Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Apni answer e kichu grammar error ache, ar kichu word choice o thik moto hoy nai. Apni 'Harry studies' bolsen, jeta bujhte oshubidha hoy. Apni 'IELTS exam' er jonno porashona korchen bole spasto korte paren. Sentence gulo ke aro natural korte, simple ar clear language use korun.

Example: Currently, I am a student preparing for the IELTS exam to achieve a good score. I completed my HSC exam in the Science stream in 2023.

Suggestion: Apnar answer e kichu grammar ar word choice error ache, jemon 'doing a study' er bodole 'studying' bola uchit. 'Aisles result' er bodole 'IELTS result' bola dorkar. Apni linking words use korte paren jate answer ta aro coherent hoy.

Example: Currently, I study at home because I want to achieve a good IELTS result. However, if it gets noisy or distracting, I go to the nearby library to focus better.

Suggestion: Apni bhalo kore express korechen, kintu kichu repetition ache, ar kichu grammar error o ache. 'Nephews or niece are little' er bodole 'my little nephews and niece' bola bhalo. Apni linking words use kore answer ke aro fluent korte paren.

Example: Yes, definitely. My home is the most comfortable place for me to study. However, sometimes I get distracted because my little nephews and niece make noise.

Suggestion: Apnar answer e kichu grammar ar word order error ache. 'Where I miss studies' er bodole 'where I study' bola uchit. Apni sentence gulo ke aro simple ar clear korte paren, ar linking words use korte paren.

Example: Honestly, I don't want to make any changes to my study place because it is comfortable. Whenever I study at home, I feel satisfied and motivated.

Suggestion: Apni bhalo idea diyechen, kintu grammar ar sentence structure e improvement dorkar. 'I'm little bit passionate' er bodole 'I am a bit passionate' bola bhalo. 'I would love to be a cyber security' er bodole 'I would love to be a cybersecurity specialist' bola uchit. Apni linking words use kore answer ke aro fluent korte paren.

Example: It's a tricky question, but I am a bit passionate about technology. Therefore, I plan to do my bachelor's degree in cybersecurity, and in the future, I would love to become a cybersecurity specialist.

× Currently I'm a student and I try to pursue a good result in IELTS exam for my Harry studies.

✓ Currently I'm a student and I am trying to pursue a good result in the IELTS exam for my higher studies.

The sentence uses 'try' which is simple present tense, but the context requires present continuous 'am trying' to indicate an ongoing action. Also, 'Harry' is a typo for 'higher'. Use 'the' before 'IELTS exam' as it is a specific exam.

× Currently I'm a student and I try to pursue a good result in IELTS exam for my Harry studies.

✓ Currently I'm a student and I am trying to pursue a good result in the IELTS exam for my higher studies.

The phrase 'IELTS exam' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific exam. Also, 'Harry' should be corrected to 'higher'.

× However, I have completed my HSC exam in Science stream in 2023.

✓ However, I completed my HSC exam in the Science stream in 2023.

The use of present perfect 'have completed' is less appropriate with a specific past time 'in 2023'. Simple past 'completed' is correct. Also, 'Science stream' needs 'the' before it.

× Currently I'm doing a study in my home because I'm trying to pursue aisles result.

✓ Currently I'm studying at home because I'm trying to pursue a good IELTS result.

'Doing a study' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'studying'. Also, 'in my home' is better as 'at home'. 'Aisles result' is a typo for 'IELTS result'.

× That's why I give time to my study in my home.

✓ That's why I give time to my studies at home.

Use 'studies' (plural) instead of 'study' here. Also, 'in my home' is better expressed as 'at home'.

× But whenever I feel so noise or something polluted, I go to the library that's nearby my house.

✓ But whenever I feel there is too much noise or pollution, I go to the library that's near my house.

'Feel so noise' is incorrect; it should be 'feel there is too much noise'. 'Something polluted' is incorrect; 'pollution' is the correct noun. 'Nearby my house' should be 'near my house'.

× But sometimes I get distracted because my nephews or niece are little.

✓ But sometimes I get distracted because my nephews or niece are little children.

The sentence is unclear; 'little' alone is ambiguous. Adding 'children' clarifies meaning. Also, 'nephews or niece' is singular/plural mix but acceptable here.

× Sometimes they create some noise. That's why I I get distracted to my study.

✓ Sometimes they create some noise. That's why I get distracted from my study.

The phrase 'distracted to my study' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'distracted from my study'.

× Honestly, I don't want to make any changes where I miss studies because I think it is a perfect place for my studies because it's a comfortable place and whenever I studied at my home, I feel some kind of satisfaction and the achievement.

✓ Honestly, I don't want to make any changes to my study place because I think it is perfect for my studies. It's comfortable, and whenever I study at home, I feel a sense of satisfaction and achievement.

'Where I miss studies' is incorrect; it should be 'to my study place'. 'Whenever I studied' should be 'whenever I study' to match present tense. Sentence structure improved for clarity.

× It's a tricky question for me but I'm little bit passionate about technology that's why I think I try to do my bachelors in cybersecurity and in my future I would love to be a cyber security because I love technology.

✓ It's a tricky question for me, but I'm a little bit passionate about technology. That's why I think I will try to do my bachelor's in cybersecurity, and in the future, I would love to be a cybersecurity professional because I love technology.

'I try to do' should be 'I will try to do' to express future intention. 'Bachelors' should be 'bachelor's'. 'Cyber security' as a profession should be 'cybersecurity professional'. Added commas for clarity.