Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct, use correct tense and grammar, reduce hesitations, and add a brief reason or feeling with linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence (I didn't have a bike as a child), then explain why or how you felt, using words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

Example: I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents bought bikes for my two younger brothers, so I often felt left out. Because of that, I spent more time playing with my friends' bikes than with my own.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and hesitations, complete your sentence, and provide a specific reason or example. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and a varied vocabulary (common, widespread, especially among children). Keep it to 2–3 clear sentences.

Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children. For example, many neighborhoods have parks and bike lanes, so kids often ride their bikes after school. This visibility encourages other children to want bikes as well.

× Honestly umm I don't have a bike when I was a child but what making me jealous is that my parents bought a bike for my umm 2 younger brothers.

✓ Honestly, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but what made me jealous was that my parents bought a bike for my two younger brothers.

The sentence mixes present tense 'don't have' with past time reference 'when I was a child'; use past tense 'didn't have'. 'What making me jealous' is ungrammatical; use past simple 'what made me jealous' or 'which made me jealous' because the action happened in the past. Also use 'two' instead of the numeral '2' in formal speech. Suggested improvement: keep verb tenses consistent (past with past time markers) and use past simple for completed actions. Suggested fixes: replace 'don't have' with 'didn't have', replace 'what making me jealous is' with 'what made me jealous was'.

× I think bikes are pretty popular in my country, umm, especially for kids, uh, because I think umm, kids always wanted to have bikes because they see some of their.

✓ I think bikes are pretty popular in my country, especially among kids, because children often want bikes when they see other kids with them.

The original has awkward repetition and tense mismatch: 'kids always wanted' mixes past with the present general statement 'I think bikes are pretty popular'; use present simple 'often want' or 'always want' for general truths. 'Especially for kids' is better as 'especially among kids' or 'for children'. The clause 'because they see some of their' is incomplete and unclear; clarify as 'when they see other kids with them' or 'when they see some of their friends with bikes'. Suggested improvement: avoid repeating 'I think' and maintain present simple for habitual or general statements; complete the comparative clause by specifying 'other kids' or 'their friends'.