Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Instead of 'senior candidate education,' use 'senior secondary education' or 'high school.' Also, avoid redundancy by combining your plans into one clear sentence.

Example: I recently completed my high school education and plan to go abroad for further studies.

Suggestion: Good use of details and linking words. To improve, you could make the answer more natural by avoiding phrases like 'our university' and instead say 'the university I attend.' Also, try to use more varied vocabulary.

Example: I study at the university located in the city center, which is very convenient. The campus offers excellent facilities such as modern libraries and comfortable study areas that help me concentrate better.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use 'types of opportunities' instead of 'many kind of opportunities,' and 'school authorities' instead of 'school owners.' Also, improve sentence structure and vocabulary for clarity.

Example: Yes, it is a great place to study because the school provides various opportunities, including access to electronic gadgets and good books. Moreover, the teachers are well-qualified, which helps me improve my skills.

Suggestion: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar correction. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also' properly. Instead of 'make variation in transport system,' say 'improve the transport system.' Also, correct verb tenses and sentence flow.

Example: Yes, I would like the school to make some changes, such as starting classes later in the morning. Also, improving the transport system would be helpful for students.

Suggestion: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Instead of 'for my father education,' say 'for further education.' Also, 'make dream in my life' should be 'have a dream.' Use clearer sentences and correct vocabulary to express your ideas.

Example: I plan to go abroad for further education. I also dream of earning a degree in a foreign country, which will help me develop various skills, such as cultural exchange and learning a new language.

× Yes, it is definitely a good place to study because there are many kind of opportunities that are provided by school owners including electronic gadget, good books.

✓ Yes, it is definitely a good place to study because there are many kinds of opportunities that are provided by school owners including electronic gadgets and good books.

The phrase 'many kind of opportunities' is incorrect because 'many' requires a plural noun. 'Kind' should be pluralized to 'kinds' to agree with 'many'. Also, 'electronic gadget' should be plural 'electronic gadgets' to match the plural context. Additionally, 'and' is needed between 'electronic gadgets' and 'good books' to list items properly.

× Moreover, teachers are well educated that helps me to improve my skills.

✓ Moreover, teachers are well educated, which helps me to improve my skills.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'that' to connect two clauses. The correct relative pronoun here is 'which' to refer to the whole preceding clause. Also, a comma is needed before 'which' to separate the clauses properly.

× Yes, I would like the place where I study to make some changes including changing the schedule of my school because the school start early at the morning.

✓ Yes, I would like the place where I study to make some changes including changing the schedule of my school because the school starts early in the morning.

The verb 'start' should be in the third person singular form 'starts' to agree with the singular subject 'school'. Also, the preposition 'at' is incorrect here; 'in the morning' is the correct phrase.

× Apart from this, I also make variation in transport system.

✓ Apart from this, I would also like to make variations in the transport system.

The phrase 'make variation in transport system' is incorrect. 'Make variations' is the correct collocation, and 'in the transport system' requires the definite article 'the' before 'transport system'. Also, adding 'would like to' makes the sentence more polite and appropriate for expressing desire.

× I have a plan to go abroad for my father education.

✓ I have a plan to go abroad for my further education.

The phrase 'for my father education' is incorrect and unclear. It seems the intended meaning is 'for my further education'. 'Further education' is the correct term for continuing studies beyond the current level.

× Apart from this, I make dream in my life to get a degree in a broad country that help me to boost different skills including exchanging culture and communicating in another language.

✓ Apart from this, I have a dream in my life to get a degree in a broad country that helps me to boost different skills including exchanging culture and communicating in another language.

The verb 'make dream' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'have a dream'. Also, 'broad country' should be 'abroad country' or better 'a foreign country' or 'abroad'. The verb 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'a degree'.