Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, phát âm và độ tự nhiên. Tránh lặp từ (umm, uh) và sửa các lỗi động từ, đại từ. Câu trả lời nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, theo sau bởi 1-2 chi tiết hỗ trợ và một liên kết hợp lý. Sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp như "share" thay vì "stay with" và sửa cấu trúc "I can I try" thành một câu hoàn chỉnh.

Example: Yes. My parents encouraged me to share from a young age because it is an important part of Vietnamese culture. As a result, I try to be generous now and often share my things with friends.

Suggestion: Cải thiện danh từ số nhiều/ít và cấu trúc câu. Tránh lỗi như "small item" -> "small items", và "make me feel" cần chia động từ đúng. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (số lần, ví dụ về đồ vật) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc hơn.

Example: I like to share small items with underprivileged children. For example, I often donate money, clothes, and books once a month because helping others makes me feel happy and reduces my stress after school.

Suggestion: Sửa từ vựng sai ("create information", "cull") và ngữ pháp (số nhiều/số ít). Nên nói rõ khái niệm "personal items" và "sensitive information". Tránh thêm câu không liên quan như "I usually keep chatting to myself"; thay bằng ví dụ cụ thể và lý do an toàn.

Example: I think personal items and sensitive information are not suitable to share because they can cause health or security problems. For example, you should never share your toothbrush or important documents like your passport.

Suggestion: Cải thiện thì động từ, trật tự từ và sự rõ ràng. Tránh mơ hồ như "used to sell" nếu ý muốn nói đã quyên góp gần đây. Sửa lỗi đại từ và tính từ sai nghĩa ("youthful"). Nói rõ thời điểm và hành động cụ thể (ví dụ: last month I donated...).

Example: Recently I donated some money, clothes, and books to poor children. Last month I gave a small amount of money and a bag of clothes to a local charity, and it made me feel very happy to help.

Suggestion: Sửa cấu trúc câu và đại từ (she/her), loại bỏ từ thừa và lỗi từ vựng ("foot", "care who stand away"). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng: người đó là mẹ, lý do, và ví dụ cụ thể về tin tốt. Giữ tối đa 3 câu, dùng thì đúng (past simple for past events).

Example: I would share good news with my mother first because she always supports me and gives me valuable advice. For example, when I got a promotion last year, I told her immediately and she was very proud.

Suggestion: Cải thiện thứ tự từ và danh từ ("news articles" not "new"), sửa lỗi tính từ và đại từ. Nên nói rõ loại tin tức và tần suất, đồng thời dùng liên từ để nối ý. Thay "youthful" bằng "young" hoặc "interested" không cần thiết; nói lý do trực tiếp hơn.

Example: I often share local news articles and interesting stories with my friends because they are relevant to our daily lives. For example, I frequently send updates about traffic jams or local events so we can plan our weekends.

× Uh, yes, when I was a child my parents always told me to stay with other because umm, it's what uh, an important part of Vietnamese cultural umm.

✓ Uh, yes, when I was a child my parents always told me to stay with others because it was an important part of Vietnamese culture.

Pronoun 'other' is incorrect; use plural 'others'. 'Cultural' should be noun 'culture'. Also tense consistency: 'it's what an important part' -> 'it was an important part' to match 'when I was a child'. Improve wording for fluency.

× As a result, I can I try to be generous now and often sharing with my friends.

✓ As a result, I try to be generous now and often share with my friends.

Extra modal 'can I' is incorrect and 'sharing' should be base verb 'share' after adverb 'often'. This fixes sentence structure and verb form.

× Yes, I like to share small item with poor children.

✓ Yes, I like to share small items with poor children.

Singular 'item' with 'small' and general statement requires plural 'items'. Use plural for countable nouns when speaking generally.

× For example, I often donate little money and clothes with a for poor children's because it make me feel happy and reduce stress after school.

✓ For example, I often donate a little money and clothes for poor children because it makes me feel happy and reduces stress after school.

Use 'a little' with uncountable 'money'. Remove extra 'with a'. 'Poor children's' is wrong possessive; use 'poor children'. Verb agreement: 'it make' -> 'it makes'; 'reduce' -> 'reduces' to match singular subject 'it'.

× Well, I think personal item and create information are not sustainable for sharing because they can cull health or security problem.

✓ Well, I think personal items and private information are not suitable for sharing because they can cause health or security problems.

'Personal item' should be plural 'personal items'. 'Create information' is incorrect; use 'private information'. 'Not sustainable for sharing' -> 'not suitable for sharing'. 'Cull' is wrong verb; use 'cause'. Make nouns plural for 'problems'.

× For example, you should never share your toothbrush or important document like your passport.

✓ For example, you should never share your toothbrush or important documents like your passport.

'Important document' should be plural 'important documents' when giving general examples.

× And I usually keep chatting to myself.

✓ And I usually keep my conversations to myself.

'Keep chatting to myself' is awkward; 'keep my conversations to myself' is more natural meaning. Alternatively 'I usually keep to myself' can be used.

× Yes, I used to sell small item for poor children recently I share a little money, clothes or book for poor children because it's very youthful and make me happy when I can help they.

✓ Yes, I recently sold small items for poor children. I shared a little money, clothes, and books because it made me happy when I could help them.

Tense inconsistency: 'used to sell' implies past habit; 'recently' requires simple past 'sold'. 'Small item' -> 'small items'; missing punctuation. 'It's very youthful' is unclear; removed. 'Make me happy' -> 'made me happy'. Pronoun 'they' -> 'them'.

× Uh, well, I also the good news with my mother foot, they always support me and give you full advice.

✓ Uh, well, I also share good news with my mother first; she always supports me and gives me full advice.

'I also the good news' missing verb 'share'. 'mother foot' is incorrect; likely 'first'. 'They' should be 'she'. 'Give you full advice' should be 'gives me full advice' to match speaker.

× So I want her to be happy for me. For example, when I got a promotion last years I care who stand away and see what very proud.

✓ So I want her to be happy for me. For example, when I got a promotion last year I felt very proud and cared who stood nearby and saw it.

'Last years' -> 'last year' (singular) and past tense 'got' requires matching past feelings: 'felt'. 'I care who stand away and see what very proud' is incoherent; corrected to 'cared who stood nearby and saw it' for clarity and correct past tense.

× Well, I often share local, new and interesting article with my friends because they are youthful and relevant to our daily life.

✓ Well, I often share local, new, and interesting articles with my friends because they are useful and relevant to our daily lives.

'Article' should be plural 'articles'. 'They are youthful' is wrong word choice; use 'useful'. 'Daily life' -> 'daily lives' for plural 'friends'.

× For example, I often send news about traffic jam or local event to so we can plan our weekend.

✓ For example, I often send news about traffic jams or local events so we can plan our weekend.

Remove extra 'to'. Make nouns plural 'traffic jams' and 'local events' for general reference; sentence flows better without extra preposition.