Clothing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct word choice; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers, correct phrases (e.g., 'body-con dresses' -> 'bodycon dresses'), and give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: I like a variety of clothes, but I often wear bodycon dresses because they make me feel confident and presentable. However, on weekdays I prefer sports T-shirts because they are comfortable for work and long hours. For special occasions I choose smarter outfits to look more professional.

Suggestion: Correct grammar and sentence structure, remove repetition, and use linking words to explain reasons. Use plural/singular and articles correctly (e.g., 'customers' -> 'clients' or 'patients') and finish sentences clearly.

Example: I prefer comfortable clothes to smart clothes. As a dietitian, I sit with clients for long periods, so comfort helps me focus and speak freely. Therefore, I usually choose breathable, professional-looking casual clothes that do not distract me or my clients.

Suggestion: Good enthusiasm and clear preference; improve grammar and conciseness, use linking words and specific reasons or examples (e.g., why polo shirts are preferred). Avoid repetition like 'presentable and confident' twice.

Example: Yes, I love wearing polo T-shirts; they are my go-to style because they look neat and make me feel confident. Also, polos are comfortable and less restrictive than tight clothes, so I can move freely during the day.

Suggestion: Make sentences clearer and correct awkward phrases. State the main point first, then give concise reasons and examples. Use correct collocations (e.g., 'spend time choosing clothes', 'I prefer online shopping', 'I like simple pieces and designs').

Example: Not really. I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I am busy with work and family. I prefer online shopping and usually buy a few simple pieces in neutral colors that I can wear often.

Suggestion: Use fewer fragments and correct punctuation; present a clear topic sentence then contrast weekdays and weekends with linking words (e.g., 'however', 'but'). Avoid contradictory or vague phrases.

Example: It depends on the occasion. On weekdays I usually wear casual T-shirts and sportswear to stay comfortable, but if there is a celebration or gathering I choose smarter, stylish outfits or more fitted clothes to look appropriate.

Suggestion: Be specific and concise: state your main preference then give clear reasons and examples. Correct grammar (e.g., 'colors', 'that help me', 'patients'). Avoid filler words and vague claims like 'feel more recognized.'

Example: I like many colors, but I especially prefer green and white because they feel calm and professional. For example, wearing green often helps me create a friendly atmosphere with my patients, while white looks clean and trustworthy.

× I appreciate wearing all kind of clothes, uh.

✓ I appreciate wearing all kinds of clothes, uh.

Use the plural form 'kinds' after 'all' when referring to multiple types. 'All kind' is uncountable/incorrect; 'all kinds of' is the correct quantifier for multiple categories.

× body cone dresses are really suitable to me as I feel more confident and more presentable while wearing it.

✓ Bodycon dresses are really suitable for me because I feel more confident and more presentable when I wear them.

Use the correct adjective 'bodycon' and preposition 'for' with 'suitable'. Match pronoun number: 'dresses' requires 'them' not 'it'. Use 'because' to link clauses and 'when I wear them' for natural wording.

× Uh, beside this, I always prefer wearing sports T-shirts during my weekdays.

✓ Uh, besides this, I always prefer wearing sports T-shirts on weekdays.

Use 'besides' (not 'beside this') to mean 'in addition'. Use 'on weekdays' rather than 'during my weekdays' for natural temporal preposition.

× I always choose where comfortable clothes over smart clothes.

✓ I always choose comfortable clothes over smart clothes.

Remove the incorrect word 'where'. The correct comparative structure is 'choose X over Y' without 'where'.

× Being a dietitian, I have to deal with my customers and sit for longer hours and really don't want to distract myself by managing my smart clothes.

✓ Being a dietitian, I have to deal with my customers and sit for long hours, so I really don't want to be distracted by managing smart clothes.

Use 'long hours' not 'longer' here. Change active 'don't want to distract myself by managing my smart clothes' to passive 'don't want to be distracted by managing smart clothes' for correct meaning and grammar. Remove redundant 'my' before 'smart clothes' for naturalness.

× So I always choose comfortable clothes that I can express my ideas to my patient without disturbing by the.

✓ So I always choose comfortable clothes so I can express my ideas to my patients without being disturbed by them.

Use plural 'patients' for general reference. 'Without being disturbed' is the correct passive form. 'By them' refers back to 'clothes' causing disturbance; structure corrected for clarity.

× Without a doubt, yes, I am huge fan of polo T-shirts and this is my one of the go to style because I feel more presentable and confident wearing T-shirts.

✓ Without a doubt, yes, I am a huge fan of polo T-shirts and this is one of my go-to styles because I feel more presentable and confident wearing T-shirts.

Add indefinite article 'a' before 'huge fan'. Use correct order 'one of my go-to styles' and hyphenated 'go-to'. Maintain plural 'styles' to match 'one of'.

× Moreover, it helps me to feel relaxed which I don't feel in tight fitting clothes.

✓ Moreover, it helps me feel relaxed, which I don't feel in tight-fitting clothes.

Use 'feel relaxed' (omit 'to'). Hyphenate 'tight-fitting'. Add comma before 'which' as nonrestrictive clause.

× Not really, I don't want to waste my time in selecting the clothes because I hardly have time for me for my lesser activity to spend with my family.

✓ Not really. I don't want to waste time selecting clothes because I hardly have any free time to spend with my family.

Split into two sentences for clarity. Use 'waste time selecting clothes' (no 'the'). Replace awkward phrase with 'hardly have any free time' which is natural. Remove redundant 'for me' and 'my lesser activity'.

× I always prefer online shopping and fond of selective peace and design and I don't mind repeating them many times.

✓ I always prefer online shopping and am fond of specific patterns and designs, and I don't mind repeating them many times.

Add verb 'am' for 'am fond of'. 'Selective peace' is incorrect—likely 'specific patterns' or 'pieces'; corrected to 'specific patterns and designs' for clarity. Maintain plural 'designs' to match 'them'.

× It depends upon the occasion I have on the weekdays or on the weekends.

✓ It depends on the occasion I have on weekdays or on the weekend.

Use 'depends on' (not 'depends upon' which is formal but acceptable; 'on' is natural). Use 'on weekdays' and 'on the weekend' for typical contrast.

× If I am having any get together or celebration.

✓ If I have any get-together or celebration,

Make the clause a complete conditional by using 'If I have...' and hyphenate 'get-together'. Keep comma to connect to following main clause.

× I always prefer wearing tight fitting clothes which and stylish clothes.

✓ I always prefer wearing tight-fitting and stylish clothes.

Combine adjectives properly: 'tight-fitting and stylish clothes'. Remove extraneous 'which and'.

× Beside this I always prefer wearing T-shirts, sports attire so I remain relaxed during the day.

✓ Besides this, I always prefer wearing T-shirts and sports attire so I remain relaxed during the day.

Use 'Besides' not 'Beside'. Add comma after introductory adverb. Use 'and' to connect items.

× I appreciate all the colors because I think every color looks good on me more.

✓ I appreciate all colors because I think every color looks good on me.

Remove unnecessary 'the' and 'more'. 'All colors' is natural; 'looks good on me' is sufficient.

× Moreover, I love to select those color which helps me to establish an immediate connection with my patient.

✓ Moreover, I love to select those colors which help me establish an immediate connection with my patients.

Use plural 'colors' to match 'those'. Use plural 'patients' for general reference. Verb should be 'help' to agree with plural subject. Omit unnecessary 'to' after 'help'.

× So always prefer green and white over any other color and I also, uh, feel more recognized.

✓ So I always prefer green and white over any other colors, and I also, uh, feel more recognized.

Add subject 'I' for clarity. Use plural 'colors' after 'other'. Ensure sentence has proper subject-verb structure.