Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and confident: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details, and avoid fillers (umm, I think). Also correct minor grammar (e.g., “from the age of 12” or “when I was 12”). Use linking words if you add details (for example, “because” or “so”).

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was 12, and my neighbour taught me to ride, which made it a very memorable experience. Because I practiced every afternoon, I became quite confident and rode it to visit friends.

Suggestion: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to present contrast. Remove hesitations and repetitive words. Be more specific: mention reasons why adults don’t use bikes as main transport and give an example or a brief comparison.

Example: Bikes are mainly popular among children and teenagers in my country, but not among most adults. For example, adults usually prefer cars or public transport because distances are long and cycling infrastructure is limited, so people find it inconvenient to use bikes for commuting.

× Yes, I used to have a bike from the age of I think 12 and my neighbor actually taught me how to ride my bike.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bike from the age of 12, and my neighbor actually taught me how to ride it.

The original sentence is mostly correct but contains redundancy and a minor awkward phrase 'the age of I think 12.' Replace with 'the age of 12' for clarity and remove the repeated noun 'my bike' by using the pronoun 'it' to avoid redundancy. Also add a comma before the conjunction 'and' to join two independent clauses. Suggestion: Be concise and use pronouns to avoid repetition.

× I think in my country bikes are more popular between uh, children and teenagers, but uh, for adults to ride the bike and umm, not to use it as a a main transportation umm, system is not really.

✓ I think bikes are more popular among children and teenagers in my country, but adults generally do not ride bikes or use them as a main means of transportation.

Multiple issues: 'popular between' is incorrect preposition use; correct phrase is 'popular among' (Grammar Problem Type 11). The clause 'for adults to ride the bike and ... is not really' has subject-verb and sentence structure problems; rephrase to 'adults generally do not ride bikes' for natural subject-verb agreement and clarity (Grammar Problem Type 27 and 26). 'a a main transportation umm, system' is awkward and contains article misuse and word order; use 'a main means of transportation.' Suggestions: use 'among' with groups, simplify structure by making a clear subject and verb (adults do not ride), and use 'means of transportation' instead of 'transportation system' here.