Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the answer more concise and natural by starting with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g. "as of now" and "still"). Pronunciation and sentence fluency could be improved by reducing hesitations and smoothing pauses.

Example: I work full time at a healthcare facility in Sherbrooke. I have been there for nearly seven years, and I enjoy it because I care for elderly patients and can make a real difference in their daily lives.

Suggestion: Use a clear past tense structure and natural phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a brief specific detail (e.g. institution or reasons) and avoid awkward phrasing like "to the Philippines" or "was graduated".

Example: I studied nursing in my hometown in the Philippines and graduated in 2011. It has been one of the most fulfilling choices of my life because it allowed me to help vulnerable people.

Suggestion: Give a concise reason and use natural linking words. Correct grammar (e.g. "students" instead of "those who wants") and simplify the phrase about board results for clarity.

Example: Yes, it is a good place to study because it is a private institution with a strong record of students passing the nursing board exam each year. Therefore, I would recommend it to aspiring nurses.

Suggestion: Be direct: the question asks about changes, but the answer mainly praises the place. First state whether you'd like changes, then give one or two specific suggestions using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct grammar (e.g. "pictures environment", "you can able").

Example: Actually, I wouldn't change much because the campus is calm and surrounded by trees, which helps me concentrate. If I had to suggest one improvement, I would add more study areas with better lighting and Wi‑Fi so students can work comfortably.

Suggestion: Respond with a clear topic sentence about your plan, then give specific steps and a timeframe, using linking words. Remove filler sounds (umm, uh) and correct phrasing ("reduce some other academic evaluation") — explain concretely what you need to complete first.

Example: I plan to pursue a master's degree in nursing within the next few years. First, I need to complete some required professional courses and pass additional certification exams, after which I will apply for graduate programs.

× I'm currently working as a full time employee in the healthcare facility in Sherbrooke.

✓ I'm currently working as a full-time employee at a healthcare facility in Sherbrooke.

Use of 'full time' should be hyphenated as 'full-time' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. Use the preposition 'at' (common for workplaces) and 'a healthcare facility' (indefinite article) is more natural than 'the' unless a specific facility already known to listener is meant.

× I've been working there for almost 7 years now and I really love my job because I'm taking care of the elderly and as of now I'm still in that specific job.

✓ I've been working there for almost seven years now, and I really love my job because I take care of the elderly; at the moment I'm still in that position.

Prefer spelling out small numbers in formal speech. 'I'm taking care' suggests a temporary action; 'I take care of the elderly' describes a habitual role, matching present perfect continuous. 'Specific job' is awkward; use 'position'. Combine clauses for clarity.

× I studied nursing in my hometown to the Philippines.

✓ I studied nursing in my hometown in the Philippines.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect here. Use 'in' to indicate location (the Philippines). 'Hometown in the Philippines' correctly locates where the studying took place.

× I was graduated the year 2011 and it was one of the fulfilling career of my lifetime.

✓ I graduated in 2011, and it was one of the most fulfilling periods of my life.

'Was graduated' is awkward in modern English; use active 'I graduated'. 'The year 2011' is shortened to 'in 2011'. 'One of the fulfilling career of my lifetime' is ungrammatical: 'career' is countable and the student likely means 'period' or 'experiences' and should use 'most fulfilling' and 'of my life'.

× Yes, I can say it's a good place to study because it is a private institution and also satisfactory remark of high performance school of being passed for the board exam every year.

✓ Yes, I would say it's a good place to study because it is a private institution with a strong record of students passing the board exam every year.

Original sentence has incorrect phrase 'satisfactory remark of high performance school' and article/use errors. Reword to 'a private institution with a strong record' to express meaning clearly. Use 'students passing the board exam' to make the subject clear.

× And I highly recommend my school to those who wants to pursue nursing in the future.

✓ And I highly recommend my school to those who want to pursue nursing in the future.

Subject-verb agreement: 'those' is plural so use 'want' not 'wants'.

× Yes, I really love the place where I studied because it is calm and tranquil area.

✓ Yes, I really love the place where I studied because it is a calm and tranquil area.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'calm and tranquil area' which is required for singular countable nouns.

× You can study very well because of the the pictures environment.

✓ You can study very well because of the peaceful environment.

Phrase 'the pictures environment' is incorrect; likely intended 'picturesque environment' or 'peaceful environment'. Use 'peaceful environment' for clarity, and remove duplicate 'the'.

× We're surrounded by nature of trees and also it's a calming experience because of that specific place at my school that you can able to focus your study without even thinking something else.

✓ We're surrounded by trees and nature, and it's a calming environment at my school where you can focus on your studies without being distracted.

Remove awkward 'nature of trees' to 'surrounded by trees and nature.' 'You can able to' is incorrect; use 'you can' or 'are able to.' 'Focus your study' should be 'focus on your studies.' 'Without even thinking something else' should be 'without being distracted.' Reorder for clarity.

× My future umm study plan, especially my career path is having a masters degree in nursing.

✓ My future study plan, especially for my career path, is to obtain a master's degree in nursing.

Use 'to obtain' to express the goal, and 'master's degree' needs apostrophe-s. Also restructure phrase for fluency.

× Hopefully it will happen in the future few years from now, but I need to reduce some other academic evaluation first before I will uh fully transitioning in that kind in that field.

✓ Hopefully it will happen within the next few years, but I need to complete some other academic requirements first before I fully transition into that field.

'In the future few years from now' is redundant; use 'within the next few years.' 'Reduce some other academic evaluation' is incorrect—use 'complete some other academic requirements.' Avoid 'before I will fully transitioning'; use 'before I fully transition' (no future auxiliary and correct verb form). 'In that kind in that field' is redundant; use 'into that field.'