Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct, correct grammar, and avoid unnecessary words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Correct pronoun and tense errors (e.g., "who" not "whom"). Keep to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

Example: No, I didn’t own a bike when I was a child. Instead, I often borrowed my sister’s bike for short rides around the neighborhood. Because her bike was a bit large for me, I usually rode it slowly and stayed on quiet streets.

Suggestion: Give a concise direct answer, then provide specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "here in this country" is redundant). Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "motorcycle" or "cycling" depending on meaning) and one or two clear reasons or examples.

Example: Yes, motorcycles are quite popular in my country. For example, there are large motorcycle clubs that organize weekend rides, and I often see many riders on city streets during evenings and weekends.

× I didn't own any bike, but I just borrowed from my sister whom had one.

✓ I didn't own any bikes, but I just borrowed one from my sister who had one.

The noun 'bike' should be plural after 'any' so use 'any bikes' or better 'any bikes' but when referring to a single borrowed object use 'one'. Also the relative pronoun 'whom' is incorrect here because it should be the subject of the relative clause, so use 'who'. Additionally word order was awkward: 'borrowed one from my sister' is natural. Suggestion: use 'I didn't own any bikes, but I borrowed one from my sister who had one.'

× Yes, because they have their own community here in this country and as far as I know, there are a lot of members in that community and I often see bikers all around the cities that I roam around.

✓ Yes, because they have their own community here and, as far as I know, there are a lot of members in that community, and I often see bikers all around the cities I visit.

The original sentence is wordy and contains awkward phrasing. 'Here in this country' is redundant; 'here' or 'in this country' is sufficient. 'That I roam around' is incorrect use of 'roam around' with 'that' and sounds informal; use 'I visit' for clarity. Also commas improve readability. Suggestion: simplify phrasing to 'they have their own community here' and use 'I visit' instead of 'that I roam around.'