Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cevabınızda gereksiz tekrarlar ve dolgu kelimeler ("uh", "umm") bulunmakta. Daha doğal ve akıcı bir cevap için dolgu kelimelerden kaçının ve cümlenizi daha net ve kısa yapın.

Example: I am currently studying at Bilkan University in the preparatory school, and I hope to start my department next year.

Suggestion: Cümleniz biraz uzun ve karışık. Bağlaçlar kullanarak cümlenizi daha akıcı ve mantıklı hale getirebilirsiniz. Ayrıca, bazı ifadelerinizde dilbilgisi hataları var, bunları düzeltmelisiniz.

Example: I study at Belkin University, currently in the preparatory program to improve my English. I hope to start my Psychology department next year because I am very interested and curious about learning new things.

Suggestion: Cümlenizde dilbilgisi hataları ve dolgu kelimeler var. Ayrıca, ifadeleriniz daha spesifik ve net olmalı. Bağlaçlar kullanarak cümlenizi daha tutarlı yapabilirsiniz.

Example: In my opinion, it is the best university in Ankara because it offers many facilities like study abroad programs. The teachers are highly qualified and help students achieve good grades, which benefits future job opportunities.

Suggestion: Cümleniz anlaşılması zor ve bazı kelimeler yanlış kullanılmış. Daha açık ve doğru ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi bağlaçlarla bağlayarak daha akıcı yapabilirsiniz.

Example: To be honest, I don't want to change anything about my university because I love it. The campus and social activities have improved a lot. I have good friendships there and I learn many things that help improve my academic performance.

Suggestion: Cümlenizde dilbilgisi hataları ve dolgu kelimeler var. İfadelerinizi daha net ve doğru yapmalısınız. Ayrıca, bağlaçlar kullanarak cümlenizi daha tutarlı hale getirebilirsiniz.

Example: It depends, but currently I want to study abroad because there are more opportunities to earn money. Also, I want to enroll in an advanced psychology program because I am curious about human behavior and want to become a professional in my field.

× For now I'm uh, going pre preparatory school umm, but I hope that I will go to my department uh, next year.

✓ For now, I'm uh, going to preparatory school, umm, but I hope that I will go to my department uh, next year.

The phrase 'going pre preparatory school' is incorrect because the verb 'going' should be followed by the preposition 'to' when indicating movement towards a place. Also, 'pre preparatory' is redundant; 'preparatory' is sufficient. Suggestion: use 'going to preparatory school'. This corrects the preposition usage and redundancy.

× I study at Belkin University for currently I'm studying preparatory program to improve my English skills, but I hope that I will go to my department next year, Psychology, because I'm very interested in and I'm very curious about new things that I learn.

✓ I study at Belkin University. Currently, I'm studying a preparatory program to improve my English skills, but I hope that I will go to my department next year, Psychology, because I'm very interested in it and I'm very curious about new things that I learn.

The original sentence has awkward structure and missing prepositions. 'For currently' is incorrect; 'Currently' alone suffices. 'Studying preparatory program' needs an article: 'a preparatory program'. Also, 'interested in' requires an object; 'it' is added to complete the phrase. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× In my opinion, it is the best place in Ankara to study the university.

✓ In my opinion, it is the best place in Ankara to study at the university.

The phrase 'to study the university' is incorrect because 'study' here requires a preposition 'at' to indicate location. Adding 'at' before 'the university' corrects the sentence. This is an article and preposition usage issue.

× It provides lots of facilities such as going abroad, and its teacher is very uh, high level teachers which can help you to uh, get good grades, which is good for future jobs.

✓ It provides lots of facilities such as opportunities to go abroad, and its teachers are very high-level teachers who can help you to get good grades, which is good for future jobs.

The original sentence has pronoun and number agreement errors. 'Its teacher is very uh, high level teachers' mixes singular and plural forms incorrectly. 'Teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to match 'high-level teachers'. Also, 'such as going abroad' is vague; 'opportunities to go abroad' is clearer. 'Which' should be 'who' when referring to people. These corrections fix pronoun and number agreement and improve clarity.

× To be honest, I don't want to change my UH where I educate because I love it very much.

✓ To be honest, I don't want to change my university where I study because I love it very much.

'My UH' is unclear; likely 'university' is intended. 'Where I educate' is incorrect because 'educate' is transitive and requires an object; the student likely means 'where I study'. Correcting to 'where I study' fixes the pronoun and verb usage.

× It the campus and the social expectations are very improve improve.

✓ The campus and the social expectations have greatly improved.

'It the campus' is incorrect; likely 'The campus' is intended. 'Are very improve improve' is ungrammatical; 'improve' is a verb, not an adjective or adverb. The correct form is 'have greatly improved' to indicate past improvement. This corrects adjective/adverb misuse and sentence structure.

× Also I have a good friendships in there and I learn lots lots of things and it's improve my academic performance.

✓ Also, I have good friendships there and I learn lots of things and it improves my academic performance.

'A good friendships' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'friendships'; article should be removed. 'In there' is better as 'there'. 'It's improve' is incorrect; 'it improves' is correct subject-verb agreement. These corrections fix pronoun and verb agreement errors.

× It's depends, but now I just want to go to study abroad because there are more facilities to earn much more money.

✓ It depends, but now I just want to go study abroad because there are more opportunities to earn much more money.

'It's depends' is incorrect; 'It depends' is correct as 'depends' is a verb and does not need 'is'. 'Go to study abroad' is awkward; 'go study abroad' or 'go to study abroad' can be used, but 'go study abroad' is more natural. 'Facilities' is not the correct word here; 'opportunities' fits better. These corrections fix modal verb and word choice errors.

× Also, I want to uh, do a high lessons uh program in psychology because I'm curious about the human behavior and I want to be a professional in my job.

✓ Also, I want to do a higher-level program in psychology because I'm curious about human behavior and I want to be a professional in my job.

'Do a high lessons program' is ungrammatical; 'higher-level program' is the correct adjective phrase. 'The human behavior' should be 'human behavior' without 'the' as it is a general concept. These corrections fix adjective usage and article errors.