Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “I prefer sad or emotional music.”), then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid filler sounds (“uh”) and incorrect word forms (e.g., “have deep lyrics” → “has deep lyrics”).

Example: I prefer emotional (sad) music because it often has deep, meaningful lyrics that resonate with me. For example, songs with an introspective theme help me reflect on my experiences and feelings.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer and explain with specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar and collocations: use “when I listen to music” and “I lose my concentration.” Replace vague phrases like “feel in sleep” with precise descriptions.

Example: Not really. When I listen to upbeat music, I often feel distracted and sometimes sleepy, so I lose concentration when I’m working. For instance, I find it hard to focus on coding if energetic songs are playing.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence then support with specific details and a linking word. Correct word order and forms: “I took classical piano lessons when I was 16” and “I learned techniques but lost my passion after three years.” Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes. I took classical piano lessons when I was 16 and learned how to read music and develop basic techniques. However, after about three years I lost interest because I wanted to focus on other hobbies like programming.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use correct verb forms and collocations: “I listen to music while coding” and “university lessons.” Use linking words to contrast (e.g., “however” or “but”) and give one specific example of when music is helpful vs. distracting.

Example: Yes, I often listen to music while coding or designing websites because it helps me maintain a steady rhythm. However, I avoid music when I study for university lessons or read, because it distracts me and I lose concentration.

× I enjoy with emotional music because uh have a deep lyrics and uh more best music in the world uh have a emo concept.

✓ I enjoy emotional music because it has deep lyrics and is some of the best music in the world; it has an emo concept.

Errors: 'enjoy with' should be 'enjoy' (preposition unnecessary); missing subject for 'have' — use 'it has' for music; 'a deep lyrics' mixes singular article with plural noun — use 'deep lyrics'; 'more best' is incorrect comparative/superlative combination — use 'some of the best' or 'the best'; 'have a emo concept' needs article and subject + 'an emo concept'. Suggestion: remove incorrect preposition, add subjects and correct articles, and use correct comparative form.

× No, because when I listen up music, uh I feel uh in sleep and nervous mood and lose my concentration when I doing other jobs.

✓ No, because when I listen to music, I feel sleepy and nervous and lose my concentration when I am doing other tasks.

Errors: 'listen up music' uses wrong preposition — should be 'listen to music' (preposition error referenced but corrected as tense/verb form and preposition); 'feel in sleep' is wrong phrase — use adjective 'sleepy'; 'nervous mood' can be simplified to 'nervous'; 'when I doing' lacks auxiliary — use present continuous 'when I am doing'; 'other jobs' is better as 'other tasks' or 'other work'. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'to', correct adjectives, and include the auxiliary verb for continuous tense.

× Yes, when I was 16, I went to the piano lessons, classic piano lessons and. Learned how to play piano and got some techniques, but after three years I lost my passion about it.

✓ Yes, when I was 16, I took classical piano lessons. I learned how to play the piano and acquired some techniques, but after three years I lost my passion for it.

Errors: 'went to the piano lessons' is unnatural — use 'took lessons' (verb choice and preposition); 'classic piano lessons' should be 'classical piano lessons' (adjective form); sentence fragment 'and. Learned' — capitalize and join sentences properly; 'play piano' needs article 'the piano' in general contexts; 'got some techniques' is informal — use 'acquired' or 'learned'; 'lost my passion about it' uses wrong preposition — use 'passion for'. Suggestion: use appropriate past tense verbs and correct collocations and prepositions.

× Yes, I listen to music way while I coding computer program program or designing websites. But when I read books or universities lesson I don't like it because I lose my concentration.

✓ Yes, I listen to music while I am coding computer programs or designing websites. But when I read books or attend university lessons I don't like it because I lose my concentration.

Errors: 'listen to music way while' has extra word 'way' — remove it; 'I coding' lacks auxiliary 'am' — use present continuous 'I am coding'; 'computer program program' duplicated and singular — use 'computer programs'; 'universities lesson' incorrect possessive/plural — use 'university lessons' or 'lectures'; also 'attend' is better with 'university lessons'. Suggestion: remove redundant words, add correct auxiliary verbs for continuous tense, fix pluralization and noun forms, and use correct prepositions/verbs for activities.