Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer, more grammatical, and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct verb forms and nouns (bike, bought, taught, ride), avoid filler words (uh), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

Example: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child because my parents bought one for me. They taught me how to ride it when I was about six, and I practiced in the park near our house. I loved it because it was a special and expensive gift from them.

Suggestion: Answer directly, organize with a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (traffic congestion, convenient, bike), avoid repetition, and finish the thought. Use comparisons or brief examples to support your view.

Example: Yes, bikes are still popular in Vietnam, especially in cities like Ho Chi Minh City. Because the city is very crowded and traffic congestion is common, many people find motorcycles and bicycles more convenient for short trips. For example, students and office workers often use them to commute quickly and save money on fuel.

× Yes, of course, uh, I have, uh, buys because my parents had already buy for me in the in my childhood because I, they teach me how to write by, by myself.

✓ Yes, of course. I had one because my parents had already bought it for me during my childhood, and they taught me how to ride by myself.

Multiple verbs are in incorrect tenses and forms. Use simple past to describe past possession (had) and past perfect or simple past for earlier past actions; 'buy' should be past participle 'bought' after 'had' and 'teach' should be past 'taught'. Also 'have' is present and does not match past context. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense when talking about childhood events: 'I had', 'they bought', 'they taught', 'during my childhood'.

× After that, we can't write anymore to buy or any card later then.

✓ After that, we couldn't ride it anymore or buy any new bikes later.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Can't write' is incorrect and likely meant 'can't ride'. Tense should be past ('couldn't') to match context. Word order and phrasing 'to buy or any card later then' are incorrect; replace with 'or buy any new bikes later'. Suggestion: Use clear verbs and past tense for past inability: 'we couldn't ride it anymore' and 'we couldn't buy any new bikes later'.

× And I really love it by so much because it's a very expensive gift from my parents.

✓ And I loved it very much because it was a very expensive gift from my parents.

Preposition 'by' is unnecessary and incorrect here. Also maintain past tense consistency: 'love' should be 'loved' and 'it's' should be 'it was' when describing a past event. Suggestion: Remove 'by' and use past tense verbs: 'I loved it very much because it was a very expensive gift from my parents.'

× Yes, of course because I live in Ho Chi Minh City, this is one of the most crowded city in Vietnam and if you go to work or go to school because it's really make you traffic congestions and used to buy it really convenient for us who can travel faster than car or.

✓ Yes, of course. I live in Ho Chi Minh City, which is one of the most crowded cities in Vietnam, and if you go to work or to school, it really causes traffic congestion. Using a bike is very convenient for us because we can travel faster than by car.

Multiple number and noun form errors: 'city' should be plural 'cities' after 'one of the most'; 'traffic congestions' should be uncountable 'traffic congestion'; verb agreement 'it's really make' should be 'it really causes' or 'it really makes' with different structure. 'Used to buy it really convenient' is ungrammatical; replace with 'Using a bike is very convenient'. Also complete comparative phrase 'faster than by car'. Suggestion: Use correct plural forms, uncountable nouns for mass nouns, and correct verb forms and prepositions: 'one of the most crowded cities', 'traffic congestion', 'using a bike is convenient', 'faster than by car'.

× and if you go to work or go to school because it's really make you traffic congestions and used to buy it really convenient for us who can travel faster than car or.

✓ and if you go to work or to school, it really causes traffic congestion, and using a bike is very convenient for us because we can travel faster than by car.

The phrase 'used to buy it really convenient' misuses verb forms; 'using' (verb + -ing) should be used to describe the action that is convenient. Replace incorrect fragments with 'using a bike'. Suggestion: When describing general actions as subjects, use the -ing form (gerund) as a noun: 'Using a bike is convenient.'