Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 你的回答有些语法错误和表达不自然，比如“have a computer in my family”应为“my family had a computer”。建议注意时态一致性和句子连贯性，避免断句过短。

Example: I started using the Internet when I was in primary school because my family had a computer. After school, I would come home and play games online.

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不流畅，如“just a seldom went online”应为“I seldom went online”。建议使用连贯的句子并注意词序。

Example: When I was in primary school, I went online every day after coming home. However, as I have grown up, I seldom go online because I think playing games is not useful for me.

Suggestion: 回答中语法错误较多，句子不连贯。建议使用完整句子表达事件的时间、原因和结果，并注意时态一致。

Example: Yes, I remember once when I came home from primary school, I locked my room door and played games on the Internet. I forgot to have dinner with my family, which made my grandparents angry.

Suggestion: 回答中时态混用且表达不够准确。建议注意时态一致，使用更自然的表达方式。

Example: When I was in primary school, I think I spent too much time online because I always played games after coming home. But now that I have grown up, I use the Internet more appropriately.

Suggestion: 回答内容不够清晰，语法错误较多，句子不完整。建议理清思路，使用完整句子表达假设和具体活动。

Example: Now that I am in college, I tried to live without the Internet for a day. I left my phone in my dormitory and spent time hanging out with my friends and studying in the library at 9 o'clock.

× At that time I have a computer in my family.

✓ At that time I had a computer in my family.

这里描述的是过去的情况，应该使用过去时态'had'，而不是现在时态'have'。

× And after. I come home.

✓ And after I came home.

这里描述的是过去发生的动作，应该使用过去时态'came'，而不是现在时态'come'。

× I open the the computer and play the games on the Internet.

✓ I open the computer and play games on the Internet.

'the the'是重复错误，应该去掉一个'the'。另外，'play the games'中'games'前不需要定冠词'the'，因为这里泛指游戏。

× When I was in primary school, I went online every day after I came home.

✓ When I was in primary school, I went online every day after I came home.

该句时态正确，无需修改。

× But as I've grown up. I just a seldom went online because I thought.

✓ But as I've grown up, I seldom went online because I thought.

'seldom'是频率副词，应该放在动词前面，且句子中'a seldom'搭配错误，应去掉'a'。

× Yes, I remembered once I came home from my primary school and I locked in my room door.

✓ Yes, I remember once I came home from my primary school and I was locked in my room.

'remembered'是过去时，描述回忆时应使用现在时'remember'。'locked in my room door'表达不正确，应该是被动语态'was locked in my room'。

× Open the computer and play the game on the Internet.

✓ I opened the computer and played games on the Internet.

句子缺少主语和时态，应该补充主语'I'并使用过去时态。

× And I forgot to. Have a dinner with my family and that time my grandparents are angry.

✓ And I forgot to have dinner with my family and at that time my grandparents were angry.

'have'不需要大写，'a dinner'应为不可数名词'dinner'，'are angry'应改为过去时'were angry'。

× If I was in primary school, I think I spent too much time on line because I always play the games on the Internet after I came home.

✓ When I was in primary school, I think I spent too much time online because I always played games on the Internet after I came home.

这里不是条件句，应该用时间状语从句'When I was in primary school'。'play'应改为过去时'played'。

× But now as I grown up, I think I use the Internet properly.

✓ But now as I have grown up, I think I use the Internet properly.

'as I grown up'缺少助动词，应该是'as I have grown up'。

× One day I just had to check how I can leave without the Internet, so I just forgot my phone in my dominant room and I just hang out with my friends also.

✓ One day I just had to check how I could live without the Internet, so I just forgot my phone in my dormitory room and I just hung out with my friends also.

'can leave'应为过去时态'could live'。'dominant room'应为'dormitory room'。'hang out'过去式为'hung out'。

× At 9:00 to a studying in library.

✓ At 9:00, I went to study in the library.

原句结构不完整，缺少主语和谓语，且表达不清晰，应该补充完整句子。