Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix tense/number agreement (e.g., “makes” not “make”).

Example: I prefer happy music to sad music. For example, about 70% of the time I choose upbeat songs because their lively rhythms and positive lyrics lift my mood, whereas sad songs rarely make me feel cheerful.

Suggestion: Remove filler words and contradictory statements. Give a clear direct answer, then support it with a brief reason and a specific example of genres you enjoy. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use correct expressions (e.g., “those kinds of music” or “that kind of music”).

Example: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because of its upbeat tempo and catchy melodies. For instance, I often listen to R&B and jazz when I want to boost my energy because their rhythms make me feel lively.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and explain briefly why not, using correct grammar and clearer phrasing. Avoid confusing or incorrect idioms like “completely illiterate and musical instrument.” Instead say “I can’t play any instruments.” Provide one supporting detail (e.g., lack of time or interest as a child).

Example: No, I have never taken formal music lessons. When I was a child I didn’t have the opportunity or interest to learn an instrument, so I still can’t play the piano or violin.

Suggestion: Be concise and correct verbs (e.g., “while driving,” “while doing the dishes,” “while studying”). Start with a clear topic sentence, then list typical activities with linking words like “for example” or “also.”

Example: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other tasks. For example, I listen to music while driving, doing the dishes, and studying because it helps me relax and stay focused.

× I always prefer happy music over sad music, I think at around 70% of the times because happy music always make me feel happy, but sad music which is not necessarily make me feel sad but it doesn't make me feel happy.

✓ I always prefer happy music over sad music; I think about 70% of the time, because happy music always makes me feel happy, while sad music does not necessarily make me feel sad and it doesn't make me feel happy.

Errors: 'at around 70% of the times' uses incorrect quantifier and pluralization; correct phrase is 'about 70% of the time'. Also punctuation run-on fixed. 'make' should agree with singular subject 'happy music' (subject-verb agreement, but limited to quantifier rule here) and 'which is not necessarily make me feel sad' is incorrect clause; replace with 'does not necessarily make me feel sad'. Suggestion: use 'about' with 'time' (uncountable) and simplify clauses for clarity. Note: Although subject-verb agreement (ID 27) and third person singular (ID 2) issues are present, corrections focus on quantifier and clause structure per instruction to only correct listed types.

× happy music always make me feel happy

✓ happy music always makes me feel happy

Error: verb 'make' does not have third person singular -s to agree with the singular collective noun 'music'. In present simple for third person singular add 's' or 'es' to the base verb. Suggestion: use 'makes'.

× but sad music which is not necessarily make me feel sad but it doesn't make me feel happy.

✓ but sad music does not necessarily make me feel sad, and it doesn't make me feel happy.

Error: clause 'which is not necessarily make me feel sad' is ungrammatical; relative clause misuse and missing auxiliary 'does'. Suggestion: use 'does not necessarily make me feel sad' and connect with 'and' for clarity.

× happy music always makes me feel more excited, OK? I love listening to happy music such as R&B, jazz and those kind of stuff.

✓ happy music always makes me feel more excited. I love listening to happy music such as R&B, jazz and those kinds of music.

Errors: 'those kind of stuff' is informal and ungrammatical; 'kind' should be followed by plural noun with 'of' and 'kinds' if plural. Use 'those kinds of music' or better 'that kind of music' or 'those kinds of music'. Also punctuation: replace comma and filler 'OK?' with a period. Suggestion: say 'those kinds of music' or 'that kind of music'.

× I don't like that music, uh, most of the time actually.

✓ I don't like that music most of the time, actually.

Error: unnecessary comma before 'most of the time' and awkward placement of filler. Suggestion: move 'actually' to end and remove pause comma for smoother sentence.

× I have never taken any formal musical classes, unfortunately, and I'm particularly bad at musical instruments.

✓ I have never taken any formal music classes, unfortunately, and I'm particularly bad with musical instruments.

Error: 'musical instruments' after 'bad at' is acceptable but 'bad with' is more natural in this context; 'musical classes' better than 'musical classes' is fine. Also maintain present perfect 'have never taken' which is correct. Suggestion: use 'music classes' and 'bad with' for idiomatic expression.

× I never played piano, violin, all those kind of musical instruments.

✓ I never played the piano or the violin, or any of those kinds of musical instruments.

Error: article use with musical instrument names: use 'the piano/the violin' or no article with 'play' can be acceptable in some dialects; also 'all those kind' should be 'those kinds' (plural). Suggestion: use 'the piano or the violin' or 'piano or violin' and 'those kinds of instruments'.

× I would think I was a child.

✓ I think I was a child.

Error: 'I would think I was a child' is awkward and unclear in this context; likely intent is 'I think I was a child' meaning when asked about past experience. Suggestion: use simple past or present belief: 'I think I was a child' or 'I must have been a child' depending on intended meaning.

× I'm completely illiterate and musical instrument.

✓ I'm completely illiterate when it comes to musical instruments.

Error: missing prepositional phrase and wrong noun form; 'illiterate' needs object or context and 'musical instrument' should be plural. Suggestion: use 'illiterate when it comes to musical instruments' or 'I am completely unskilled at playing musical instruments.'

× Sometimes I really enjoy listening to the music while I'm doing the driving, and sometimes I even listening to the music while I'm just doing the dishes as well.

✓ Sometimes I really enjoy listening to music while I'm driving, and sometimes I even listen to music while I'm just doing the dishes.

Errors: 'doing the driving' is wordy; use 'driving'. 'I even listening' misses auxiliary 'do' and should be 'I even listen'. Also remove extra articles 'the' before 'music' and redundant 'as well'. Suggestion: use gerund correctly and ensure subject-verb agreement: 'I listen'.

× And studying.

✓ And studying too.

Error: sentence fragment 'And studying.' lacks verb and is a fragment. To fit preceding sentence, attach as 'and studying too' or complete as 'and I also listen while studying.' Suggestion: combine with previous sentence: '...dishes, and I also listen while studying.'