Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答不够连贯，句子过于简短且断断续续，缺少连词和具体细节。建议使用连贯的句子结构，增加时间和情境描述，使回答更自然流畅。

Example: I started using the internet when I was a little kid because my parents had just set up the first computer in our house, so I had the chance to explore it from an early age.

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，句子结构不完整。建议注意语法正确性，使用完整句子，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

Example: I go online every day because I need to find important information for my studies. Since I became an adult, I have owned a private mobile phone and a MacBook, which make it convenient for me to access the internet anytime.

Suggestion: 回答表达不清，句子断裂且用词不当。建议使用完整句子，明确表达时间限制和感受，并使用连接词使内容连贯。

Example: Yes, I can vividly remember that when I was a little kid, my mother often supervised my computer usage and limited my online time to about two hours every day, which felt quite restrictive to me.

Suggestion: 回答语法错误较多，表达不完整且不连贯。建议使用完整句子，清晰表达观点和原因，并用连接词连接句子。

Example: Yes, definitely. I spend a lot of time online, which reduces the time I have for exercise. As a result, I sometimes feel overweight.

Suggestion: 回答中断断续续，语法和词汇使用不准确。建议使用连贯的句子，准确表达活动和感受，避免断句。

Example: If I had no access to the internet, I would do more exercise, such as hanging out or jogging in the natural park to appreciate the beautiful scenery, which would be relaxing and refreshing.

× I started using the internet. Then I was a little kid.

✓ I started using the internet when I was a little kid.

句子中“Then I was a little kid.”是一个不完整的句子，应该与前句合并，使用过去时态表达过去的时间点。

× And at that time.

✓ At that time,

“And at that time.”是不完整的句子，应改为短语并与后文连贯。

× My parents just built the first computer in our house and I used it.

✓ My parents had just built the first computer in our house and I used it.

这里描述过去某一时间点之前发生的动作，应该用过去完成时。

× Actually, I do a lie everyday because I need to look at important information for my studies.

✓ Actually, I go online every day because I need to look at important information for my studies.

“do a lie”是错误表达，应使用“go online”表示上网。

× Since I became an adult, I have under a private mobile phone and a MacBook.

✓ Since I became an adult, I have had a private mobile phone and a MacBook.

“have under”用法错误，应为“have had”表示拥有。

× Which make it convenient for me to access in the internet anytime.

✓ Which makes it convenient for me to access the internet anytime.

关系代词“which”指代单数，谓语动词应为“makes”，且“access in the internet”应改为“access the internet”。

× Oh, yes. I can vividly remember.

✓ Oh, yes. I can vividly remember that

“I can vividly remember.”后面应接宾语从句，补充内容。

× my mother often supervised on my time of using a computer for going online.

✓ my mother often supervised my time using the computer to go online.

“supervised on”用法错误，应直接用“supervised”，且“time of using a computer for going online”表达不自然。

× Maybe chatter. Two hours every day.

✓ Maybe about two hours every day.

“chatter”用法错误，应使用“about”表示大约。

× It could be so restrict for me.

✓ It could be so restrictive for me.

“restrict”是动词，形容词应为“restrictive”。

× I think plenty of time devoted to the online.

✓ I think I spend plenty of time online.

“plenty of time devoted to the online”表达不自然，应改为“spend plenty of time online”。

× Reduce, Opportunity of my exercise hours.

✓ which reduces my opportunity to exercise.

“Reduce, Opportunity of my exercise hours.”语法错误，应改为完整句子并正确使用介词。

× So I sometimes feel of. Overweight.

✓ So I sometimes feel overweight.

“feel of”用法错误，应直接用“feel overweight”。

× If I have no. Access to the internet.

✓ If I have no access to the internet,

句子不完整，应与后文连贯。

× I will do more exercise like hanging out.

✓ I will do more exercise like hanging out with friends.

“hanging out”后应补充内容使句子完整。

× Maybe Justia jogging in the. Natural park to appreciate the beautiful, sceneries.

✓ Maybe just jogging in the natural park to appreciate the beautiful scenery.

“Justia”拼写错误，应为“just”，“sceneries”复数不常用，改为“scenery”。

× It could be relaxing and refresh.

✓ It could be relaxing and refreshing.

“refresh”应为形容词“refreshing”修饰主语。