Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and slightly unclear. Try to start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add brief supporting details. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

Example: I am currently a student studying healthcare because I want to become a doctor in the future. I have completed my senior secondary education and am passionate about this career path.

Suggestion: Your answer is good but can be more concise and natural. Start with a direct answer, then add specific details using linking words to improve coherence.

Example: I study in my hometown, Amritsar. My favourite place to study is my room because I have decorated it to suit my needs, which helps me concentrate better.

Suggestion: Your answer repeats ideas and has some grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure.

Example: Yes, it is the best place for me to study because it is decorated according to my preferences. For instance, I have a study table and a bright lamp that help me focus better.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear but can be more natural and concise. Avoid phrases like 'according to me' and use simpler expressions to sound more fluent.

Example: No, I don't want to make any changes because my room is already decorated to meet my needs and it suits me well.

Suggestion: Your answer is too long and contains some grammatical mistakes and redundancy. Try to give a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words. Also, avoid repeating the same ideas.

Example: I plan to continue my studies to become a doctor because I am passionate about helping people. This career allows me to care for patients, especially the elderly and those suffering from illnesses.

× My best place for studying is my room because I have decorated it according to my needs and it provides me a better concentration to study.

✓ My best place for studying is my room because I have decorated it according to my needs and it provides me better concentration to study.

The phrase 'a better concentration' is incorrect because 'concentration' is an uncountable noun and should not be preceded by the article 'a'. Removing 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Well, according to me it is the best place for studying because the room that I study is decorated according to my needs and it provide all the opportunities and all the needs that I want.

✓ Well, according to me it is the best place for studying because the room where I study is decorated according to my needs and it provides all the opportunities and all the needs that I want.

The verb 'provide' should be in the third person singular form 'provides' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'the room that I study' is awkward; 'the room where I study' is more appropriate.

× For example, there is a study table and a big lamp which helps me which provide a lot of help to study.

✓ For example, there is a study table and a big lamp which help me and provide a lot of help to study.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to both 'study table' and 'big lamp' (plural), so the verbs should be plural 'help' and 'provide' instead of singular 'helps' and 'provide'. Also, 'which' is repeated unnecessarily; combining the clauses improves clarity.

× As I mentioned earlier that I have completed my study in the medical stream, so I want to become a doctor in the future and it is one of my dream.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I have completed my study in the medical stream, so I want to become a doctor in the future and it is one of my dreams.

The phrase 'one of my dream' is incorrect because 'dream' should be plural 'dreams' when preceded by 'one of my'. Also, the conjunction 'that' after 'mentioned earlier' is unnecessary and removed for correctness.

× This is because I am very passionate with my with this career and it helps me to make people very happy because this is the stream and this is the study that will deal with the old patient and the people who are suffering with disease.

✓ This is because I am very passionate about this career and it helps me to make people very happy because this is the stream and this is the study that will deal with old patients and people who are suffering from disease.

The correct preposition with 'passionate' is 'about', not 'with'. Also, 'the old patient' should be plural 'old patients' without 'the' for general meaning. The phrase 'suffering with disease' should be 'suffering from disease' as 'from' is the correct preposition here.