Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid fillers and repetition. Improve verb forms and article usage (e.g., “made me relax” → “helps me relax”).

Example: I prefer happy music to sad music. For example, after a long day at work, upbeat songs help me unwind and lift my mood, so I usually play cheerful playlists on my way home.

Suggestion: Give a clear yes/no topic sentence and one specific explanation with correct grammar and linking words. Correct subject-verb agreement and avoid unfinished sentences. Replace vague phrases with concrete effects (e.g., “I feel energetic” or “I feel relaxed”).

Example: Yes, happy music does make me feel more excited because its lively rhythm energises me; when I tap along or clap to the beat, I feel more awake and motivated.

Suggestion: Provide a concise, well-structured response: state whether you took classes, give the time period, and add one specific detail (which instrument, how long, or what you learned). Remove disfluencies and unclear phrases like “I had a job.”

Example: Yes, I took music classes when I was in primary school. I learned the recorder for two years with my classmates, and those lessons taught me basic music notation and ensemble playing.

Suggestion: Answer directly, use correct tense and smoother linking words. Mention specific activities and frequency, and avoid awkward phrasing. For clarity, use one or two concise supporting details.

Example: Yes, I often listen to music while commuting by bus; I usually play podcasts or playlists on my phone. I also sometimes listen to soft music while having meals to relax.

× I like happy music more than sad music. Uh, first of all, I consider that happy music made me relax when I came back from a from school or from work, so yeah.

✓ I like happy music more than sad music. First of all, I find that happy music helps me relax when I come back from school or work.

Errors: 'consider that happy music made me relax' mixes past and present incorrectly and uses 'consider' awkwardly. Use present simple 'find' or 'think' for general truths and 'helps me relax' (present tense) to show habitual effect. Also remove extra 'from' and unnecessary filler 'Uh'. Suggestion: use 'I find that happy music helps me relax when I come back from school or work' to be grammatically correct and natural.

× Yeah, definitely the rhythm of happy music are more are more interesting, and when I listen to the music, I will follow the follow the rhythm and then relax and finally can be.

✓ Yeah, definitely the rhythm of happy music is more interesting, and when I listen to music, I follow the rhythm, relax, and feel calm at the end.

Errors: 'the rhythm... are' is subject-verb disagreement; 'rhythm' is singular so use 'is'. Repetition 'are more are more' and 'follow the follow the' are redundancy/errors. 'I will follow' is unnecessary future; use present simple 'I follow' for habitual action. 'and finally can be' is incomplete; replace with 'and feel calm at the end' for clarity. Suggestion: check singular/plural agreement and avoid redundant words.

× Yes, I had, but it has been for a long time, uh, since I was in the primary school.

✓ Yes, I did, but it was a long time ago, since I was in primary school.

Errors: 'I had' is vague and mismatches 'it has been for a long time'. Use 'I did' or 'I had classes' for past action; 'has been' (present perfect) conflicts with specific past time 'since I was in primary school'. Use simple past 'was' and 'a long time ago'. Also 'the primary school' should be 'primary school' in general. Suggestion: use consistent past tense and omit unnecessary filler.

× When I was in the primary school, I still remember that, uh, I had a job, instrument classes with my classmate and then music classes, uh, were gone.

✓ When I was in primary school, I remember taking instrument classes with my classmates, but those music classes later stopped.

Errors: 'I had a job, instrument classes' is ungrammatical and confusing; likely meant 'I took instrument classes'. 'Classmate' should be plural 'classmates' if referring to more than one. 'Music classes... were gone' is awkward; use 'stopped' or 'were discontinued'. Also tense consistency: use simple past 'remember' can be present but better 'I remember taking' for past experience. Suggestion: say 'I remember taking instrument classes with my classmates, but those music classes later stopped.'

× Yes, I do, uh, when I was, when I'm commuting from home to school, I would love to listen to music on the bus on the other places and I also like to listen music when I'm having meals.

✓ Yes, I do. When I commute from home to school, I like to listen to music on the bus and in other places, and I also like to listen to music when I'm eating.

Errors: mixed tenses 'when I was, when I'm commuting' should be consistent; use present simple 'When I commute' for habitual actions. 'I would love to listen to music' implies desire rather than habit; use 'I like to listen to music' for regular behavior. 'on the other places' is incorrect preposition and article use; use 'in other places'. 'listen music' missing preposition 'to'. 'having meals' is acceptable but 'eating' is more natural. Suggestion: keep tense consistent, use correct prepositions ('to' after 'listen'), and choose verbs that express habitual actions.