School— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve sentence structure and grammar to be fully natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid sentence fragments (e.g., "Sat among...") and keep answers to a maximum of five sentences.

Example: My school is in Dongguan City, Guangdong province. It is situated among lakes and green spaces, so the campus is very peaceful. Because it is away from the busy city center, we can study without much noise, and the sports fields and gardens make it pleasant to relax between classes.

Suggestion: This response is natural and well-organized. To reach a higher score, link ideas more smoothly and vary vocabulary to avoid repetition (e.g., use 'conveniently located' or 'easily accessible'). Keep responses concise and focused on one or two strongest supporting details.

Example: Yes, I like my school even though it's relatively small. It has a well-stocked library and extensive sports facilities, and I can cycle across campus in under ten minutes, which is very convenient. Additionally, a nearby subway station makes it easy to travel to other parts of the city for activities.

Suggestion: Very good answer: clear topic sentence, relevant supporting details, and a personal example. To improve further, use a linking word to connect your points (e.g., "Moreover," or "In addition,") and avoid repeating phrases already used in earlier answers by paraphrasing (e.g., "tranquil environment" instead of repeating "peaceful").

Example: Yes, I think it's an excellent place to study. In addition to its tranquil environment surrounded by lakes and green spaces, the library offers a wide range of books, journals, and online resources, and I often use it to prepare for exams or work on group projects in a quiet corner.

Suggestion: Good content and specific details. To be more natural and concise, avoid repeating information from previous answers and maintain consistent grammar (e.g., "well-stocked" and avoid capitalizing common nouns like "Sports Center"). Use a linking phrase to combine study and recreation points smoothly.

Example: The campus is surrounded by lakes and green spaces, which create a quiet atmosphere for studying. It also has a well-stocked library, a swimming pool, and a large sports center, so students can easily balance study with recreational activities.

Suggestion: Strong, clear answer with personal example and reason — very effective. To make it slightly more natural, correct tense consistency ('I chose' not 'I choose') and link the general statement to the example with a phrase like "for instance" or "for example" (you already used one; ensure smooth flow).

Example: I think interest is extremely important because it motivates students to engage with the material and makes learning feel less like a chore. For example, I was always fascinated by biology, which is why I chose to major in pharmacy. As a result, I really enjoy my courses and tend to study topics more deeply.

× Sat among lakes and green spaces, which makes the campus very peaceful.

✓ It is situated among lakes and green spaces, which makes the campus very peaceful.

The original fragment 'Sat among lakes and green spaces' lacks a subject and verb to form a complete independent clause (sentence structure error). Replacing it with 'It is situated among lakes and green spaces' provides a clear subject and verb, matching the prior sentence about the school's location and keeping tense consistent.

× It also has a well stocked library, a swimming pool, and a large Sports Center, so students have access to a wide range of facilities for both study and recreation.

✓ It also has a well-stocked library, a swimming pool, and a large sports center, so students have access to a wide range of facilities for both study and recreation.

The phrase 'well stocked' needs a hyphen when used as a compound adjective before a noun ('well-stocked library'). 'Sports Center' does not require capitalization in this context; 'sports center' is the common noun form. These are article/capitalization and adjective formation issues; hyphenation improves clarity.

× For example, I'm interested in biology, which is why I choose to major in pharmacy.

✓ For example, I'm interested in biology, which is why I chose to major in pharmacy.

The student mixes present interest with a past decision. The verb 'choose' should be in the past tense 'chose' if the decision to major was made previously. This aligns tense usage and maintains logical time sequence.

× I really enjoy my courses and I tend to study more deeply.

✓ I really enjoy my courses, and I tend to study more deeply.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but needs a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses correctly (sentence structure/punctuation). Tense is present and consistent. The correction adds the necessary punctuation for clarity.