Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant, but to improve, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid repeating similar phrases. Also, you can add a bit more detail about your role to enrich your response.

Example: I work as a finance officer at LBH, where I am responsible for tracking payments of goods. Additionally, I assist in budget preparation, which I find rewarding because it aligns directly with my academic background in finance.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. To improve, use correct verb tenses and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

Example: I study financial and economic analysis at the University of Palermo. I enjoy this course because it helps me reinforce my knowledge and broaden my horizons in economics and finance.

Suggestion: Your answer has some unclear and incorrect words, which affect clarity. To improve, use accurate vocabulary and provide specific details about the environment and people. Also, ensure your sentences are grammatically correct and coherent.

Example: Yes, the University of Berlin is a good place to study. The campus environment is peaceful, and the local people are very friendly and helpful. The staff at the university are also welcoming and supportive.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains unclear phrases. To improve, express your ideas clearly and avoid unnecessary repetition. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

Example: Overall, I am satisfied with the campus, but I would like them to increase the number of benches available. Currently, there are very few places where students can sit and relax between classes.

Suggestion: Your answer repeats the same idea and lacks detail. To improve, avoid redundancy and provide more specific information about your plans and motivations. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

Example: I have several future study plans, but my main goal is to pursue a PhD in economics. This will allow me to deepen my expertise and contribute to research in the field.

× Well, I stayed at the University of Palermo where I study financial and economic analysis.

✓ Well, I study at the University of Palermo where I study financial and economic analysis.

The verb 'stayed' is in the past tense, which conflicts with the present tense 'study' used later in the sentence. Since the student is currently studying, the verb should be in the present tense 'study' to maintain tense consistency.

× I like this course because I have wanted to reinforce and wanted to broaden my horizon in the field of economics and finance.

✓ I like this course because I want to reinforce and broaden my horizon in the field of economics and finance.

The use of 'have wanted' and 'wanted' indicates past desire, but the context suggests an ongoing or current desire. Using the present tense 'want' is appropriate here to express current intentions.

× The indigents are so welcoming, getting crocheted from the supermarket.

✓ The residents are so welcoming, getting groceries from the supermarket.

'Indigents' refers to poor people and is likely incorrect here; 'residents' fits better. Also, 'getting crocheted' is incorrect; the intended phrase is likely 'getting groceries'. This corrects both vocabulary and plural usage.

× The attendants are also welcoming.

✓ The attendants are also welcoming.

This sentence is grammatically correct with proper plural usage and no errors.

× We were not entirely, but I would like them to make changes to the number of lava benches on campus.

✓ We were not entirely satisfied, but I would like them to make changes to the number of lava benches on campus.

The phrase 'We were not entirely' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'satisfied' completes the thought and clarifies the meaning.

× They are rare.

✓ They are rare.

This sentence is correct; 'They' refers to 'benches' which is plural, and 'are' is the correct plural verb.

× No, you can.

✓ No, you cannot.

The phrase 'No, you can' is unclear and likely incorrect in context. 'No, you cannot' is a more appropriate negative response.

× There are rare number of benches on campus where students can sit for relaxation.

✓ There is a rare number of benches on campus where students can sit for relaxation.

The phrase 'rare number' is singular, so it should be followed by the singular verb 'is' instead of 'are'.

× Well, I have a lot of future study plans, particularly how to attain a PhD in economics.

✓ Well, I have a lot of future study plans, particularly on how to attain a PhD in economics.

The phrase 'particularly how to attain' is awkward; adding the preposition 'on' clarifies the focus of the plans.

× For instance, I would like to get a PhD in economics.

✓ For instance, I would like to pursue a PhD in economics.

Using 'get' is informal; 'pursue' is more appropriate in academic context. Also, this avoids repetition of 'PhD in economics' from the previous sentence.