Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は直接的で明確ですが、より自然な表現と流暢さを高めるために、"specializing in agricultural science" の部分をもう少し自然な言い回しにすると良いでしょう。また、文を少し短くして簡潔にすることも効果的です。

Example: I'm a fourth-year university student in Japan, majoring in agricultural science.

Suggestion: 文法的な誤り（"a so quiet place" は不自然）と語順の問題があります。"in laboratory" は冠詞が必要です。また、"helps me concentrate in my studies" は "helps me concentrate on my studies" が正しいです。より自然な表現に直しましょう。

Example: I often study in the laboratory at my university because it's a very quiet place that helps me concentrate on my studies.

Suggestion: "great press" は誤りで、意味が通じません。"so that" の使い方も不自然です。より自然で簡潔な表現に直し、冗長な部分を省きましょう。

Example: Yes, it's a great place for me because it's really quiet and helps me focus on my studies.

Suggestion: 文法と語彙の誤りが多いです。"I'd like it to change several things" は不自然で、"I'd like to change a few things" の方が良いです。"raw desk" は意味不明で、おそらく "old desk" の誤りでしょう。"the room is bit narrow" は "a bit narrow" と冠詞が必要です。"I hope it makes expand" は不自然で、"I hope it can be expanded" と言い換えましょう。

Example: Yes, I'd like to change a few things. First, I currently use an old desk in my laboratory, so I'd like to have a new one. Second, the room is a bit narrow, so I hope it can be expanded.

Suggestion: "endure master's program" は誤りで、"enroll in a master's program" または "pursue a master's degree" が正しいです。"I hope I love my field in depth" は意味が不明瞭で、"I hope to deepen my knowledge in this field" のように言い換えましょう。

Example: In the future, I plan to enroll in a master's program at Warren University, which is famous for horticultural science, and I hope to deepen my knowledge in this field.

× I often study in laboratory at my university because it's a so quiet place which helps me concentrate in my studies.

✓ I often study in the laboratory at my university because it's such a quiet place which helps me concentrate on my studies.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'laboratory' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Also, 'so quiet' should be 'such a quiet' to correctly modify the noun 'place'. Additionally, the preposition 'in' after 'concentrate' is incorrect; it should be 'on'.

× I often study in laboratory at my university because it's a so quiet place which helps me concentrate in my studies.

✓ I often study in the laboratory at my university because it's such a quiet place which helps me concentrate on my studies.

The verb 'concentrate' is followed by the preposition 'on' when indicating the focus of attention. Using 'in' is incorrect in this context.

× Yes, it's great press for me because it's really quiet so that it helps me concentrate on my studies.

✓ Yes, it's a great place for me because it's really quiet so it helps me concentrate on my studies.

The word 'press' is a typo and should be 'place'. Also, the indefinite article 'a' is needed before 'great place' because it is a singular countable noun. The phrase 'so that' is unnecessary here; 'so' suffices to show cause and effect.

× Firstly, currently I use a raw desk in my laboratory so that I'd like a new desk.

✓ Firstly, currently I use a raw desk in my laboratory so I would like a new desk.

The phrase 'so that' is used to indicate purpose and is not appropriate here; 'so' is better to indicate consequence. Also, 'I'd like' is expanded to 'I would like' for clarity.

× Secondly, the room in my laboratory is bit narrow so I hope it makes expand.

✓ Secondly, the room in my laboratory is a bit narrow so I hope it can be expanded.

The phrase 'bit narrow' requires the article 'a' before 'bit'. The phrase 'makes expand' is incorrect; the correct passive form is 'can be expanded' to express the hope for change.

× In the future, I am planning to endure master's program at Warren University, which is famous for horticultural science, and then I hope I love my field in depth.

✓ In the future, I am planning to enter a master's program at Warren University, which is famous for horticultural science, and then I hope to study my field in depth.

The verb 'endure' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'enter' when referring to joining a program. Also, 'master's program' requires the indefinite article 'a'. The phrase 'I hope I love my field in depth' is awkward; 'I hope to study my field in depth' is clearer and grammatically correct.