Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the answer more concise, correct verb tense and reduce hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples and a brief result or feeling. Use linking words like "for example" or "so" to connect ideas.

Example: Yes — my parents taught me to share from an early age. For example, they encouraged my siblings and me to share food, books and study notes with classmates, so we learned to be generous and get along well with others.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a topic sentence, fix grammar and word choice, and avoid filler words. Provide a specific example and explain why sharing is helpful, using linking words like "especially" or "because".

Example: I like to share homemade food with my neighbours and friends, especially while living alone abroad. For example, bringing a cake to a neighbour helped me start conversations and build closer friendships.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and specific examples, avoid repetitions and hesitations. Explain briefly why those items shouldn't be shared, using linking words like "because" or "so" to make the answer coherent.

Example: I think personal items should not be shared because of hygiene and privacy concerns. For example, I avoid sharing clothing or toothbrushes with others because they are intimate and used daily.

Suggestion: Be concise and correct minor grammar (e.g., "next-door neighbours"). Use linking words like "and" or "so" to connect events, and include one clear result or reaction to enrich the answer.

Example: Yes — last week I baked a small cake and shared it with my next-door neighbours. They said they really enjoyed it and later brought us a small box of biscuits to thank me.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two reasons why you share with that person. Correct wording (e.g., "it would always be my husband") and avoid fillers. Use linking words like "because" to explain.

Example: I would always share good news with my husband first because his encouragement helps me stay confident. I usually tell my parents next, since their support matters a lot to me.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and finish your thought. Give specific examples of news and explain why you share it, using linking words like "so" or "because".

Example: I usually share personal achievements and important life events with my friends, such as getting a promotion or relationship problems, because they can offer advice and emotional support.

× They always encourage me and both my sister and brother to share things, especially when we were young.

✓ They always encouraged me and both my sister and brother to share things, especially when we were young.

The rest of the sentence refers to the past ('when we were young'), so the verb should be in the past tense. Using 'encourage' (present) with a past context is inconsistent. Change to 'encouraged' to match past tense. Suggestion: Match verb tense to the time frame; since 'when we were young' is past, use past verbs.

× At the moment, I enjoy sharing, uh. Foods with my neighbors and friends, especially when living alone in a foreign country.

✓ At the moment, I enjoy sharing food with my neighbors and friends, especially when I am living alone in a foreign country.

Use 'food' (uncountable) rather than plural 'foods' for general sharing. Also the clause 'when living alone' is missing the subject; include 'I am' to form a complete present continuous clause. Suggestion: use uncountable nouns for general items and include the subject for -ing clauses.

× We do not have much friends, so I think it's a ideal way to make new friends and close relationships.

✓ We do not have many friends, so I think it's an ideal way to make new friends and close relationships.

'Friends' is a countable plural noun, so use 'many' not 'much'. Also 'a ideal' is incorrect article usage; use 'an ideal' because 'ideal' begins with a vowel sound. Suggestion: choose 'many' for countable plurals and use 'a'/'an' based on initial sound.

× Personally, I believe it's not good to share our, umm, personal things.

✓ Personally, I believe it's not good to share personal things of ours.

Mixing 'our' with a first-person singular perspective ('I') is inconsistent. The speaker should keep perspective consistent. Use 'personal things of ours' or 'my personal things' depending on whether referring to family or self. Suggestion: keep pronoun perspective consistent — use 'my' for individual, 'our' for group.

× For example, our clothes and uh, the things we used.

✓ For example, our clothes and the things we use.

The original fragment 'the things we used' is unclear in tense and leaves the sentence incomplete. If referring to personal items in general, use present 'use'. Also remove filler 'uh' and ensure the sentence is a complete clause. Suggestion: use present tense for general statements and form a complete sentence.

× Personally, it's not always. Uh.

✓ Personally, it's not always appropriate to share them.

Original is an incomplete sentence and lacks an object or complement. Completing the thought clarifies what 'not always' refers to. Suggestion: avoid fragments; state the full idea.

× Yes, uh, last week I prepared a small cake and shared it with my next door neighbors.

✓ Yes, last week I prepared a small cake and shared it with my next-door neighbors.

The verbs 'prepared' and 'shared' are correctly in the past tense for 'last week', but 'next door' should be hyphenated as the compound adjective 'next-door'. Also remove unnecessary 'uh'. Suggestion: use hyphenation for compound adjectives and avoid fillers.

× Uh, they are. They later said they really enjoyed that and they even bought us a small biscuit as a thanks.

✓ They later said they really enjoyed it and even bought us a small biscuit as a thank-you.

'They are.' is an incomplete and unclear fragment. 'Enjoyed that' is better as 'enjoyed it'. 'As a thanks' is awkward; use 'as a thank-you'. Suggestion: remove fragments and use standard noun forms for expressions of gratitude.

× It would be always my husband and then my parents and other family members.

✓ It would always be my husband, then my parents and other family members.

Word order and adverb placement: 'always' should come before the main verb phrase 'be'. Also adjust punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: place adverbs in natural positions (before main verb) and punctuate lists.

× I believe their blessings and uh, encouragement always help me to, uh, make good achievements.

✓ I believe their blessings and encouragement always help me to achieve good things.

'Make good achievements' is unnatural collocation in English. Use 'achieve good things' or 'achieve success'. Remove repeated 'uh'. Pronouns are fine here but phrasing needs improvement. Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'achieve success'.

× So I will always share good news first with him.

✓ So I will always share good news with him first.

Word order: place 'first' after the object for natural English phrasing. The pronoun 'him' is consistent. Suggestion: position adverbs like 'first' in their usual place.

× If it's one of my closest friends I will share.

✓ If they are one of my closest friends, I will share.

'It' is incorrect when referring to a person. Use 'they' (singular they) or 'he/she' for a person. Also add a comma after the conditional clause. Suggestion: use appropriate pronouns for people and punctuate conditionals.

× I like to share my all the happy and sad moments so they can give me some advice and help me to uh. Feel. Really.

✓ I like to share all my happy and sad moments so they can give me advice and really help me.

Word order: 'all my' is correct rather than 'my all'. 'Some advice' is acceptable but 'advice' is uncountable so dropping 'some' is fine. The sentence had fragmentation and fillers; combine into one smooth sentence. Suggestion: place 'all' before the possessive, avoid fragments and fillers.