Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is informative but a bit lengthy and slightly redundant. Try to make your response more concise and natural by directly answering the question first, then briefly adding relevant details. Avoid phrases like 'on the other hand' when contrasting your roles, as it sounds unnatural here.

Example: I'm currently studying at a university in London while working temporarily for a Japanese newspaper company. My assignment here is to learn about climate change empowerment issues.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. For example, use 'environment' instead of 'circumstance' and connect ideas smoothly with linking phrases like 'which means' or 'so'.

Example: I study in the Bloomsbury area, which is part of central London. I love the environment there because I can concentrate on my studies, and when I want to relax, I can easily visit places like Soho or Camden, so it's an ideal location for students.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and coherent by using better linking words and more precise vocabulary. Instead of 'go through', use 'visit' or 'access'. Also, explain why visiting these places helps refresh your mind.

Example: Yes, I think my university's location is ideal, especially for international students, because we can easily visit famous places like the British Museum and Big Ben. This makes it easy to relax and refresh our minds after studying.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but could be clearer and more natural. Use linking words like 'because' to connect ideas smoothly, and avoid awkward phrases like 'more concentrate'. Also, clarify what 'UH area' refers to for clarity.

Example: I would like my university to expand the libraries because the current study areas, especially in the UH area, have become too crowded due to the increase in student numbers over the past ten years.

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but contains informal language and some grammatical errors. Avoid using 'wanna' in formal speaking and clarify your goals with correct grammar. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Example: After completing my master's degree, I plan to return to my company. However, my ultimate goal is to pursue a PhD and become a doctor. Therefore, once I am back in Japan, I will look for the best place to continue my studies.

× I came to the UK on temporary assignment because the company and my boss ordered me to gain a lot of knowledge about empowerment issues on the climate change.

✓ I came to the UK on a temporary assignment because the company and my boss ordered me to gain a lot of knowledge about empowerment issues on climate change.

The modal verb usage is correct, but the article 'a' is missing before 'temporary assignment', which is necessary to specify the noun. Also, 'the climate change' should be 'climate change' as it is an uncountable noun and does not require 'the'.

× I study in Bloomsbury area which is a part of the central London and I love that circumstance because I can concentrate on studying and when I want to refresh my mind, I can easily reach central London such as Soho or Camden.

✓ I study in the Bloomsbury area, which is a part of central London, and I love that environment because I can concentrate on studying and when I want to refresh my mind, I can easily reach central London areas such as Soho or Camden.

The preposition 'in' is correct, but 'Bloomsbury area' needs the definite article 'the' because it is a specific area. 'The central London' should be 'central London' without 'the' because 'central London' is a proper noun phrase. 'Circumstance' is incorrectly used; 'environment' or 'surroundings' is more appropriate. Also, 'reach central London such as Soho or Camden' is awkward; 'reach central London areas such as Soho or Camden' is clearer.

× Yes, I believe the location of my university is one of the ideal choices, especially for international students because we can easily go through famous destinations such as the British Museum and Big Ben, for example.

✓ Yes, I believe the location of my university is one of the ideal choices, especially for international students because we can easily go to famous destinations such as the British Museum and Big Ben, for example.

The phrase 'go through' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'go to' when referring to visiting places.

× I'd like my university to expand the libraries so that we can more concentrate on studying.

✓ I'd like my university to expand the libraries so that we can concentrate more on studying.

The modal verb 'would like' is used correctly, but the adverb 'more' is misplaced. It should come after the verb 'concentrate' to form the correct phrase 'concentrate more'.

× I think that is because UH area seems to be too crowded to study as the number of students has increased dramatically in these 10 years.

✓ I think that is because the UH area seems to be too crowded to study as the number of students has increased dramatically in the last 10 years.

The phrase 'these 10 years' is incorrect; 'the last 10 years' is the correct expression. Also, 'UH area' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific area.

× After completing a masters degree, I have to go back to my company.

✓ After completing a master's degree, I have to go back to my company.

The modal verb 'have to' is used correctly, but 'masters degree' should be 'master's degree' to show possession.

× However, my final goal is to get the PhD and to be a doctor.

✓ However, my final goal is to get a PhD and to be a doctor.

The modal verb usage is correct, but 'the PhD' should be 'a PhD' because 'PhD' is a general degree, not a specific one.

× So after I go back to Japan, I wanna search for the best place for study.

✓ So after I go back to Japan, I want to search for the best place to study.

The informal contraction 'wanna' should be replaced with 'want to' in formal speech. Also, 'for study' should be 'to study' to correctly express purpose.