Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it's slightly wordy and contains repetition (two 'but's) and an awkward phrase "it went successfully well." To improve, start with a concise topic sentence, avoid repeating conjunctions, and use a single clear supporting detail. Use one linking word if needed (for example, 'so' or 'and then'). Aim for natural phrasing: "I learned to ride on my grandmother's bike, and it worked out well."

Example: I learned to ride on my grandmother's bike when I was a child. It was small for me, but I practiced on it almost every day, so I became confident riding on my own.

Suggestion: Good content with relevant examples, but the grammar is uneven and some phrases are awkward ("given the fact that" is unnecessary; "got into competitions" should be "take part in competitions"). Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details with correct verb forms and linking words like 'for example' or 'for instance.'

Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Thailand. For example, many people take part in cycling events and long-distance races, and in some cities cycling is a common way to commute to work.

× I used to play it all the time and I actually used this one to practice how to ride on a bike for the first time ever and it went successfully well.

✓ I used to ride it all the time, and I actually used that bike to practice riding for the first time, and it went well.

The original sentence misuses play with a bike; 'ride' is the correct verb for using a bike (verb choice related to verb + -ing construction). Also 'practice how to ride' is better as 'practice riding'. 'Successfully well' is redundant; use 'well' or 'successfully.' Improve clarity by replacing 'this one' with 'that bike' and using commas to separate ideas. Suggestions: use the verb 'ride' with -ing after 'practice' (practice riding), avoid redundant adverbs, and choose clearer referents.

× I do believe that bikes are very popular in my country given the fact that I was born and raised in Thailand.

✓ I believe that bikes are very popular in my country, given that I was born and raised in Thailand.

Using 'do believe' is grammatically acceptable but awkward in this context; simple present 'I believe' is more natural. Also 'given the fact that' can be tightened to 'given that.' This keeps present-tense opinion consistent and more fluent. Suggestion: use simple present for general opinions.

× I have seen so many people got into competitions by using bikes.

✓ I have seen so many people get into competitions using bikes.

After 'have seen' a base-form verb (bare infinitive) is required when describing what you observed: 'seen people get' not 'seen people got.' Alternatively, use simple past: 'I saw many people get into competitions.' Keeping present perfect 'have seen' with 'get' is correct. Also 'by using bikes' is wordy; 'using bikes' is sufficient. Suggestion: use 'have seen people get' or 'saw people get'.

× There are some marathons, long distance biking.

✓ There are some marathons and long-distance biking events.

The original is a fragment-like coordination problem and lacks parallel structure. 'Long distance biking' should be hyphenated as 'long-distance' when used as a compound adjective before a noun, and 'biking' needs a noun like 'events' to parallel 'marathons.' Joining with 'and' clarifies the list. Suggestion: maintain parallel structure and include the appropriate noun after 'long-distance biking.'