Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid unnecessary details like the college name unless asked. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add brief supporting details. For example, say "I have completed my degree in BM Multimedia and currently work as a freelance photographer and videographer."

Example: I have completed my degree in BM Multimedia and currently work as a freelance photographer and videographer. This job allows me to use my creative skills and manage my own schedule.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Respond directly and clearly to the question. Use simple sentences and avoid hesitation. For example, say "I have already completed my studies at Eltham Biscuits College, which is near Kothamangalam, where I earned my degree in BM Multimedia."

Example: I have already completed my studies at Eltham Biscuits College, which is near Kothamangalam. I earned my degree in BM Multimedia there.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains irrelevant information like 'health studies'. Be specific and relevant. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, say "Yes, it is a good place to study because it provides professional lectures and well-equipped facilities, especially for media-related courses."

Example: Yes, it is a good place to study because it offers professional lectures and well-equipped facilities. Moreover, it is especially suitable for students pursuing media-related courses.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical mistakes. Express your ideas clearly and use linking words. For example, say "I think the college should add more equipment for the cinematography section because currently, there are limited resources and not enough qualified teachers in that area."

Example: I think the college should add more equipment for the cinematography section because currently, there are limited resources. Also, there are not enough qualified teachers, which affects the quality of education in that field.

Suggestion: Your answer conveys your plans but needs better grammar and clearer structure. Use linking words and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I am planning to go abroad to complete my master's degree in Public Relations because I enjoy communicating with people and sharing information. Additionally, I am interested in media management."

Example: I am planning to go abroad to complete my master's degree in Public Relations because I enjoy communicating with people and sharing information. Additionally, I am interested in media management, which complements my career goals.

× I graduated in my BM Multimedia course in Eldomar by serious college.

✓ I graduated from my BM Multimedia course at Eldomar by Serious College.

The verb 'graduated' is correctly used in past tense, but the prepositions 'in' and 'by' are incorrect here. The correct prepositions are 'from' for the course and 'at' for the college name. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Already I mentioned I now I don't studying.

✓ I already mentioned that I am not studying now.

The original sentence has incorrect verb form 'don't studying'. The correct present continuous negative form is 'am not studying'. Also, the sentence structure is improved by adding 'that' and rearranging words for clarity.

× Uh, I completed my studies in Eltham or Biscuits college.

✓ I completed my studies at Eltham or Biscuits College.

The verb 'completed' is correctly in past tense. The preposition 'in' should be 'at' when referring to a college. Also, proper nouns like 'Biscuits College' should be capitalized.

× Putupadi is near Kothamangalam and my I completed my degree in BM multimedia course.

✓ Putupadi is near Kothamangalam and I completed my degree in the BM Multimedia course.

The phrase 'my I' is incorrect; it should be just 'I'. Also, the definite article 'the' is needed before 'BM Multimedia course' to specify the course.

× Yes, I think it's a good place for your health studies because you get so many important equipments and also professional lectures and I think a good option for media related courses and students.

✓ Yes, I think it's a good place for health studies because you get a lot of important equipment and professional lectures. I think it is a good option for media-related courses and students.

'Equipments' is incorrect as 'equipment' is an uncountable noun and does not take plural form. 'So many' is replaced with 'a lot of' for uncountable nouns. Also, sentence is split for clarity and 'media related' is hyphenated as 'media-related'.

× I think they can add cinematography section more equipment and evidence a way.

✓ I think they can add more equipment to the cinematography section and improve the facilities.

The phrase 'add cinematography section more equipment' is incorrect in word order and missing prepositions. 'Evidence a way' is unclear; replaced with 'improve the facilities' for clarity. 'More equipment' is the correct quantifier usage.

× And I think only negative side of the course that cinematography field, there are no several options for uh, not good teachers, Therefore that section.

✓ And I think the only negative side of the course is that in the cinematography field, there are not many options and the teachers are not very good in that section.

The sentence has multiple issues: missing articles, incorrect quantifiers ('no several options' should be 'not many options'), and unclear phrasing. The correction clarifies meaning and corrects grammar.

× Nowadays I planning to go abroad and complete my masters in public relation.

✓ Nowadays, I am planning to go abroad and complete my master's in public relations.

The verb 'planning' needs the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense. 'Masters' should be possessive 'master's' and 'public relation' should be plural 'public relations' as it is a field of study.

× I love to work as a public relation officer because I like to communicate everyone and share more things like media related things and also have a little bit plan about media management.

✓ I would love to work as a public relations officer because I like to communicate with everyone and share more things related to media. I also have a small plan about media management.

'Public relation officer' should be 'public relations officer'. 'Communicate everyone' is incorrect; it should be 'communicate with everyone'. 'More things like media related things' is redundant; simplified to 'things related to media'. 'A little bit plan' is incorrect; corrected to 'a small plan'.