Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetitions and incorrect word choices (e.g. "married" → "habit").

Example: Yes. My parents taught me to share from a young age. For example, they encouraged me to offer snacks and toys to my siblings so we learned respect and close relationships. As a result, sharing became a regular habit in my family.

Suggestion: Be specific and use correct vocabulary. Give one clear topic sentence and then list concrete items with reasons, using linking words (e.g. "for example", "because"). Correct errors like "snake" → "snack" and "plate food" → "home-cooked meals".

Example: I like to share good food and interesting items with friends. For example, I often share snacks or a home-cooked meal because it helps us bond and makes everyone feel happy.

Suggestion: Answer directly then support with a specific example and linking words. Fix grammar (e.g. "the something that have" → "things that have"). Use clearer vocabulary like "personal diary" or "private documents."

Example: I think personal items that contain private information are not suitable for sharing. For instance, a diary or private messages should remain private because they contain personal thoughts and feelings.

Suggestion: Be concise and grammatically correct. Use past tense consistently and provide one or two clear details about what you shared and why, using linking words like "so" or "therefore."

Example: Yes. Recently I shared a homemade meal with my roommate because I had cooked a special dish I was proud of, so I wanted to make them happy and celebrate together.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence naming one primary person, then add a reason with linking words. Avoid filler words and correct tense and phrasing (e.g. "they would be happy to hear it").

Example: I would first tell my close friend or family. I usually choose them because they know me well and will be genuinely happy to hear my good news and celebrate with me.

Suggestion: Organize your answer: start with a topic sentence, then give specific types of news and reasons, using linking words like "for example" and "also." Avoid vague phrases and correct grammar (e.g. "habits" and "they are very patient").

Example: I share many kinds of news with my close friends. For example, I tell them about exciting events like promotions or trips, everyday updates like things that happened that day, and also personal problems because they are patient and help cheer me up.

× Yes, of course when I was a child, my parents always told me that I need to share the great thing with my close friend or with my sisters.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a child, my parents always told me that I needed to share great things with my close friends or my sisters.

The sentence mixes past narration ('When I was a child', 'my parents told me') with a present-tense modal 'need'. Use past tense 'needed' to match the time frame. Also pluralize countable nouns ('great things', 'close friends') for natural English.

× And I think it's really a great married because it show your respect and your love to the person you really you really love.

✓ And I think it's really a great habit because it shows your respect and love for the person you really love.

'Married' is incorrect here; the intended noun is 'habit'. 'Show' must be conjugated as 'shows' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'Your love to' is unnatural; use 'love for'. Remove duplicate words 'you really'.

× So I'm really like it.

✓ So I really like it.

'I'm really like it' incorrectly uses 'am' with the verb 'like'. The correct form is the simple present 'I really like it' to express a general feeling.

× Well, I think, uh, I really like to share with others of something I think it's great, such as the very delicious snake or very plate food toys.

✓ Well, I think I really like to share things I think are great, such as very delicious snacks, meals, or toys.

Sentence is ungrammatical and contains wrong words: 'snake' should be 'snack', 'very plate food' is incorrect—use 'meals'. Use 'things I think are great' and plural nouns for general statements.

× Umm, I think share with my friend can, uh, let them get along, uh, happy and also I am so things like that.

✓ Umm, I think sharing with my friends can make them get along and be happy; I mean things like that.

Use the gerund 'sharing' as the subject. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to match 'them'. Use 'make them ...' and 'be happy' for correct verb forms. 'I am so things' is ungrammatical; replace with 'I mean things like that'.

× Well, I think it's kind of difficult question because I never thought about it, But at this point I think the something that have a lot of privacy such as the diary, I must say, because it's kind of a private things and you can just share about yourself.

✓ Well, I think it's a kind of difficult question because I never thought about it. At this point, I think something that has a lot of privacy, such as a diary, is not suitable for sharing because it is private and you only write about yourself.

Run-on and incorrect noun forms. Use 'a kind of difficult question' or 'a difficult question'. 'The something that have' is wrong; use 'something that has'. 'Diary' is a countable singular so use 'a diary'. 'Private things' should be 'private' and rephrase to 'not suitable for sharing'.

× Umm yes, yes of course. And I remember recently I shared the good meal with my roommate because I cook a very delicious food that I haven't cook so that, uh, I really want to share it with my roommate so that they would get really happy.

✓ Umm yes, of course. I remember recently I shared a good meal with my roommate because I cooked a very delicious dish that I hadn't cooked before, and I really wanted to share it with my roommate so that they would be happy.

Tense consistency: use past tense 'cooked' and past perfect 'hadn't cooked' for earlier action. 'Good meal' and 'delicious dish' are more natural. Use 'wanted' (past) to match 'shared' and 'would be happy' for result.

× Well, uh, I think the first person that I would like to share the good news was is my, uh, close friend and my family.

✓ Well, I think the first people I would like to share good news with are my close friends and my family.

The sentence has confusion 'was is' and mismatched number. 'First person' vs multiple recipients: use 'first people' or 'first person ... is'. If plural, use 'are my close friends and my family'. Also use 'share good news with' structure.

× Because, uh, I want to shared about my happy mood and the good news will really, uh, happy to learn a lot.

✓ Because I want to share my happy mood and the good news will really make them happy to hear it.

'Want to shared' mixes infinitive with past; use 'want to share' (or 'wanted to share' if past). 'Good news will really, uh, happy to learn a lot' is ungrammatical; use 'make them happy to hear it' or 'they will be happy to hear it'.

× Well, I think all kind of, uh, news. I really want to share the with my, uh, close friend, uh, something about habit it so that they will celebrate for me.

✓ Well, I think all kinds of news. I really want to share them with my close friends, things about my achievements so that they will celebrate with me.

Use plural 'all kinds of news' and 'share them with'. 'Close friend' should be plural to match 'they'. 'Something about habit it' is unclear; replace with 'things about my achievements' and use 'celebrate with me'.

× And when sometimes I feel very sad, I also shared about them because they always, uh, to very patient to, uh, accompany with me and to cheered me up.

✓ And when I sometimes feel very sad, I also share with them because they are always very patient, accompany me, and cheer me up.

Use 'share with' instead of 'shared about'. Maintain present tense 'share' if general habit. 'They are always very patient' requires 'are'. 'Accompany with me' is incorrect: use 'accompany me'. 'To cheered me up' should be 'cheer me up'.

× MMM sometimes I will just share the Daily News, things like that.

✓ Sometimes I will just share daily news, things like that.

'The Daily News' suggests a specific newspaper; for general habit use 'daily news' without 'the' and 'Daily' need not be capitalized. Removing 'MMM' and simplifying improves fluency.