Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer needs to be more structured and clear. Start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors to make your answer natural and effective.

Example: I started using the internet at a very early age. Initially, I accessed it through mobile data using SIM cards, which was quite slow. As a result, I often had to wait a long time for pages to load, making the experience quite frustrating.

Suggestion: Try to organize your answer with clear linking words and avoid run-on sentences. Use specific examples and correct grammar to improve clarity and coherence.

Example: I usually go online whenever I get free time. For example, I scroll through my social media accounts, listen to my favorite music, watch movies, and chat with my friends. Additionally, I check various news sources to stay updated about events happening around the world.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific reasons and examples using linking words.

Example: Yes, I wasn't allowed to use the internet during my exams because my parents wanted me to concentrate better. They believed that avoiding the internet would help me focus on my studies without distractions.

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more fluent and connected by using linking words. Also, avoid sentence fragments and be specific about how you plan to reduce your online time.

Example: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. Therefore, I need to focus more on my work and improve my health by engaging in other hobbies instead of playing games or scrolling through social media.

Suggestion: Your answer should be more coherent and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples of alternative sources of knowledge.

Example: Without the internet, it would be much harder for me to gain knowledge. However, I would rely on other sources such as newspapers, magazines, and books to learn and improve myself for a better future.

× I started using Internet at very early age.

✓ I started using the Internet at a very early age.

The noun 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the' because it is a specific entity. Also, 'very early age' needs the indefinite article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.

× As we used to we we had to use Internet using SIM cards.

✓ As we used to, we had to use the Internet using SIM cards.

The sentence had a repeated phrase 'we we' which is incorrect. Also, 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'used to' should be followed by a comma to separate clauses clearly.

× From mobile data and it was quite slow.

✓ From mobile data, and it was quite slow.

A comma is needed after 'mobile data' to separate the clauses properly. No article error here, but punctuation improves clarity.

× We had to wait a long time for the data to open, so it was really hectic.

✓ We had to wait a long time for the data to load, so it was really hectic.

The phrase 'data to open' is incorrect; 'data to load' is the appropriate collocation when referring to internet data. This improves sentence clarity and correctness.

× I usually go online whenever I get free time like scrolling through social media account as well as playing my favorite music and movies along with setting with my friends and scrolling through different news media source to get me updated about the situation that is going all around the world.

✓ I usually go online whenever I get free time, like scrolling through social media accounts, playing my favorite music and movies, spending time with my friends, and scrolling through different news media sources to keep myself updated about the situations happening all around the world.

Several preposition and pluralization errors: 'social media account' should be plural 'accounts'; 'setting with my friends' is incorrect, should be 'spending time with my friends'; 'news media source' should be plural 'sources'; 'get me updated' should be 'keep myself updated'. Also, commas are added for clarity.

× I wasn't allowed to use the Internet when I had my exams with my parents are expected me to use the Internet so that I could concentrate more on my exam rather than the things that are going on.

✓ I wasn't allowed to use the Internet when I had my exams because my parents expected me to use the Internet so that I could concentrate more on my exam rather than the things that were going on.

The phrase 'with my parents are expected me' is incorrect; it should be 'because my parents expected me'. Also, 'things that are going on' should be in past tense 'things that were going on' to match the past context.

× The Internet is calling my phones mindlessly without completing my tax.

✓ The Internet keeps calling my phone mindlessly without me completing my tasks.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. 'Calling my phones' is incorrect; it should be 'calling my phone'. 'Without completing my tax' is unclear; likely intended 'without me completing my tasks'. The verb 'keeps calling' better expresses continuous action.

× Yes, I think I spend too much time online so I need to focus more on my other work rather than online activities and improve my health and other hobbies that I like doing instead of using.

✓ Yes, I think I spend too much time online, so I need to focus more on my other work rather than online activities and improve my health and other hobbies that I like doing instead of using the internet.

The sentence is missing the object after 'using'. Adding 'the internet' completes the meaning. Also, a comma is added after 'online' to separate clauses.

× Things online such as playing games and scrolling. Through social media.

✓ Things online such as playing games and scrolling through social media.

The sentence is fragmented. 'Scrolling.' and 'Through social media.' should be combined into one sentence for clarity and correctness.

× Without Internet it will be much harder for me to gain different knowledge, but I would.

✓ Without the Internet, it would be much harder for me to gain different knowledge, but I would use other methods.

'Without Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. Also, the sentence is incomplete; adding 'use other methods' completes the thought. The tense 'would' fits the hypothetical situation.

× Use different. Bad form such as newspaper and medias and as well as different books to gain knowledge.

✓ Use different forms such as newspapers, media, and different books to gain knowledge.

'Bad form' is incorrect; likely intended 'forms'. 'Newspaper' should be plural 'newspapers'. 'Medias' is incorrect; 'media' is plural and uncountable. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× For the betterment of my future.

✓ This is for the betterment of my future.

The original phrase is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. Adding 'This is' completes the sentence.