Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, correct grammar (e.g. 'I am studying for a BBA in English at Hamdard University'), and give one or two specific reasons briefly. Use linking words like 'because' to connect reasons.

Example: I am a BBA student in English at Hamdard University. I enrolled a few months ago because I am interested in business and want to improve my English for further study abroad.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer first, then one clear supporting detail. Avoid repetition and hesitations. Use correct article usage ('a university student') and clearer linking ('because this course improves my English'). Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

Example: I study at Hamdard University, where I am doing a BBA with a focus on English. I chose this program because it helps me improve my English skills while learning business.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give two specific reasons using linking words. Remove fillers and correct word choice ('students choose this university for its teaching and environment'). Provide concrete examples (friendly teachers, good facilities).

Example: Yes, it's a very good place to study because the teaching quality is high and the teachers are friendly. Also, the campus environment and study facilities are well maintained, which makes learning easier.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion and one or two specific changes with reasons. Use correct verb forms (e.g. 'I would like the university to improve...') and link ideas ('because', 'so that'). Avoid vague phrasing like 'big area but not developing'.

Example: Yes. I would like the university to improve some facilities, such as renovating old buildings and adding more study spaces, because the campus is large but some structures are outdated and need maintenance.

Suggestion: Start with a clear statement of your plans and give specific steps. Correct grammar ('I plan to complete my bachelor's and then pursue a master's abroad') and use linking words ('after that', 'so that') to show sequence and reason. Avoid fillers.

Example: I plan to finish my BBA first, and then apply to study for a master's degree abroad so I can gain international experience and improve my career prospects.

× I am a student at Hamdard University studying for a BBA program in English.

✓ I am a student at Hamdard University, studying in the BBA program in English.

The original sentence is mostly correct but needs article 'the' before 'BBA program' and a comma for clarity. Use 'studying in the BBA program' to show enrollment in a specific program. (ID 22)

× I enrolled a few months ago and I chose UH this course because I'm interesting in business and improving my English, for UH, for abroad, for my highest, for my high study.

✓ I enrolled a few months ago and I chose this course because I'm interested in business and in improving my English for studying abroad and for higher studies.

Errors: 'chose UH this course' is incorrect word order and extraneous 'UH'; 'I'm interesting' should be 'I'm interested' (adjective vs present participle). 'for abroad' and 'for my highest, for my high study' are unclear; corrected to 'for studying abroad and for higher studies.' This fixes adjective form, word order, and preposition use. (IDs 13,6,11,26)

× Well, I'm studying at Hamdad University.

✓ Well, I'm studying at Hamdard University.

The university name was misspelled 'Hamdad' instead of 'Hamdard'. Proper nouns must be spelled correctly; no article is needed before the university name here. (ID 26)

× Uh, I'm, uh, I'm an university student.

✓ Uh, I'm, uh, I'm a university student.

Use 'a' before words beginning with a consonant sound; 'university' begins with a consonant sound /juː/, so 'a university student' is correct. (ID 22)

× I'm studying at uh, uh, BBA in English.

✓ I'm studying in the BBA program in English.

Use 'in the BBA program' or 'for a BBA in English' rather than 'studying at BBA'. This corrects preposition and article use. (IDs 11,22)

× It's very uh, because of this course is improving my uh, English level.

✓ It's good because this course is improving my English level.

Remove redundancy and incorrect 'because of' structure: 'It's good because this course is improving my English level.' This corrects sentence structure and removes filler words. (ID 26)

× So that is why I chose to English.

✓ So that is why I chose English.

'Chose to English' is incorrect; you 'choose English' as a subject. Remove the preposition 'to'. (ID 11)

× Yes, definitely it's a very good place, uh, for a study because of every student choice this university for this, uh, teaching, teaching and environment is environment is very well and teachers are good and friendly.

✓ Yes, definitely it's a very good place to study because many students choose this university for its teaching and environment; the environment is very good and the teachers are friendly.

Use 'a very good place to study' not 'for a study'. 'Every student choice' should be 'many students choose' or 'every student chooses' (subject-verb agreement). 'Teaching, teaching' repetition removed and phrase 'environment is environment is very well' corrected to 'the environment is very good.' Added 'its' for possession. Fixed article and verb agreement errors. (IDs 1,27,22,26,13)

× When I get a chance to change anything to, I make change, uh, uh, environment because of this, uh, this big area, but not, uh, not not developing.

✓ If I get a chance to change anything, I would change the environment because the area is large but not developing.

Use conditional 'If I get a chance... I would change' to express hypothetical change. 'Make change' should be 'change' or 'would make changes.' 'This big area, but not developing' clarified to 'the area is large but not developing.' Corrects tense, modal usage, and sentence structure. (IDs 7,4,26)

× So when I get a chance to developing structures.

✓ So when I get a chance, I will develop the structures.

Use base verb after modal/time clause: 'get a chance to develop' not 'to developing.' Alternatively use future 'I will develop.' Also add article 'the' if referring to specific structures. (IDs 8,7,22)

× Well, right now I'm studying uh, BBA in English.

✓ Well, right now I'm studying for a BBA in English.

Use 'studying for a BBA' or 'studying in the BBA program'; include article 'a' before 'BBA.' This corrects preposition and article usage. (IDs 11,22)

× Umm is very important for me and uh, uh, and uh, in my is my dream.

✓ It is very important to me and it is my dream.

Replace unclear 'Umm is' with 'It is'; remove filler words and correct pronoun reference. This improves sentence structure and clarity. (IDs 26,12)

× Uh, in future I go upload for my study.

✓ In the future I will apply to study abroad.

'I go upload for my study' is incorrect. Likely intended 'apply to study abroad.' Use future 'will apply' or 'plan to apply.' Fixed verb choice and preposition. (IDs 7,11,26)

× So uh, in future I complete my graduation and masters in abroad.

✓ So, in the future I will complete my graduation and a master's degree abroad.

Add future auxiliary 'will' for future plan. Use 'a master's degree' (include possessive and article) and use 'abroad' without 'in.' Correct word order and article usage. (IDs 7,22,11)