Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, use past tense consistently, and give one or two specific supporting details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a brief reason or example using linking words. Avoid unnecessary phrasing like “take on bikes.”

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride on my own in our driveway because my parents were busy, and after a few weeks I could cycle confidently to the nearby park.

Suggestion: Answer directly first (Yes/No), then explain briefly with specific reasons or examples. Use clearer, simpler phrasing and correct tense. Avoid long, confusing clauses; use linking words such as 'because' or 'however' to connect ideas.

Example: No, bikes were not very popular in the country where I grew up. For example, most children preferred indoor games and there were few safe cycling paths near my home, so I usually only rode around my yard.

× 'I did have a bike when I was a child, although I practiced by myself because I wanted to be independent and have the leisure to take on bikes wherever and whenever I can.'

✓ 'I did have a bike when I was a child, although I practised by myself because I wanted to be independent and have the leisure to ride bikes wherever and whenever I could.'

'practiced/practised' is a spelling variant (American/ British); change to past simple "practised" (or "practiced") to match past time. The phrase "take on bikes" is incorrect collocation; use the verb + -ing collocation "ride bikes". Also modal tense must match past time: "can" should be "could". Suggestion: use verbs appropriate to past context and common collocations: "practised by myself" and "ride bikes ... could".

× 'While I grew up and was born in a different country where kids like me are secluded in the type of games and freedom and so I only rode bikes around my house.'

✓ 'I grew up and was born in a different country where kids like me were restricted in the kinds of games and freedom, so I only rode bikes around my house.'

'While' at the start is unnecessary and causes tense confusion; use simple past "I grew up and was born". "are secluded in the type of games and freedom" is ungrammatical: use "were restricted in the kinds of games and freedom" to match past context. "type" should be plural "kinds" and "secluded" is the wrong verb; "restricted" or "limited" fits. Remove redundant conjunctions and use clear past tense verbs to match the time frame.

× 'So it wasn't really popular in my country where I lived.'

✓ 'So it wasn't really popular in the country where I lived.'

'my country where I lived' is redundant and awkward. Use "the country where I lived" or "my country". Tense "wasn't" correctly uses past; just simplify the noun phrase for clarity.