Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: ปรับโครงสร้างให้ชัดเจนและประโยคสั้นลง พูดตอบตรงคำถามก่อน (topic sentence) แล้วเสริมรายละเอียดสั้นๆ ใช้คำเชื่อมเมื่อจำเป็น และหลีกเลี่ยงคำอืม/คำตะกุกตะกัก ฝึกใช้ tense และวลีที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'I'm a student' และ 'I will start my degree in three months.'

Example: I'm a student at Al Bukhari International University. At the moment I am studying at the university's language centre, and in about three months I will begin my bachelor's degree in business administration.

Suggestion: พูดให้เป็นประโยคที่ถูกต้องทางไวยากรณ์ เริ่มด้วยประโยคตรงคำถามแล้วให้รายละเอียดที่ชัดเจน ใช้ลำดับคำถูกต้องและหลีกเลี่ยงการซ้ำ เช่น 'I study in Kedah, which is in the north/south of Malaysia' ตรวจสอบคำว่า north/south ให้ถูกต้องตามสถานที่จริง

Example: I study at Al Bukhari International University in Kedah, Malaysia. Kedah is in the northwest part of the country, so the campus is located in that region.

Suggestion: เริ่มด้วยประโยคตอบตรง แล้วให้เหตุผลสั้นๆ ใช้ linking words เช่น 'because' และ 'for example' ระบุรายละเอียดเฉพาะเจาะจงมากขึ้น เช่น ประสบการณ์หรือภาษาที่ได้เรียนรู้ หลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำและคำอืม

Example: Yes, it's a great place to study because there are many international students. For example, I often talk with classmates from Japan and other countries, which helps me learn about different cultures and improve my language skills.

Suggestion: ตอบตรงคำถามแล้วให้เหตุผลเฉพาะ ใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมเช่น 'environment' หรือ 'temperature' แทน 'atmosphere' ลดการอ้ำอึ้ง และใช้โครงสร้างเงื่อนไขง่ายๆ เช่น 'If I could change something, I would ...'

Example: If I could change something about my university, I would improve the temperature in some areas. It gets very hot at midday, so installing more fans or air conditioning would make students more comfortable.

Suggestion: เริ่มด้วยประโยคหัวข้อแล้วให้แผนที่ชัดเจน ใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง ('marketing' แทน 'honey marketing') และลดการพูดซ้ำ อธิบายเหตุผลสั้นๆ และใช้โครงสร้างอนาคตเช่น 'I want to study ... because I plan to ...'

Example: In the future I plan to study business administration with a focus on marketing because I want to become an entrepreneur. Studying marketing will help me understand customers and run my own business successfully.

× Now I'm student at Al Bukhari International University, so after now I'm study uh, at language centre uh, and then after that about three month I study in the degree, the bachelor of uh, administration business.

✓ Now I'm a student at Al Bukhari International University. At the moment I am studying at a language centre, and in about three months I will start my degree in business administration.

The original contains multiple sentence structure and article errors. Use the article 'a' before 'student' and 'a language centre'. Use present continuous 'I am studying' for current ongoing action. Replace 'after now' with 'at the moment' and 'about three month' with 'in about three months'. Express future start with 'I will start' to show planned future. Use correct word order: 'business administration' not 'administration business'. Suggestion: Break long run-on sentences into shorter clear sentences, check articles before singular countable nouns, use present continuous for ongoing actions and future with 'will' for near planned events.

× I am study at Kedah, Malaysia, name of university Al Bukhari International University and then they locate the South of Malaysia.

✓ I study in Kedah, Malaysia. The university is called Al Bukhari International University and it is located in the south of Malaysia.

Use simple present 'I study' for routine or current place of study rather than 'I am study' (which is ungrammatical). Use 'in Kedah' not 'at Kedah'. Use 'is called' to give the name and 'is located' for location. Use lowercase 'south' only if not part of a proper name. Suggestion: Use correct verb forms and prepositions for places: 'study in [city/state]'; 'located in the south'.

× Of course, because in university have, uh, many student from another country, so, uh, when I have a free time, I can uh, discuss with friend from another country.

✓ Of course, because the university has many students from other countries, so when I have free time I can discuss with friends from other countries.

Use 'the university' with the definite article and the verb 'has' to show possession. Use plural 'students' and 'friends' and plural 'countries'. Omit 'a' before 'free time'. Suggestion: Match singular/plural nouns with appropriate forms and include definite article for a specific university.

× So I get new experience and then I get a new language, uh, such as, uh, friends, Japan and another.

✓ So I gain new experiences and also learn new languages, for example from friends from Japan and other countries.

Use 'gain' or 'get' with plural 'experiences'. 'A new language' is unclear; better to say 'learn new languages'. Clarify 'friends, Japan and another' to 'friends from Japan and other countries'. Suggestion: Use clear noun phrases and pluralize when referring to more than one.

× Uh, in my opinion, I want to change about atmosphere because sometime, uh, in the midday have, uh, atmosphere so hot.

✓ In my opinion, I would change the atmosphere because sometimes at midday the atmosphere is very hot.

Phrase 'change about atmosphere' is incorrect; use 'change the atmosphere'. Use 'sometimes' (adverb) and 'at midday' for time. Use 'the atmosphere is very hot' rather than 'have atmosphere so hot'. Suggestion: Place adverbs correctly and use 'be' verbs to describe conditions.

× And then, uh, if I can change, I want to change atmosphere to cold because make me happy and then comfortable.

✓ If I could change it, I would make the atmosphere cooler because it would make me happy and comfortable.

Use conditional modal 'could' and 'would' to express hypothetical changes. Use 'it' to refer to 'the atmosphere' and 'cooler' as comparative adjective. Include the subject 'it' before 'would make me'. Suggestion: Use conditional forms (if + past modal, would + base verb) for hypothetical situations and proper pronouns.

× For me in the future, I want to study about business administration, uh, honey marketing because I want to, I want to be a businessman in the future.

✓ In the future I want to study business administration, especially marketing, because I want to become a businessman.

Use 'study business administration' without 'about'. 'Honey marketing' appears to be a mispronunciation; use 'marketing' or 'honey marketing' only if specific. Use 'become a businessman' rather than repetitive 'I want to, I want to be'. Suggestion: Use concise phrasing for future plans and correct field names.

× So this one of my dream in the future, I want to be businessman. So that's why I say like this.

✓ This is one of my dreams for the future: I want to be a businessman. That's why I say this.

Use 'This is one of my dreams' with 'dreams' plural and 'for the future'. Include the article 'a' before 'businessman'. Simplify 'So that's why I say like this' to 'That's why I say this.' Suggestion: Use correct articles and plural forms, and avoid redundant phrasing.