Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve clarity and grammar, give a clear topic sentence and one or two concise supporting details. Avoid fragments and unfinished sentences. Use past tense consistently and link ideas with a short connector (for example, “so” or “but”). Be specific about why it was your only bike or how you learned to ride.

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was about four or five years old. It was my first bike and also the only one I owned for a long time, because my family couldn’t afford another. As a result, I learned to ride on that bike in our neighborhood park and I remember practicing every weekend until I felt confident.

Suggestion: Focus on accuracy, grammar and clearer statistics or phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons and a brief example. Use correct subject-verb agreement and simpler phrases for locations and causes (for example, ‘in my area’). If you give numbers, present them naturally: say ‘about six in ten households’ rather than ‘6 out of 10’.

Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my area — about six in ten households own one. Young people especially use bikes because many are too young to get a driving license, and bikes are cheaper to buy and maintain. For instance, in my town many students cycle to school every day instead of taking public transport.

× I did. I think that was around when I was four or five years old. That was my first and last bike. I didn't have the. It will have other opportunities to learn to ride a bike.

✓ I did. I think that was when I was around four or five years old. That was my first and only bike. I didn't have any others. I would have other opportunities to learn to ride a bike.

Multiple issues: 'around when I was four or five years old' has awkward word order; correct order is 'when I was around four or five years old' (Sentence structure error). 'Last bike' is incorrect in meaning; use 'only bike' to indicate sole possession (word choice but treated here as sentence structure). 'I didn't have the.' is incomplete and ungrammatical; complete to 'I didn't have any others.' 'It will have other opportunities' uses incorrect subject and tense; 'I would have other opportunities' or 'I had other opportunities' fits context. Suggestion: reorder time expressions before/after phrases for clarity, complete incomplete clauses, and match subject and tense consistently.

× 6 out of 10 Filipino household owns a bike in our region, specifically in La Onion.

✓ Six out of ten Filipino households own a bike in our region, specifically in La Union.

'6 out of 10' should be written as words in formal speech, but main grammar errors: 'household' should be plural 'households' when referring to multiple units (singular and plural issue), and verb must agree: 'own' for plural subject not 'owns'. Also corrected place name 'La Onion' to likely 'La Union' (proper noun spelling). Suggestion: make subject plural when enumerating multiple units and use plural verb form.

× I see a lot of young people who owns a bike.

✓ I see a lot of young people who own bikes.

The relative clause refers to 'young people' (plural), so the verb should be 'own' not 'owns' (subject-verb agreement error). Also 'a bike' is better as plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with the relative pronoun's antecedent and match singular/plural in noun phrases for general statements.

× It's because they do not have the opportunity to have a license yet, so they own a bike.

✓ It's because they do not have the opportunity to get a license yet, so they own bikes.

Minor issues: 'have a license' is acceptable but 'get a license' is more natural. 'Own a bike' should be plural 'own bikes' when talking about many people (singular/plural overlap). Tense 'do not have... yet' is correct; adjusted wording for naturalness. Suggestion: use more natural collocations like 'get a license' and match plurality when generalizing.