Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and clear. Start with a simple topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two concise supporting details. Correct basic grammar (e.g., "bike" not "back", past habits: "I had" or "I used to have"). Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas, but avoid repetition and long unclear phrases. Keep to 2–4 sentences total.

Example: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me after I was ill and missed school, because he wanted me to get out of the house more. I also remember winning high marks at school around that time, so getting the bike felt like a reward.

Suggestion: Answer directly and organize supporting points with clear linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "I grew up in the countryside"; "people usually ride bikes to school"). Vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., "common" or "widely used"). Give one specific example and avoid repeating the same idea twice. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. I grew up in a rural area where most children and adults ride bikes to school or the market, so cycling is a common and practical way to get around.

× From my perspective, I would have said that I used to have a back when I was kid.

✓ From my perspective, I would say that I used to have a bike when I was a kid.

The original sentence has a wrong word 'back' instead of 'bike' and misses the article 'a' before 'kid'. Also 'would have said' is an inappropriate conditional for a simple past habit; use 'would say' or simply 'I used to have' to match the past habitual meaning. Suggestion: use correct noun 'bike', include the article 'a kid', and keep tense consistent with past habitual: 'I used to have a bike when I was a kid.'

× It was a gift from my father because at that time, as I remember it, I was really, really sick.

✓ It was a gift from my father because at that time, as I remember, I was really, really sick.

Minor redundancy: 'as I remember it' is wordy; 'as I remember' is more natural. Verb tense 'was' is correct for past. Suggestion: remove unnecessary words to improve fluency.

× I think I had a stomach ache.

✓ I think I had a stomachache.

The tense 'had' is correct because referring to a past experience, but 'stomach ache' is usually written as one word 'stomachache' or as 'a stomach ache'. Keep consistency: 'I think I had a stomachache.'

× And along with that time, I also like achieve a really good academic, which I scored on the top three of the class.

✓ At that time, I also achieved very good academic results; I scored among the top three in the class.

Multiple problems: 'like achieve' is incorrect verb construction and mixes tenses; 'a really good academic' is ungrammatical noun phrase; 'which I scored on the top three of the class' is incorrect preposition and clause structure. Fix by using past simple 'achieved', correct noun 'academic results', and correct phrase 'scored among the top three'. Suggestion: use 'I also achieved very good academic results' and 'I scored among the top three in the class.'

× So my dad was decided. He decided to.

✓ So my dad decided to (give me the bike).

'Was decided' is passive and incorrect here; the intended meaning is that the father made a decision, so use active past 'decided'. The fragment 'He decided to.' is incomplete; include the action or leave as 'He decided to give me the bike.' Suggestion: use full clause 'He decided to give me the bike.'

× Yes, I honestly said that it's really popular in my country because I was growing up in countryside which is located in Kampung provinces and the people in my town, they usually riding bike to school.

✓ Yes, I honestly say that bikes are really popular in my country because I grew up in the countryside, in Kampung Province, and the people in my town usually ride bikes to school.

Several tense and agreement issues: 'I honestly said' should be 'I honestly say' to state opinion now; 'it's really popular' should be 'bikes are really popular' to match plural noun; 'I was growing up' should be simple past 'I grew up' for completed past; 'in countryside' needs article 'the countryside'; 'which is located in Kampung provinces' is awkward—use 'in Kampung Province' (singular) or 'Kampung provinces' if plural; 'they usually riding bike' is missing auxiliary and plural: should be 'they usually ride bikes'. Suggestions: use present tense for general statements, correct articles, use plural agreement for 'bikes'.

× Especially the kids surrounding my neighbor, they usually ride the bike to school.

✓ Especially the kids around my neighborhood usually ride bikes to school.

Original has incorrect preposition 'surrounding my neighbor' and redundant pronoun 'they'. Also 'the bike' should be plural 'bikes' for general habit. Use 'kids around my neighborhood' and 'ride bikes'. Suggestion: remove redundancy and correct prepositions and plurality.

× So I would say that bike is really popular in my country.

✓ So I would say that bikes are really popular in my country.

The noun 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' when making a general statement about popularity. Use plural with 'are' to match subject-verb agreement. Suggestion: use 'bikes are' for general truths about countable items.