Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and improve sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two concise supporting details using linking words. Be careful with technical terms (use '70cc' rather than '70 CCS') and avoid repeating filler words like 'Uh.'

Example: Yes, I did. My first bike was a Honda 70cc, which I bought with my own savings when I was 16. It was my main way of getting to school and work, so I used it almost every day.

Suggestion: Make the answer more precise and avoid overgeneralization. Start with a clear opinion, then provide two specific reasons linked logically. Replace vague phrases like 'every middle class' with 'many middle-class families' and explain 'for their own safety' more clearly (e.g., affordable and quicker in traffic).

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many middle-class families own them because they are affordable and fuel-efficient, and they allow riders to navigate heavy traffic more quickly.

× Uh, my first bike was Honda.

✓ Uh, my first bike was a Honda.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before a singular countable noun 'Honda' (a brand/model treated as a countable noun). Use 'a' to indicate one item: 'a Honda.' Suggestion: always use 'a' or 'the' with singular common nouns (e.g., 'a Honda', 'the Honda I owned').

× Uh, it was 70 CCS and I bought it with my own money when I was 16 years old.

✓ Uh, it was 70 cc, and I bought it with my own money when I was 16 years old.

Unit expression 'CCS' is incorrect; the standard abbreviation is 'cc' (cubic centimeters) and is uncountable here. Also add a comma before 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: write technical units in conventional form and use commas to separate clauses.

× I think bikes are really popular in our country because it is really convenient to travel and it is fuel efficient.

✓ I think bikes are really popular in our country because they are really convenient for traveling and fuel-efficient.

Pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to plural 'bikes'; use 'they'. Also 'convenient to travel' is awkward; use 'convenient for traveling' or 'convenient to use for travel'. 'Fuel efficient' describing 'bikes' should be hyphenated as 'fuel-efficient' before a noun or remain two words after linking verb. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents and use correct preposition and hyphenation for compound adjectives.

× So every middle class owns a bike for their own safety.

✓ So every middle-class family owns a bike for its own safety.

'Every' requires a singular noun; 'middle class' as a collective should be 'middle-class family' or 'member.' Using 'their' with 'every' is informal and mismatches number. Better: 'every middle-class family owns a bike for its own safety' or 'many middle-class people own bikes for their own safety.' Suggestion: match singular 'every' with singular noun and singular pronoun, or rephrase to plural to use 'their'.