Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors which affect naturalness and effectiveness. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific supporting details. Avoid filler words and ensure sentences are complete and coherent.

Example: I started using the internet when I was about five years old. My mother bought a computer for our home, and that was my first experience with the internet.

Suggestion: Your response is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Aim to answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words to improve coherence.

Example: I go online every day because many tasks require internet access. For example, I submit my homework through Google Classroom and prepare PowerPoint presentations.

Suggestion: Your answer has some good content but is affected by unclear phrasing and grammar errors. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide a clear, concise response with specific details.

Example: When I was younger, my mother once restricted my internet use because I was spending too much time online, which affected my health negatively.

Suggestion: Your answer is fragmented and lacks coherence. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas. Provide specific examples to support your opinion.

Example: I think it depends. Sometimes I spend a lot of time online because I need to submit homework and complete compulsory tasks. However, I also spend time online for enjoyment, which can take up a long time.

Suggestion: Your answer is incomplete and does not address the question. Always provide a direct response with supporting details to demonstrate your ability to communicate effectively.

Example: Without the internet, I would spend more time reading books and engaging in outdoor activities like sports or meeting friends.

× Wow, being a. Set generation individuals I'm start using Internet when I was really really young maybe like.

✓ Wow, being a set generation individual, I started using the Internet when I was really, really young, maybe like five years old.

The original sentence has fragmented structure and incorrect verb tense. 'I'm start' should be 'I started' to match past tense. 'Set generation individuals' should be 'set generation individual' for singular agreement. Also, 'Internet' needs the definite article 'the'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Photo five years old I just in contact with Internet when my mom bought me.

✓ At five years old, I first came into contact with the Internet when my mom bought it for me.

The sentence lacks proper tense and structure. 'Photo five years old' is unclear and should be 'At five years old'. 'I just in contact' is incorrect; it should be 'I first came into contact'. 'Bought me' is incomplete; it should be 'bought it for me'. The sentence is corrected to past tense and proper phrasing.

× While I usually gone on lights every day since.

✓ I usually go online every day.

'Gone on lights' is incorrect and unclear. The correct phrase is 'go online'. Also, 'since' is unnecessary here and incomplete without a time reference. The sentence is corrected to present simple tense to match the habitual action.

× Numerous of business systems require having.

✓ Numerous business systems require having access to the Internet.

'Numerous of' is incorrect; 'numerous' should be followed directly by a plural noun without 'of'. The sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity, so 'access to the Internet' is added for meaning.

× Interaction using the Internet like I need to submitting my homework using the Google Classroom or preparing the PowerPoints.

✓ Interaction using the Internet, like when I need to submit my homework using Google Classroom or prepare PowerPoint presentations.

'Interaction using the Internet like I need to submitting' is ungrammatical. 'Submitting' should be 'submit' after 'need to'. 'Preparing the PowerPoints' is better as 'prepare PowerPoint presentations'. The sentence is rephrased for grammatical correctness and clarity.

× Now it becomes the situation becomes better when I'm growing older.

✓ Now the situation has become better as I am growing older.

The original sentence is repetitive and awkward. 'It becomes the situation becomes better' is incorrect. The corrected sentence uses present perfect 'has become' and proper conjunction 'as' to indicate cause.

× But when I was young, I really remember that one time my mom's got me because of.

✓ But when I was young, I really remember one time my mom scolded me because of it.

'Mom's got me' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'mom scolded me'. The sentence is corrected to past tense and completed with 'because of it' for clarity.

× Over using the Internet and causing me to have an really bad physical well-being.

✓ Overusing the Internet and causing me to have really bad physical health.

'Over using' should be 'overusing' as one word. 'An really bad' is incorrect; 'an' should be removed before 'really'. 'Physical well-being' is better expressed as 'physical health' in this context.

× Sometimes I really need. Using online resources to submit my homework and finish my personal stuff which is in compulsory.

✓ Sometimes I really need to use online resources to submit my homework and finish my personal tasks which are compulsory.

'Need. Using' is incorrect; it should be 'need to use'. 'Stuff' is informal; 'tasks' is more appropriate. 'Which is in compulsory' is incorrect; it should be 'which are compulsory' to agree in number and correct preposition.

× Wow, sometimes it really takes me a long time for enjoying.

✓ Sometimes it really takes me a long time to enjoy it.

'For enjoying' is incorrect; the correct form is 'to enjoy'. The sentence is rephrased for natural English expression.