Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and clear: start with a topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct basic grammar (e.g., past tense and word choice) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'so' to connect ideas.

Example: Yes. My parents encouraged me to share from a young age. For example, they taught me to offer snacks to classmates so I could make friends and be kind to others.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and list specific items with brief reasons. Use correct verb forms and linking words like 'for example' or 'such as' to make your answer coherent and concise.

Example: I usually share food and small gifts with my friends. For example, I often bring snacks to class or give a book to someone who likes reading.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give specific categories with brief explanations. Avoid irrelevant words and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'toothbrush', 'password', 'bank account'). Use linking words like 'because' to explain why.

Example: Personal items should not be shared. For example, you should not share your toothbrush, passwords, or bank account details because they are private and could cause hygiene or security problems.

Suggestion: Start with a clear statement about a recent example, then give one specific detail about how you shared (method or content). Use past tense for completed actions and linking words like 'then' or 'so'.

Example: Yes. Recently I finished reading a book and shared a summary with my friends. I sent them the main ideas in a message so they could decide whether to read it too.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence naming the person, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Keep sentences concise and correct repetition.

Example: I would share good news with my mother first because she always supports and encourages me. After telling her, I would call my close friend to celebrate together.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and specific examples of news (e.g., personal achievements, job offers, health updates). Use linking words like 'for example' and avoid repetition. Keep it to two to three short sentences.

Example: I usually share positive personal news with my friends. For example, I tell them about achievements, interesting social media posts, or useful technology tips that might help them.

× Uh, my parents choice me to share their food or or meals or snacks with the people that it's making me to sure to help to make a friend. I help them help me.

✓ Uh, my parents taught me to share their food, meals, or snacks with other people so I could make friends. I try to help them and they help me.

Errors include incorrect verb choice ('choice' instead of past tense 'taught'), awkward clause structure ('that it's making me to sure to help to make a friend'), and redundant or unclear phrases. Use the correct past tense verb 'taught' for instruction received in childhood (Grammar Problem Type ID 5). Simplify clauses: 'so I could make friends' expresses purpose. Remove redundant words and ensure subject-verb agreement and clear pronoun references (Problems: 5 and 26). Suggestion: learn common verbs for teaching/learning and practice forming simple purpose clauses with 'so' or 'to'.

× All of the good things I will share with my friends such as the foods, snacks, meal and anything say who can give goods for us. Therefore I'm always share all things with us.

✓ I share good things with my friends, such as food, snacks, and meals, and anything that could be useful to us. Therefore I always share things with them.

Problems: misuse of future tense 'I will share' where a habitual present is required (Grammar Problem Type ID 6) and incorrect verb form 'I'm always share' (should be 'I always share') which is a present continuous vs simple present issue (ID 10/6). Also pluralization ('foods' -> 'food') and unclear relative clause 'anything say who can give goods for us' should be 'anything that could be useful to us'. Suggestion: use simple present to describe habitual actions and use correct relative pronouns ('that').

× I think there there is some of things that cannot be to share with us, such as the tooth toothbrush or this password and the counts of the account bank. It is not a good idea to share, to share them with their with their friends or family. It's just a special personality, sacred and special, especially performance and fishes.

✓ I think there are some things that should not be shared, such as a toothbrush, passwords, and bank account details. It is not a good idea to share these with friends or family because they are private and personal.

Errors: duplicate 'there there' and wrong verb number 'is' used with plural 'some things' (There be issue, ID 3). Incorrect articles and noun forms ('the tooth toothbrush', 'the counts of the account bank') and awkward phrasing ('special personality, sacred and special, especially performance and fishes') which are meaningless. Use plural verb 'are' with 'some things' and correct nouns: 'a toothbrush', 'passwords', 'bank account details'. Explain why: these items are private. Suggestion: practice 'there is/there are' agreement and use common collocations for personal items.

× I think I am reading a book and when I finish I book I I share the old information about this book with my friends to get a good news and a good information. Help us and help them.

✓ I am reading a book, and when I finish it I will share the information from the book with my friends to give them good news and useful information.

Errors: tense inconsistency and missing object pronoun ('when I finish I book' should be 'when I finish it') (Present tense issue ID 6 and Future tense ID 7). Use 'I will share' for a future action after finishing. 'Old information' is unclear; 'information from the book' is clearer. Also fix article usage ('a good information' -> 'useful information'). Suggestion: use 'finish it' for verbs with objects and choose simple future 'will' for intended future actions.

× My mother is always the best person to share a good day information and a good news with her and after that I because it is always support me and support me in every in every environment. Therefore after after my mom my friend, my my special friend, I nearly special friend can share the information and and good person.

✓ My mother is always the first person I want to share good news with because she always supports me in every situation. After my mother, I share news with my close friend.

Problems: incorrect pronoun placement and redundancy ('to share a good day information and a good news with her' should be 'I want to share good news with her') (ID 12 and 26). Repetition 'support me and support me', 'after after my mom my friend, my my special friend' needs simplification. Use correct word order: subject + verb + object ('I want to share news with my mother'). Suggestion: practice simple sentences to express preferences and avoid repeating words.

× I am sharing the I am always sharing with my friend and good news they such as the the post on we are share on them based on their social media or a technology information. Sometimes in the healthy and and support support news official for each other and to help each other and support each other.

✓ I always share good news with my friends, such as posts on social media or information about technology. Sometimes we also share health and support-related news to help and support each other.

Errors: redundant and incorrect continuous tense 'I am sharing the I am always sharing' where simple present 'I always share' is correct for habitual actions (Present tense issue ID 6). Article misuse ('a technology information' -> 'information about technology') and awkward noun phrases ('healthy and and support support news official') need correction. Suggestion: use simple present for routines, choose correct noun phrases ('posts on social media'), and avoid repetition.