Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は基本的に明確ですが、文法の誤り（"an exciting way"の冠詞の欠如）と自然な表現の不足があります。より流暢で正確な英語を使うために、冠詞の使い方に注意し、文を少し簡潔にすると良いでしょう。

Example: I first started using the Internet in middle school through my mobile phone. It was an exciting way to search for information and stay connected with my friends.

Suggestion: 文法の誤り（"have really rely"は"really rely on"が正しい）と不自然な表現（"scroll this social media"）があります。より自然な表現に直し、接続詞を使って文の流れを良くしましょう。

Example: I go online throughout the day because I really rely on the Internet for both personal and professional reasons. Especially in my free time, I tend to scroll through social media, which is a habit I would like to change.

Suggestion: 文法と語彙の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。例えば、"an access"は"access"で十分で、"can easy search"は"could easily search"が正しいです。また、"So January it was normal to prohibit"は意味不明なので、明確に説明しましょう。

Example: Yes, I remember not being allowed to use the Internet during school exams because if we had access, we could easily search for answers. Therefore, it was normal to prohibit Internet use during that time.

Suggestion: "growing the screen"は誤りで、"staring at the screen"が正しい表現です。また、文の繰り返しを避け、より自然な表現を使いましょう。

Example: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, mainly because social media is addictive. Sometimes, I find myself staring at the screen for hours without realizing it, and I want to reduce this habit.

Suggestion: "hardly imagine"は"can hardly imagine"が正しい表現です。また、"alternative way"は"an alternative way"と冠詞が必要です。より自然な表現に直しましょう。

Example: I can hardly imagine a world without the Internet, but if I had no Internet, I would have to find an alternative way to stay connected with my friends and family.

× It was new and exciting way to search information or stay connected with my friends.

✓ It was a new and exciting way to search for information or stay connected with my friends.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'new and exciting way' and the verb 'search' requires the preposition 'for' when followed by 'information'. Adding 'a' and 'for' corrects the sentence structure and meaning.

× I have really rely on the Internet.

✓ I really rely on the Internet.

The phrase 'have really rely' is incorrect because 'rely' should be in the base form after 'have' only when used as a perfect tense verb ('have relied'). Here, the intended meaning is present simple, so 'have' should be removed.

× I tend to scroll this social media which I would like to change.

✓ I tend to scroll through social media, which I would like to change.

The verb 'scroll' is usually followed by the preposition 'through' when referring to content. Also, 'this social media' is incorrect; 'social media' is uncountable and does not take 'this' here. Adding a comma before 'which' improves sentence clarity.

× Yes, I remember the time I was not allowed to use Internet.

✓ Yes, I remember the time I was not allowed to use the Internet.

The noun 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to the global network. Omitting 'the' is a common error.

× During the exam at school.

✓ It was during the exam at school.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a verb. Adding 'It was' completes the sentence structure.

× This was because if we had an access to the Internet, we can easy search for answers.

✓ This was because if we had access to the Internet, we could easily search for answers.

'An access' is incorrect; 'access' is uncountable and does not take 'an'. Also, 'can' should be 'could' to match the past conditional, and 'easy' should be the adverb 'easily' modifying 'search'.

× So January it was normal to prohibit.

✓ So, in January, it was normal to prohibit it.

The original sentence is unclear and lacks proper structure. Adding prepositions and clarifying the object improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Sometimes I find myself growing the screen for hours without notice.

✓ Sometimes I find myself staring at the screen for hours without noticing.

'Growing the screen' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'staring at the screen'. Also, 'without notice' should be 'without noticing' to correctly express the action.

× And I find I want to reduce the time.

✓ And I find that I want to reduce the time I spend online.

The sentence is incomplete and vague. Adding 'that' and specifying 'the time I spend online' clarifies the meaning.

× I hardly imagine the world without Internet, but if I had no Internet, I would have to find alternative way to stay connected with my friends or family.

✓ I can hardly imagine the world without the Internet, but if I had no Internet, I would have to find an alternative way to stay connected with my friends or family.

'Hardly imagine' needs the auxiliary 'can' to be correct. 'Internet' requires 'the'. 'Alternative way' needs the article 'an' before it.