Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答较为自然且内容具体，但句子结构稍显复杂，部分表达不够简洁。建议简化句子结构，避免冗长，同时注意时态和表达的准确性。

Example: I started using the internet when I was in primary school during a summer vacation. My older sister helped me create my first QQ account.

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题，且最后一句话不连贯。建议注意句子完整性和语法准确性，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

Example: I go online every day because I need to stay connected with my tutor, friends, and family. Since we live in a digital age, using electronic devices is necessary.

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，如“strike my time online”表达不准确。建议使用更准确的词汇和句式，表达更清楚。

Example: Yes, during a summer vacation in junior high school, my father limited my internet use because I had a lot of homework and a busy schedule.

Suggestion: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，如“time scout management”和“the user phone in”不合适。建议使用正确的词汇表达时间管理，并使句子更连贯。

Example: Generally, I spend too much time online because it's hard to control myself. Sometimes I check my phone and lose track of time. However, I am now trying to manage my time better.

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整，如“bomb board information”和句子未完成。建议使用准确表达，避免拼写错误，并完成句子。

Example: Without the internet, I would spend quality time with my parents, like visiting the zoo or planning a trip with my best friends. It would be a good chance to escape the overwhelming information on phones and relax.

× Is a time of technology, so I have to use a electronic device to.

✓ It is a time of technology, so I have to use an electronic device too.

句子缺少主语，应加上it作为形式主语；'a electronic device'中，electronic以元音音素开头，冠词应为'an'；'to'应为'too'，表示也。

× We were still a student in junior high school.

✓ We were still students in junior high school.

主语是复数we，谓语应与复数主语一致，student应改为复数students。

× My schedule was tight and there are a lot of homework, so my father would strike my time online.

✓ My schedule was tight and there was a lot of homework, so my father would limit my time online.

homework是不可数名词，前面应使用单数谓语was；'strike my time online'表达不当，应改为'limit my time online'表示限制上网时间。

× But now I try to improve my time scout management and the user phone in.

✓ But now I try to improve my time management and use my phone less.

原句表达不清，'time scout management'和'the user phone in'均不符合英语习惯，应改为'time management'和'use my phone less'。

× I think it's a great time to escape the bomb board information in the phones and to relax and.

✓ I think it's a great time to escape the bombardment of information on the phones and to relax.

'bomb board information'应为' bombardment of information'，表示信息轰炸；句子末尾缺少内容，应补充完整。