Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện tính tự nhiên, ngữ pháp và rõ ràng: tránh tiếng ỗn (uh), dùng thì đúng (past simple), sửa động từ (tend → tended, decide → decided), dùng cụm từ ngắn gọn hơn và một câu chủ đề rõ ràng. Thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể nếu cần (ví dụ: khoảng cách, an toàn). Ví dụ cấu trúc: chủ đề + lý do + một chi tiết bổ sung. Hạn chế câu quá dài và lặp từ.

Example: No, I didn’t. When I was a child I usually walked everywhere because it was difficult for me to balance on a bicycle. Also, most places I went were close to home, so walking was more convenient.

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, từ vựng chính xác và rõ ràng: tránh từ sai (equivalent, riot), dùng danh từ số nhiều và động từ chia đúng (bikes are popular), kết hợp thành mệnh đề hoàn chỉnh thay vì câu rời. Thêm ví dụ cụ thể (giá rẻ, tiện lợi, môi trường, giao thông). Sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý (for example, because, so).

Example: Yes, definitely. Bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and easy to use, especially for children and older people. For example, many families buy bicycles for short trips to the market or school.

× Uh, actually no, because when I was a child I tend to work by foot because, uh, it will be very, very hard for me to ride a bike, so I decide to, uh, use my feet usually.

✓ Uh, actually no, because when I was a child I tended to walk because it would have been very hard for me to ride a bike, so I usually decided to go on foot.

The student mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. The sentence refers to a past habit, so past simple should be used: 'tended' instead of 'tend' and 'decided' instead of 'decide'. 'Will be' is future, but in a past context the correct form is 'would have been' or simply 'was'. Also 'work by foot' and 'use my feet' are awkward; use 'walk' or 'go on foot'. Recommendation: maintain consistent past tense for past situations and choose natural verbs like 'walk' or 'go on foot'.

× Uh, definitely, in my country bike are equivalent, especially for the two children and the elderly.

✓ Uh, definitely, in my country bikes are common, especially for children and the elderly.

The noun 'bike' is singular but the verb refers to bikes in general, so plural 'bikes' is needed to match the plural verb 'are'. Also 'equivalent' is incorrect here; 'common' or 'popular' is appropriate. Remove 'the two' which is ungrammatical in this context. Recommendation: use plural nouns for general statements and choose correct adjectives like 'common' or 'popular'.

× Because it could be affordable to purchase one and everyone can access to riot.

✓ Because they are affordable to purchase and everyone can afford to access them.

The phrase 'access to riot' is incorrect and unclear. 'Access' usually takes an object without 'to' when followed by a noun (access something) or 'access to' before a noun, but here the intended meaning seems to be 'afford' or 'use'. Also 'one' mismatches plural earlier; use 'they' or 'a bike' consistently. Recommendation: use 'affordable' correctly and verbs like 'afford' or phrases like 'have access to bikes' depending on intended meaning.