Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No) and then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh) and redundant phrases. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., "couldn't afford a bike at that time," "I learned to ride when I was 11").

Example: No, I didn't have a bike as a young child. My family couldn't afford one at the time, so I only got my first bike when I was 11. As a result, I learned to ride later than many of my friends, but I quickly caught up and enjoyed cycling around my neighborhood.

Suggestion: Give a clear overall opinion first, then support it with specific comparisons and examples using linking words (e.g., "however," "for example"). Fix grammar ("depend on the area," "motorbikes and bicycles were popular"). Avoid repeating words. Provide one concise, specific detail per clause.

Example: Yes, bikes are popular in many parts of my country, but it depends on the region. For example, in the east of Peru bicycles and motorbikes are widely used because roads are narrower, whereas in the south people rely more on cars and larger vehicles due to better highways and longer distances.

× Actually, I remember when I was a child, I didn't have a bike until 10 or 11 years old because my mom couldn't afford one bike in that moment, uh, all the things were very expensive, but finally I could learn how to ride a bike and when I was 11.

✓ Actually, I remember that when I was a child, I didn't have a bike until I was 10 or 11 years old because my mom couldn't afford a bike at that time, and everything was very expensive, but I finally learned how to ride a bike when I was 11.

Multiple past-tense issues: use of 'didn't have ... until 10 or 11 years old' needs 'I was 10 or 11 years old' to be grammatically correct; 'couldn't afford one bike' should be 'couldn't afford a bike' (article and word order); 'in that moment' is wrong for past time reference — use 'at that time'; 'but finally I could learn how to ride' mixes modal ability with the completed action — use simple past 'I finally learned' to indicate a completed past event. Suggestion: keep consistent past simple forms for completed past events and use natural time expressions ('when I was 11', 'at that time').

× Depending in which area you live.

✓ It depends on which area you live in.

The phrase 'Depending in which area you live' uses the wrong preposition and structure. Use 'depend on' and place the prepositional phrase 'in' at the end or 'in which' after 'area': 'It depends on which area you live in' or 'It depends on the area in which you live.' Suggestion: use the correct verb-preposition collocation 'depend on' and a complete clause 'It depends on...'.

× When I was a child I used to live in a suburb where motorbikes and bikes are are were really popular.

✓ When I was a child I used to live in a suburb where motorbikes and bikes were really popular.

The sentence mixes present and past ('are are were'); the context is past, so use past tense 'were'. Also remove duplicate 'are'. Suggestion: for habits or situations in the past use 'used to' and past tense verbs for description ('were').

× And I will say that in the east of Peru it's very popular, but in the South of Peru more motor vehicles.

✓ I would say that in the east of Peru bikes are very popular, but in the south of Peru there are more motor vehicles.

Several tense and structure issues: 'I will say' is awkward for giving an opinion—use 'I would say' or present 'I think'; 'it's very popular' is vague and should refer explicitly to 'bikes are very popular'; the second clause lacks a verb—add 'there are' before 'more motor vehicles'. Suggestion: use appropriate modal for opinion ('would say' or 'I think') and complete clauses with verbs ('bikes are popular' and 'there are more motor vehicles').