Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct, use correct tense and avoid unnecessary words. Start with a clear topic sentence (use past tense for childhood), then add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words if adding extra information and correct small grammar mistakes (e.g., 'We had a bike' not 'We do have a bike').

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a family bike that I shared with my siblings, so we took turns using it after school and on weekends.

Suggestion: Give a concise topic sentence, then support with two clear, specific reasons. Use correct grammar and smoother linking words (for example, 'because' and 'also'). Avoid fillers and singular/plural errors (e.g., 'gas prices are high', 'they are cheap'). Try to limit to 3–4 sentences total.

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because gas prices are high and cycling is eco-friendly and inexpensive. In many neighborhoods most people own a bike, especially men who use them for commuting, and many people also cycle for exercise.

× We do have a bike, it's a family owned bike so it is shared with my siblings.

✓ We have a bike; it's a family-owned bike, so it is shared with my siblings.

The original uses 'do have' unnecessarily for a simple present statement; standard affirmative present uses the bare verb 'have'. Also 'family owned' requires a hyphen as a compound adjective before a noun ('family-owned'). Use a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses instead of a comma splice. Suggestion: Use simple present for possession and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× Yeah, it's very popular in my country because nowadays gas are so high, so it's very eco friendly and convenient.

✓ Yeah, bicycles are very popular in my country because gas prices are so high nowadays, and they're very eco-friendly and convenient.

Multiple issues: 'it's very popular' mismatches referent (bicycles plural) so use plural 'bicycles are' (present tense agreement). 'gas are' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; use 'gas prices are' or 'gas is' but 'gas prices are' is clearer. 'nowadays' is better placed after the clause or before 'gas prices'. 'eco friendly' should be hyphenated as 'eco-friendly' when used before or after a noun. Also join clauses with 'and' and keep consistent plural pronoun 'they're' referring to bicycles.

× It's cheap way of transportation and in our neighborhood, umm, everyone, especially the men has a bike.

✓ It's a cheap way of transportation, and in our neighborhood, everyone, especially the men, has a bike.

Missing article: 'cheap way' needs 'a' (article error). The phrase 'everyone... has' is correct for singular 'everyone', so 'has' is fine; however the original punctuation was awkward. Ensure commas around the insert 'especially the men'. Suggestion: add 'a' before 'cheap' and improve punctuation to clarify meaning.

× So it's uh, also a form of exercise.

✓ So it's also a form of exercise.

The only issue is filler 'uh' which is not grammatical; remove hesitation for a clear sentence. The pronoun 'it' correctly refers to 'bicycling' or 'using a bike'—keep as is. Suggestion: omit fillers and keep concise phrasing.'