Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating unnecessary details and try to use linking words if you add more information.

Example: I work at Purolator Shipping Center, a warehouse in Mississauga West.

Suggestion: Your answer does not directly respond to the question about where you study. Try to answer the question directly with a topic sentence and add supporting details if needed, using linking words to connect ideas.

Example: I studied business at Northern College in Scarborough, where I completed my diploma.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and fluent. Avoid repetition and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, be specific about the facilities.

Example: Northern College in Scarborough is a good place to study because it offers excellent facilities, such as a well-stocked library and a modern computer lab.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to organize your ideas clearly, use linking words, and be concise.

Example: Yes, I would like to see the cafeteria expanded because it currently has only four benches, which is insufficient for classes of 60 students. It is often difficult to find a seat during breaks.

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but could be clearer and more natural. Use linking words to connect your ideas and correct grammar mistakes for better clarity.

Example: I plan to become a financial advisor at a bank. To achieve this, I will start my fourth diploma in 2027.

× Yes, there are something that I want to change in my college that is the space of cafeteria.

✓ Yes, there is something that I want to change in my college, which is the space of the cafeteria.

The phrase 'there are something' is incorrect because 'something' is singular and requires the singular verb 'is' instead of 'are'. Also, 'space of cafeteria' needs the definite article 'the' before 'cafeteria' to specify the particular cafeteria.

× It has only four benches in the cafeteria and other classes of 60 students.

✓ It has only four benches in the cafeteria and other classes have 60 students.

The original sentence is unclear and lacks a verb for 'other classes'. Adding 'have' clarifies that other classes consist of 60 students. Also, 'classes of 60 students' is plural, so the verb must agree accordingly.

× This it is it was very difficult to sit in the lunchroom during the break.

✓ Therefore, it was very difficult to sit in the lunchroom during the break.

The original sentence contains redundant and confusing words ('This it is it was'). Replacing it with 'Therefore' improves clarity and sentence structure.

× So I would like to change that in future.

✓ So I would like to change that in the future.

The phrase 'in future' is missing the definite article 'the'. The correct expression is 'in the future' when referring to a time ahead.

× For that I have to complete my 4° diploma that I will start in 2027.

✓ For that, I have to complete my 4th diploma, which I will start in 2027.

The ordinal number should be written as '4th' instead of '4°'. Also, adding a comma after 'For that' improves readability, and 'which' introduces the relative clause correctly.