Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and fix tense and plural errors.

Example: Yes. My parents taught me to share because I grew up with three siblings. For example, they made us take turns with toys and encouraged us to apologize after fights, which helped us resolve conflicts quickly.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give specific examples. Use correct tense and avoid fillers like “umm”. Link ideas with simple connectors (e.g., "and", "then").

Example: I like to share stories about my school life. For example, after school we would do homework together and then talk about our classes and the homework while having dinner.

Suggestion: Be specific and polite. Avoid vague phrases and reduce fillers. Use complete sentences and give a clear category with brief reasons.

Example: I wouldn't share personal failures or private problems, such as poor exam results or disciplinary issues at school, because these matters are private and can embarrass others.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence, explain the situation with specific details, and use correct vocabulary (e.g., "harvest", "crop"). Avoid repetition and improve sentence accuracy.

Example: Yes. Recently I've been sharing news about my family's vegetable harvest. Because of the heat, we have to wake up very early to water the crops, so it's been hard but rewarding.

Suggestion: State the person clearly and explain why with specific reasons. Avoid excessive fillers and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: I would share good news with my husband first because we talk on the phone every day. We share personal details about our lives, such as who we met and any problems we are facing.

Suggestion: Be more precise and give examples of both positive and negative news. Use linking words like "however" to contrast, and avoid fillers.

Example: I usually share happy news with my friends, such as engagements or celebrations. However, I also talk to close friends when I'm feeling down and need support.

× Yes, I have three siblings, so when we were a child we often had a fight each other.

✓ Yes, I have three siblings, so when we were children we often fought with each other.

The subject 'we' is plural, so 'child' must be plural ('children') (singular and plural issue). Also 'had a fight each other' is incorrect phrasing; use 'fought with each other' for correct verb and preposition usage. Suggest practicing plural forms and common collocations like 'fight with someone'.

× So my parents told me how to share things with each other and say sorry to each other.

✓ So my parents taught us how to share things with each other and say sorry to each other.

The original uses 'told me' which is acceptable but inconsistent with plural 'we'; since context refers to siblings, use 'taught us'. This relates to subject-verb alignment and appropriate verb choice (third person isn't strictly wrong but clarity requires plural object). Suggest ensuring verbs agree with intended subjects and using 'teach' for instruction contexts.

× I remember when we were a child we liked to share our school life.

✓ I remember when we were children we liked to share our school life.

Again 'we' requires 'children' not 'child' (singular/plural mismatch). Maintain plural forms consistently. Practice matching pronouns with corresponding nouns.

× After school when we came back to home we did some umm homework and then had a dinner together and shared UMM.

✓ After school when we came back home we did some homework and then had dinner together and shared food.

Use 'came back home' or 'came home' not 'came back to home' (preposition error). Use 'some homework' is okay but 'did homework' is more natural; 'had a dinner' should be 'had dinner' (article issue as well). Replace vague 'UMM' with 'food' or 'details'. Suggest studying common verb-preposition pairs and article use with meals.

× Oh umm, it's definitely umm, the bad things like, umm, you didn't umm, pass the score or didn't umm hand out your homework or do some bad thing at school.

✓ Oh, it's definitely the bad things, like not passing an exam, not handing in your homework, or doing something bad at school.

Original mixes second person 'you' with awkward verb forms; better to use gerunds or infinitives consistently. Also 'pass the score' is incorrect—use 'pass an exam' or 'reach the required score'; 'hand out your homework' should be 'hand in your homework' (preposition and pronoun usage). Suggest using consistent structures and correct collocations.

× It's not shared.

✓ Those things are not to be shared.

'It's' (it is) is unclear for plural 'things'; use 'Those things are not to be shared' or 'They are not shared' to match plurality. Ensure pronouns agree in number with their referents.

× Yes, I always talk to my friends about my my home's food harvest.

✓ Yes, I always talk to my friends about my home's food harvest.

Duplicate 'my' is an error. Also 'my home's food harvest' is awkward but acceptable; ensure no repeated pronouns. Remove accidental repetition and check noun phrases for clarity.

× It's so hot recently and we need to get up very early to take care of the food, so it's really hard to get.

✓ It's been so hot recently and we have to get up very early to take care of the crops, so it's really hard work.

Use present perfect 'has been' for recent ongoing condition ('recently'). 'Need to' is okay but 'have to' is more natural. 'Take care of the food' is better as 'take care of the crops' or 'harvest', and 'hard to get' is unclear—replace with 'hard work' or 'hard to harvest'. Maintain tense consistency and clearer nouns.

× OK, the first one I would like to share. My good news is my husband, uh, we took about umm by my phone every day.

✓ OK, the first person I would like to share my good news with is my husband. We talk about things on my phone every day.

Original has broken sentence structure and missing prepositions: 'share' needs an object ('share my good news with'). 'My good news is my husband' is incorrect meaning. 'We took about by my phone' is garbled; likely 'we talk about things on my phone'. Fix sentence order and missing prepositions.

× We share personal things including umm, life's detail and, and what kind of person we meet and what difficult.

✓ We share personal things including life details, the kinds of people we meet, and difficulties we face.

Use plural 'details', 'kinds of people', and plural 'difficulties'. 'What difficult' is ungrammatical; replace with 'difficulties we face'. Ensure correct adjective/adverb and noun forms and parallel structure in lists.

× It depends, I always share good things with my friends, like uh, when I get married, uh, I share happiness with my friends umm but sometimes if I have a bad mood I share something.

✓ It depends. I always share good things with my friends, like my wedding and happiness, but sometimes if I am in a bad mood I also share my problems.

Original run-on sentence and tense/person inconsistency. 'When I get married' is future but context likely past; better to say 'my wedding' or 'when I got married' depending on meaning. 'Share something' is vague; specify 'share my problems'. Use proper sentence boundaries and clearer references.