Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt chưa tự nhiên, ví dụ như "in 20 and 12" nên là "in 2012". Bạn cũng nên tránh câu trả lời bị dang dở và thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy cố gắng sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và rõ ràng hơn.

Example: I started using the Internet in 2012 when I was a university student because many of my friends were already online. Initially, I mainly used it for entertainment and to keep in touch with friends by browsing Facebook, Yahoo, and YouTube. Since then, the Internet has become an essential part of my daily life.

Suggestion: Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì đúng (ví dụ "caught up" nên là "catch up"), và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "everyday" (dùng "every day" khi nói tần suất). Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, tránh câu bị dang dở và dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

Example: I usually go online every day, especially during my breaks or free time. For example, I often catch up on the latest news to stay informed. In addition, I use social media to keep in touch with my family and friends. Occasionally, I watch YouTube videos related to my hobbies, such as cooking or learning new skills.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng có một số lỗi nhỏ về từ vựng và ngữ pháp, ví dụ "using the Internet doing exams" nên là "using the Internet during exams". Ngoài ra, cụm từ "ensure finance" không phù hợp, bạn nên dùng "ensure fairness". Hãy chú ý chọn từ chính xác và câu hoàn chỉnh.

Example: I vividly remember that whenever I attended exams at school, I was not allowed to use the Internet at all. Using the Internet during exams was considered cheating, and if I was caught, my exam could be cancelled and I would face strict penalties. This rule was in place to ensure fairness and prevent any fraudulent actions.

Suggestion: Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì đúng ("spent" nên là "spend") và tránh câu trả lời bị dang dở như câu cuối. Hãy sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Example: No, I don't think I spend too much time online because I usually use the Internet during my free time, such as breaks or after finishing my work. This amount of time is enough for me to stay in touch with my friends and family and to relax without affecting my daily responsibilities. Therefore, I believe it is reasonable.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu chưa rõ ràng, ví dụ "I can do" nên là "I could do", và câu "such as I can't practice writing English..." không hợp lý vì bạn liệt kê những việc bạn không thể làm mà lại nói là hoạt động offline. Hãy sửa lại câu trả lời cho rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn.

Example: If I didn't have the Internet, I could do various offline activities because my daily routine does not rely heavily on it. For example, I could practice writing English in my notebook, learn a new language through books, or cook meals for my family, which I find enjoyable and rewarding.

× I started using the Internet in 20 and 12 when I was a university student because of my friend's suggestions.

✓ I started using the Internet in 2012 when I was a university student because of my friend's suggestions.

The year '20 and 12' is incorrectly split and should be written as '2012' to correctly represent the year in past tense context.

× Initially, I primarily used it for entertainment and keep in touch with my friends, such as browsing Facebook, Yahoo, and YouTube.

✓ Initially, I primarily used it for entertainment and keeping in touch with my friends, such as browsing Facebook, Yahoo, and YouTube.

After 'used it for', the verb should be in the gerund form '-ing' to indicate purpose or function, so 'keep' should be 'keeping'.

× Since then, the Internet has become.

✓ Since then, the Internet has become an essential part of my life.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object or complement after 'has become'. It needs a noun or adjective to complete the meaning.

× I usually go online everyday, especially during my breaks or when I have free time.

✓ I usually go online every day, especially during my breaks or when I have free time.

The word 'everyday' is an adjective meaning 'commonplace'; the correct adverb form 'every day' should be used to indicate frequency.

× For example, I often caught up on the latest news to stay informal.

✓ For example, I often catch up on the latest news to stay informed.

The verb tense should be present tense 'catch up' to match 'often' indicating habitual action; also, 'informal' is incorrect here and should be 'informed'.

× Occasionally, I watch videos on YouTube related to my hobbies such as cooking or learning skill which.

✓ Occasionally, I watch videos on YouTube related to my hobbies such as cooking or learning skills.

The phrase 'learning skill which' is incorrect; 'skills' should be plural and 'which' is unnecessary and should be removed.

× I was not allowed to use Internet at all.

✓ I was not allowed to use the Internet at all.

The noun 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to the global network.

× Using the Internet doing exams was considered cheating and if I was caught, my exam could be cancelled and I would face strict penalties.

✓ Using the Internet during exams was considered cheating, and if I was caught, my exam could be cancelled and I would face strict penalties.

The phrase 'Using the Internet doing exams' is awkward; 'during exams' correctly indicates the time of the action.

× This rule was in place to ensure finance and prevent any fraudulent actions.

✓ This rule was in place to ensure fairness and prevent any fraudulent actions.

The word 'finance' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is likely 'fairness'.

× No, I don't think I spent too much time online because I usually use the Internet during my free times, such as during breaks or after finishing my work.

✓ No, I don't think I spend too much time online because I usually use the Internet during my free time, such as during breaks or after finishing my work.

The verb tense should be present tense 'spend' to match 'don't think' and habitual action; also, 'free times' should be 'free time' as an uncountable noun.

× This amount of time is enough for me to stay in touch with my friends and families and to relax without affecting my daily responsibilities.

✓ This amount of time is enough for me to stay in touch with my friends and family and to relax without affecting my daily responsibilities.

The word 'families' is plural but should be singular 'family' when referring to one's own family collectively.

× Therefore, I believe it does not.

✓ Therefore, I believe it does not affect my daily life.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object or complement after 'does not' to complete the meaning.

× If I didn't have the Internet, I can do various offline activities because my daily routine does not rely heavily on it, such as I can't practice writing English in my notebook, learning a new language through book, or cook meal for my family, which is enjoyable and rewarding.

✓ If I didn't have the Internet, I could do various offline activities because my daily routine does not rely heavily on it, such as practicing writing English in my notebook, learning a new language through books, or cooking meals for my family, which are enjoyable and rewarding.

The modal verb 'can' should be 'could' in the conditional sentence; also, the activities should be in gerund form to parallel structure; 'book' should be plural 'books'; 'cook meal' should be 'cooking meals'; 'which is' should be 'which are' to agree with plural activities.