Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammatical accuracy (tense and modal verbs), use a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail. Keep within 3–4 sentences. For example, correct tense: use past simple consistently ('wouldn't let me' or 'didn't let me') and 'borrow from' not 'borrow to'. Combine ideas to be more natural and concise.

Example: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford one. My mother wouldn’t allow me to get one for that reason, so I usually borrowed bikes from friends when we played outside. I remember riding in the park near our house most weekends.

Suggestion: Make a clear direct answer first, then give specific reasons and an example using linking words (however, although, because). Fix vague phrases and unclear words ('Rd.'). Use precise vocabulary (popular, common, mode of transport). Limit to 3–4 sentences and avoid hesitation sounds.

Example: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country nowadays. However, when I was a child they were extremely common because most children used them to get around. For example, I often rode my friend’s bike to visit classmates after school because it was the easiest way to travel locally.

× When I was a kid I didn't have a bike because my mom won't let me to have it because we don't have enough money that time.

✓ When I was a kid I didn't have a bike because my mom wouldn't let me have one since we didn't have enough money at that time.

The original mixes present and past modals incorrectly. Use 'wouldn't' (past of 'won't') to match past context. Also 'let me to have' is incorrect; 'let' is followed by the base verb without 'to' ('let me have'). Replace 'it' with 'one' to refer to 'a bike' and use 'at that time' for correct past time expression.

× That's why I only borrow to my friends when we play together outside.

✓ That's why I only borrowed my friends' bikes when we played together outside.

Tense must be past to match context: 'borrow' should be 'borrowed' (past). The verb pattern 'borrow to my friends' is incorrect; you borrow something from someone, so 'borrowed my friends' bikes' is correct. Possessive form 'my friends' bikes' is clearer. Also 'when we play' should be 'when we played' for past time consistency.

× Actually I don't think bikes are very popular nowadays, but when I was a kid bikes were very famous every everywhere because almost all children rode them.

✓ Actually I don't think bikes are very popular nowadays, but when I was a kid bikes were very common everywhere because almost all children rode them.

'Very famous' is wrong collocation for objects like 'bikes'; use 'very common' or 'popular'. 'Every everywhere' is redundant and incorrect; use 'everywhere'. The rest of the sentence is grammatically fine, keeping present tense 'don't think' and past tense 'were' consistent.

× And when I uh, that's the time that I want to Rd. also to go to my friend for my transportation.

✓ And at that time I also wanted to ride to my friend's house for transportation.

The original is fragmented and contains unclear 'Rd.' which likely means 'ride'. Use 'at that time' or 'back then' for past reference, and 'wanted' for past desire. 'Ride to my friend's house' is clearer than 'go to my friend'. 'For my transportation' is awkward; 'for transportation' or 'to get there' is better. Ensure past tense throughout.