Clothing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more coherent and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, avoid filler words (uh, umm), and correct irrelevant or confusing phrases ("because Indonesian is very hard" is unclear). Provide one or two specific supporting details (styles, typical outfits) using linking words like "and" or "for example." Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: I prefer feminine styles, especially simple and comfortable outfits. For example, I usually wear short skirts or tailored blouses because they feel neat and suit my taste. I also like combining them with comfortable shoes for daily activities.

Suggestion: Answer directly then support with a clear reason and one or two specific examples. Remove unnecessary words and correct grammar ("we are in Indonesia," "when you go to the mall"). Use a linking word such as "because" to connect reason to preference.

Example: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they are accepted in most places in Indonesia. For example, I often wear jeans and a T-shirt when I go to the mall or even to a relaxed office because it feels practical and comfortable.

Suggestion: Be specific and avoid vague or mistaken words ("dish Blues" likely incorrect). State your opinion clearly, then give specific examples of what you wear instead. Use linking words like "so" or "instead" to connect ideas and keep sentences concise.

Example: I don't usually wear plain T-shirts because they feel too casual for me. Instead, I prefer a neat blouse with cotton trousers and smart shoes when I want to look put-together.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear topic sentence (yes/no or a brief statement), then explain change over time with reasons. Avoid repetition and reduce hesitations. Use linking words like "but" and "now" to show contrast, and give a specific detail about what you do now (e.g., plan outfits once a week).

Example: I used to spend a lot of time choosing my outfits, but now I avoid overthinking it. For instance, I pick a few reliable outfits on the weekend so I don't worry each morning.

Suggestion: Provide a clear comparative statement and explicit examples for weekdays and weekends. Avoid fillers and correct word order ("on weekends" and "on weekdays"). Use linking words such as "while" or "whereas" to signal contrast, and include one specific outfit for each time.

Example: Yes, my style changes a lot. On weekdays I wear informal, comfortable clothes like a simple shirt and trousers for work, whereas on weekends I choose more stylish feminine outfits such as a dress or a fashionable top with jeans.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence listing preferred colours, avoid repetition, and give a brief reason or example for choice. Use linking words like "and" or "because" and be specific about how you use those colours (e.g., for work or casual wear).

Example: I prefer pastel colours and neutral tones such as white, black, and gray because they are versatile. For example, pastel blouses work well for social events, while white and gray are easy to mix for daily outfits.

× Many of my friends, uh, say that I'm, uh, into feminine clothes instead of like, uh, uh, boyish, uh, clothes, but I personally prefer like, umm, yes, the feminine type or, and then, uh, because Indonesian is very hard. Usually I wear like short pants and just a simple.

✓ Many of my friends say that I'm into feminine clothes rather than boyish clothes, but I personally prefer feminine styles. Also, because it is very hot in Indonesia, I usually wear shorts and simple outfits.

The original contains run-on clauses, filler sounds, and unclear references. This is a sentence structure error (26). I split the ideas into clear sentences, removed fillers, replaced 'instead of like' with 'rather than', corrected 'short pants' to 'shorts', and clarified 'because Indonesian is very hard' to 'because it is very hot in Indonesia' based on context. Suggestion: plan sentence structure before speaking, avoid fillers, and use concise phrases.

× I prefer the casual clothes since we are in the Indonesian and everybody especially when you are go to the mall and even office sometimes they allow you to use like comfortable and casual clothes instead of like a formal and like straight clothes that type.

✓ I prefer casual clothes since we are in Indonesia, and especially when you go to the mall or even the office, they sometimes allow you to wear comfortable and casual clothes instead of formal, strict clothes.

Errors include wrong definite article 'the Indonesian' and awkward phrasing; this matches article/definite article errors (22 and 17). I corrected 'the Indonesian' to 'Indonesia', removed 'the' before 'casual clothes', changed 'you are go' to 'you go', and replaced 'straight clothes' with 'strict clothes'. Suggestion: use country names without articles and simplify clauses: 'when you go to...'.

× Now for the T-shirt, I think it's too casual, too informal, so I prefer to go with my daily clothes, which usually include like a dish Blues and then like a cotton long pants and also like formal shoes.

✓ For T-shirts, I think they are too casual and informal, so I prefer to wear my everyday clothes, which usually include a dress blouse, cotton long pants, and formal shoes.

The sentence uses incorrect noun forms and articles and adjective agreement (13). 'T-shirt' as a category uses plural or 'they'; 'dish Blues' is incorrect for 'dress blouse'; 'cotton long pants' should be 'cotton long pants' or 'long cotton pants'. I adjusted to 'everyday clothes' and plural agreement. Suggestion: use correct nouns ('blouse' not 'blues') and match singular/plural with pronouns.

× There was a time when I spend a lot of my time in choosing my daily look and daily clothes, but for now I'm I don't like to I don't like to like think about it and get getting anxiety and on how should I wear it for tomorrow or like that kind of thing. I don't really like it.

✓ There was a time when I spent a lot of time choosing my daily looks and clothes, but now I don't like to think about it or get anxious about how I should dress for the next day.

Original mixes past and present incorrectly and has verb form errors (5 Past tense issue and 6 Present tense issue). 'spend' should be past 'spent' to match 'There was a time'. 'get getting anxiety' is incorrect; use 'get anxious'. Also improved word order 'how should I wear it' to 'how I should dress'. Suggestion: ensure tense consistency and use proper adjective forms like 'anxious' instead of 'anxiety' in this context.

× Yes, my clothes, uh, style on the weekend and on the weekday are very different. Big difference because when you are, when you want to go to the hot mall, usually I prefer the, uh, more stylish, uh, the, the feminine, but stylish instead of uh, for uh, informal casual on weekend, on weekdays.

✓ Yes, my style on weekends and weekdays is very different. For example, when I go to a busy mall on weekends, I usually prefer a more feminine and stylish look, while on weekdays I wear informal, casual clothes.

This contains disfluent, fragmented sentences and unclear comparisons (26 Sentence structure errors). I combined fragments, corrected plural forms 'weekends and weekdays', replaced 'hot mall' with 'busy mall' for clarity, and structured the contrast between weekend and weekday styles. Suggestion: use complete sentences and clear contrast words like 'while' or 'whereas'.

× I'm into the the pastel clothes. I also like the casual clothes, like white, black and Gray. Yeah, I think I like clothes that are good for every kind of occasion.

✓ I'm into pastel clothes. I also like casual colors like white, black, and gray. I think I prefer clothes that are suitable for many occasions.

Repetition 'the the' and incorrect collocation 'pastel clothes' is acceptable but article use and capitalization errors exist (13 and 22). 'Casual clothes, like white, black and Gray' mixes color and clothing terms; better to say 'casual colors' and fix capitalization 'gray'. Suggestion: avoid repeating articles, use 'pastel' without 'the', and use proper capitalization for color words.