'It, uh, maybe' should be 'It was maybe' to indicate past time. 'and this time I used her phone and the access to the Internet and play, play the game and watching videos' is ungrammatical; it should be 'I used her phone to access the Internet, play games, and watch videos.' The verbs 'play' and 'watching' need to be parallel and in base form after 'to' or gerund form consistently. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I go flying frequently in this in the modern generation or you have to do everything online.

✓ I go online frequently in this modern generation because you have to do everything online.

The phrase 'I go flying frequently in this in the modern generation' is incorrect. 'Go flying' means to fly an aircraft, which is not the intended meaning. The correct preposition is 'go online' to indicate accessing the internet. Also, 'in this in the modern generation' is redundant; it should be 'in this modern generation.' This correction clarifies the intended meaning.

× So most of the time I have to, uh, go to online for my, for communication, for umm, for my study purpose, for, uh.

✓ So most of the time I have to go online for communication and for my study purposes.

The phrase 'go to online' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go online' without 'to.' Also, 'for my study purpose' should be pluralized to 'study purposes' to sound natural. Removing unnecessary fillers and correcting prepositions improves sentence clarity.

× Yes, I clearly remember the time when I'm not allowed to use the Internet.

✓ Yes, I clearly remember the time when I was not allowed to use the Internet.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verb tense should be past tense 'was' instead of present tense 'am.' Using 'I'm not allowed' is incorrect here because the event happened in the past. Correcting the tense aligns the sentence with the time frame.

× It's the time of 2024 in August month, our country, our our country as well fully shut down for, uh, no Internet access from the government.

✓ It was in August 2024 when our country completely shut down Internet access by government order.

The original sentence has awkward structure and redundancy ('our country, our our country'). 'It's the time of 2024 in August month' is unnatural; 'It was in August 2024' is better. 'Fully shut down for no Internet access' is unclear; 'completely shut down Internet access' is clearer. The correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, yes, I think I spent too much time online.

✓ Yes, yes, I think I spend too much time online.

The question asks about current habits, so present tense 'spend' is appropriate rather than past tense 'spent.' Using present tense indicates ongoing behavior.

× When I I play games, I scroll almost all the time in Facebook, Instagram and also I studied studied online.

✓ When I play games, I scroll almost all the time on Facebook and Instagram, and I also study online.

The preposition with social media platforms is 'on' not 'in.' Also, 'studied studied' is a repetition and past tense, but the context suggests present tense 'study.' Correcting prepositions and verb tense improves sentence accuracy.

× We told the Internet I spend time with my family, I go to hang out with my friends outside and also I play games with my cousins at home.

✓ Without the Internet, I would spend time with my family, go hang out with my friends outside, and also play games with my cousins at home.

'We told the Internet' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'Without the Internet.' Also, 'I go to hang out' should be 'go hang out' for natural phrasing. Correcting pronouns and sentence structure clarifies meaning.