Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and repeat words. Also correct small grammar errors (e.g., “a pink bike,” “my grandmother gave it to me”).

Example: Yes. I had a pink bike when I was a child. My grandmother gave it to me as a birthday present, and I enjoyed riding it around the neighborhood with my brother and sister. It was especially fun on weekends when we raced each other for ice cream.

Suggestion: Answer directly, then give two specific reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (e.g., “drivers don’t respect cyclists,” “they can be stolen”) and choose clearer vocabulary (e.g., “unsafe,” “common”). Remove hesitation fillers.

Example: Not really. In Argentina cycling is not very popular at the moment because it is often unsafe: drivers don’t respect cyclists and bike lanes are scarce. In addition, bike theft is quite common, which discourages people from using bicycles for daily travel.

× And I really liked to ride around the neighborhood with my, uh, brother and sister.

✓ And I really liked riding around the neighborhood with my brother and sister.

After verbs of liking in the past (liked), the gerund (verb + -ing) is commonly used for general activities. 'Liked to ride' is not strictly wrong but 'liked riding' is more natural. Also remove filler 'uh' and extra comma for clarity.

× Uh, yes, I had a pinky bike when I was a child.

✓ Uh, yes, I had a pink bike when I was a child.

'Pinky' is an adjective that is unusual here; the intended meaning is likely 'pink' (color). Use the correct adjective 'pink'. No article error otherwise, but this fits 'article errors' category as substitution of word; however main issue is word choice.

× Was a, when I was a little girl, my grandmother, uh, gave to me, gave it to me, uh, as a birthday present.

✓ When I was a little girl, my grandmother gave it to me as a birthday present.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and redundant fragments. Start with a time clause 'When I was a little girl,' then subject 'my grandmother' and verb 'gave' plus direct object 'it' and prepositional phrase 'as a birthday present.' Remove redundancies 'gave to me, gave it to me' and filler 'uh.' This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× Hmm well at the moment no because umm I am from Argentina and over there is not too safe to ride a bike because the driver don't respect the site by the people that are cycling and also they they can be stolen.

✓ Hmm, well at the moment no, because I am from Argentina and over there it is not very safe to ride a bike. Drivers do not respect cyclists, and bikes can also be stolen.

Multiple issues: 'over there is not too safe' needs subject 'it' (There be/structure) and better adverb 'very' instead of 'too' — classified here as third person singular and related structures. 'The driver don't' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; use 'Drivers do not' (plural subject + do not). 'Respect the site by the people that are cycling' is incorrect phrasing; use 'respect cyclists.' Also streamline repetition 'they they' and split into two sentences for clarity. Use 'can also be stolen' to express possibility.