Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and possessives (e.g., “my mother” not “my Mama”), and avoid vague fragments. Also expand slightly with a reason or short example to make the answer natural and informative.

Example: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My mother didn’t buy one because she was worried I might get hurt, so I only borrowed bikes from my cousins occasionally. For example, I remember riding a cousin’s bike in the park once or twice each summer, but I never owned one myself.

Suggestion: Make the answer more concise and accurate, correct small errors, and use linking words for coherence. Start with a clear opinion, then provide two specific reasons supported by brief examples. Avoid filler words and awkward phrasing like “5 kilometer and more” — say “around 5 kilometres” or “about 5 km.”

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, many people use them as an inexpensive way to get to work or school, especially in cities. Secondly, many people cycle for exercise — for example, I often ride about 5 kilometres in the evenings to stay fit.

× When I was a child, I don't have a bike.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have a bike.

The sentence refers to a past time ('When I was a child') so the verb should be in past tense. 'Don't have' is present tense; change to 'didn't have'. Use past simple for a past state.

× My Mama didn't even them.

✓ My mama didn't even buy one for me.

The original sentence has missing verb and incorrect pronoun usage. 'Them' is not correct for 'a bike' singular; also the verb 'buy' is missing. Use 'buy one for me' to express that my mother did not purchase a bike.

× They don't buy me any, right?

✓ They didn't buy me any, right?

The context is past (childhood). 'Don't buy' is present tense and mismatches the time frame. Change to past simple 'didn't buy'. Also 'they' is acceptable only if referring to parents; keep consistent with past tense.

× Also, I can borrow to my cousins 'cause they're not.

✓ Also, I could borrow one from my cousins because they didn't allow me.

Several issues: use 'borrow from' rather than 'borrow to'. The modal should match past context: 'could' or 'was able to' instead of 'can'. The clause 'because they're not' is incomplete; clarify with 'because they didn't allow me' to match intended meaning.

× They don't allow me, 'cause they think I might get hurt, and that's all.

✓ They didn't allow me because they thought I might get hurt, and that was it.

Tense consistency: change present 'don't allow' to past 'didn't allow' and 'think' to 'thought' to match past context. Use 'because' rather than colloquial ''cause', and 'that was it' is a natural past-tense ending.

× Of course, I think bikes are very popular in my country because I see a lot of bikers.

✓ Of course, I think bikes are very popular in my country because I see a lot of cyclists.

The verb tenses are acceptable (present opinion), but 'bikers' is colloquial and can be unclear; 'cyclists' is more appropriate. No tense change needed.

× I try to, umm, ride a bike for almost 5 kilometer and more.

✓ I try to ride a bike for almost 5 kilometers or more.

For habitual action use present simple 'I try to ride'. 'Kilometer' should be plural 'kilometers' for quantities greater than one. 'And more' is better expressed as 'or more'. Remove filler 'umm'.

× It's a kind of exercise and bikes are popular since it's a kind of transportation to go to school or any work.

✓ It's a form of exercise, and bikes are popular because they are a means of transportation to get to school or work.

Use 'form' instead of 'kind' for variety and 'because' for causal link. 'It's' refers to 'bikes' plural, so change to 'they are' or restructure. 'Means of transportation' is a better collocation than 'a kind of transportation to go to'. 'Get to school or work' is natural phrasing.