Part 1
Examiner
Do you work or are you a student?
Candidate
I'm at under graduate student which is still didn't get into the work. Yeah. An I mean, that's getting up. Being a student is more better than being work 'cause. Still then is more things can enjoy about it.
Examiner
Where do you study?
Candidate
And this study at in Hong Kong with university within it an. The university is a scam. You it help me get more enjoy within it. Yeah.
Examiner
Is it a good place to study?
Candidate
Yeah, since that the university have a big area for us to reading, maybe this sometimes is for us. 4:30 is a quite a good environment for us, especially the student armor is very hot working within their academic performance. Yeah, I can get there.
Examiner
Would you like the place where you study to make any changes?
Candidate
Yeah, IK specially the traffic is. Quite terrible yeah is always suck to him especially making a lot of accident within the world nearby our university at his hope that the traffic system can more better and. Can get a bit changed from them.
Examiner
What are your future study plans?
Candidate
Actually I didn't have a long term trend from that since I'm just starting a college is similar, just maybe just connect to the university. Meanwhile I still didn't have a big step from that future about what career or such. So the plan for me?
Do you work or are you a student?
Score: 40.0Suggestion: Try to give a clear and grammatically correct answer directly addressing the question. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. Use simple, correct sentences and explain your opinion with a reason.
Example: I am an undergraduate student and have not started working yet. I think being a student is better than working because I can enjoy learning and have more free time.
Where do you study?
Score: 30.0Suggestion: Provide a clear and relevant answer about your study location. Avoid unclear or inappropriate comments like 'the university is a scam'. Use correct sentence structure and explain why you enjoy studying there if possible.
Example: I study at a university in Hong Kong. I enjoy it because the campus is beautiful and the teachers are helpful.
Is it a good place to study?
Score: 35.0Suggestion: Answer directly whether the place is good for studying. Use clear sentences and provide specific reasons or examples. Avoid unclear phrases and improve grammar.
Example: Yes, it is a good place to study because the university has large libraries and quiet study areas. Many students work hard to achieve good results.
Would you like the place where you study to make any changes?
Score: 40.0Suggestion: Give a clear answer about changes you want, using correct grammar and vocabulary. Explain your point with specific details and linking words for coherence.
Example: Yes, I would like the traffic around the university to improve because it is often congested and causes accidents. If the traffic system were better, it would be safer and more convenient for students.
What are your future study plans?
Score: 35.0Suggestion: Respond clearly about your future study plans. Use correct grammar and vocabulary, and organise your ideas logically. If you are unsure, say so clearly and explain your current situation.
Example: I am just starting college, so I do not have long-term study plans yet. I hope to continue to university, but I am still thinking about my future career options.
× I'm at under graduate student which is still didn't get into the work.
✓ I'm an undergraduate student who still hasn't started working.
The phrase 'under graduate student' should be 'undergraduate student' as one word. 'Which is still didn't get into the work' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'who still hasn't started working' to correctly refer to the student and use proper tense and structure.
× Being a student is more better than being work 'cause.
✓ Being a student is better than working because.
The phrase 'more better' is incorrect; 'better' is the comparative form and does not need 'more'. Also, 'being work' should be 'working' to use the correct verb form after 'being'.
× Still then is more things can enjoy about it.
✓ There are still more things to enjoy about it.
The original sentence lacks a clear subject and uses 'then' incorrectly. 'There are' introduces existence properly, and 'more things to enjoy' is the correct phrase.
× And this study at in Hong Kong with university within it an.
✓ I study at a university in Hong Kong.
The phrase 'at in Hong Kong with university within it an' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'at' for the university and 'in' for the location. Also, 'a university' is needed for correct article usage.
× The university is a scam.
✓ The university is great.
The word 'scam' is likely a misuse or mistranslation here. Assuming the student means the university is good, 'great' or 'good' is appropriate. If 'scam' was intended, it is a noun and not an adjective describing the university positively.
× You it help me get more enjoy within it.
✓ It helps me enjoy it more.
The phrase 'You it help me get more enjoy within it' is ungrammatical. The correct structure is 'It helps me enjoy it more' with proper verb agreement and word order.
× Since that the university have a big area for us to reading, maybe this sometimes is for us.
✓ Since the university has a big area for us to read, sometimes it is for us.
'University' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' not 'have'. 'To reading' should be 'to read' as the infinitive form. The sentence is also restructured for clarity.
× 4:30 is a quite a good environment for us, especially the student armor is very hot working within their academic performance.
✓ The environment is quite good for us, especially since the students are very hardworking in their academic performance.
'4:30 is a quite a good environment' is unclear and likely incorrect. 'Student armor is very hot working' is incorrect; it should be 'students are very hardworking'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correctness.
× Yeah, IK specially the traffic is. Quite terrible yeah is always suck to him especially making a lot of accident within the world nearby our university at his hope that the traffic system can more better and.
✓ Yes, especially the traffic is quite terrible. It often causes many accidents near our university. I hope the traffic system can be improved.
The original sentence has many errors in preposition use and word choice. 'Suck to him' is incorrect; 'causes many accidents' is appropriate. 'Can more better' should be 'can be improved' for correct modal and adjective use.
× Can get a bit changed from them.
✓ I hope some changes can be made.
The phrase 'Can get a bit changed from them' is unclear and ungrammatical. Using 'I hope some changes can be made' is clearer and grammatically correct.
× Actually I didn't have a long term trend from that since I'm just starting a college is similar, just maybe just connect to the university.
✓ Actually, I don't have a long-term plan yet since I'm just starting college, which is similar to just connecting to the university.
'Didn't have' is past tense but the context is present. 'Long term trend' should be 'long-term plan'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correct tense.
× Meanwhile I still didn't have a big step from that future about what career or such.
✓ Meanwhile, I still don't have a clear idea about my future career or plans.
'Didn't have' should be 'don't have' to match present context. 'Big step from that future' is unclear; 'clear idea about my future career' is more appropriate.
× So the plan for me?
✓ So, what is the plan for me?
The original is a fragment and not a complete sentence. Adding 'what is' makes it a proper question.